Behcet Sarikaya via Datatracker <[email protected]> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the > IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any > other last call comments.
Thank you for the review.
> Nits/editorial comments:
> Sec. 1 This document does not follow that pattern, but future documents
> may update only the YANG module.
-> This document does not follow that pattern, so future
> documents may update only the YANG module.
Changed.
> a new IETF standard mechanism for extensions modeled after the
> mechanism **presented** in [RFC8520]
done
> Sec. 5.1 Constrained IoT devices is an important issue in IoT. The
> document is missing a reference to RFC7228-bis which will become an RFC
> soon.
But no terms from RFC7228 are used.
> Sec. 8
> inappropriate/informal writing: During development of this merged YANG
> module, **advice was given** to better organize mutually exclusive
> Attributes
What do you want me to say?
"It was advised"?
"We were advised"?
"The WG was advised"?
"YANG reviewer suggested"?
> Section 8.3 YANG module is given and there is an Yang doctor review.
Yes?
> Sec. 9.2 RFC XXXX refer to itself as in all documents that contain YANG
> modules it could be changed to "this document"
// RFCEDITOR: please replace XXXX in this entire code fragment
// with the RFC number assigned and remove this notice.
> Acknowledgements contain one author name (the first author)
okay, Kent removed from acknowledgement. We weren't sure who was going to
step back as an author to get <=5.
Posting a new version.
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