Hi Behcet, Thanks for the review. We've published version -05 to address your comments, please see my answers below inline.
Thanks, Yingzhen On Thu, Feb 15, 2024 at 10:05 AM Behcet Sarikaya via Datatracker < [email protected]> wrote: > Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. > > Document: draft-ietf-tvr-use-cases-04 > Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya > Review Date: 2024-02-15 > IETF LC End Date: 2024-02-15 > IESG Telechat date: 2024-02-29 > > Summary: > This document describes time-variant routing use cases in terms of resource > preservation, mainly in IoT, operating efficiency in cellular and campus > networks, dynamic reachability mainly in satellite networks. It is > expected to > serve to bring updates to the routing protocols such as IGP, OSPF, etc. It > is > well written, makes a good case, especially with effective use of simple > diagrams and is ready to go. However I have found a few small issues which > can > be easily fixed. Major issues: > > Minor issues: > > Nits/editorial comments: > Section 1. I think that adding a paragraph on what is covered in Section 6 > would help. [Yingzhen]: As suggested by TSVART review, we've removed Section 6 from the document. Section 3. .. such a through Solar Panels : I don't understand what > is meant here, is it solar LED lights? > [Yingzhen]: I've rewritten this paragraph, hope it's clear to you now. For your convenience, the current text is copied here: An illustrative example of a network necessitating resource preservation is an energy-harvesting wireless sensor network. In such a network, nodes rely exclusively on environmental sources for power, such as solar panels. On-board power levels may fluctuate based on various factors including sensor activity, processing demands, and the node's position and orientation relative to its energy source. > Section 4. > clouds on an optical link : why would cloudy weather affect optical link > transmission? [Yingzhen]: I've changed this to "a free-space optical link". Hopefully it makes more sense now. > Section 5. it seems like the term ground station is used to mean > the user antennas. There is also gateway ground stations. Please clarify > this. > [Yingzhen]: I added a sentence about the ground station: A ground station is a facility used to communicate with satellites in low Earth orbit. Hope this helps to clarify. The acronym IGP should be expanded. [Yingzhen]: Done. Section 6. see above my comment on Section > > [Yingzhen]: Section 6 has been removed. > > > -- > Tvr mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/tvr >
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