Hi Yingzhen, Yes, the changes in Rev. 05 look OK to me.
Regards, Behcet On Fri, Feb 16, 2024 at 1:11 PM Yingzhen Qu <[email protected]> wrote: > Hi Behcet, > > Thanks for the review. We've published version -05 to address your > comments, please see my answers below inline. > > Thanks, > Yingzhen > > On Thu, Feb 15, 2024 at 10:05 AM Behcet Sarikaya via Datatracker < > [email protected]> wrote: > >> Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya >> Review result: Ready with Nits >> >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area >> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed >> by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just >> like any other last call comments. >> >> For more information, please see the FAQ at >> >> <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-tvr-use-cases-04 >> Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya >> Review Date: 2024-02-15 >> IETF LC End Date: 2024-02-15 >> IESG Telechat date: 2024-02-29 >> >> Summary: >> This document describes time-variant routing use cases in terms of >> resource >> preservation, mainly in IoT, operating efficiency in cellular and campus >> networks, dynamic reachability mainly in satellite networks. It is >> expected to >> serve to bring updates to the routing protocols such as IGP, OSPF, etc. >> It is >> well written, makes a good case, especially with effective use of simple >> diagrams and is ready to go. However I have found a few small issues >> which can >> be easily fixed. Major issues: >> >> Minor issues: >> >> Nits/editorial comments: >> Section 1. I think that adding a paragraph on what is covered in Section 6 >> would help. > > > [Yingzhen]: As suggested by TSVART review, we've removed Section 6 from > the document. > > Section 3. .. such a through Solar Panels : I don't understand what >> is meant here, is it solar LED lights? >> > > [Yingzhen]: I've rewritten this paragraph, hope it's clear to you now. For > your convenience, the current text is copied here: > An illustrative example of a network necessitating resource preservation > is an energy-harvesting wireless sensor network. In such a network, nodes > rely exclusively on environmental sources for power, such as solar panels. > On-board power levels may fluctuate based on various factors including > sensor activity, processing demands, and the node's position and > orientation relative to its energy source. > > >> Section 4. >> clouds on an optical link : why would cloudy weather affect optical link >> transmission? > > > [Yingzhen]: I've changed this to "a free-space optical link". Hopefully it > makes more sense now. > > >> Section 5. it seems like the term ground station is used to mean >> the user antennas. There is also gateway ground stations. Please clarify >> this. >> > > [Yingzhen]: I added a sentence about the ground station: A ground station > is a facility used to communicate with satellites in low Earth orbit. Hope > this helps to clarify. > > The acronym IGP should be expanded. > > > [Yingzhen]: Done. > > Section 6. see above my comment on Section >> >> [Yingzhen]: Section 6 has been removed. > >> >> >> -- >> Tvr mailing list >> [email protected] >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/tvr >> >
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