Hi Tim,
I have reflected your suggested text below on the revised draft.

Thanks for your help.

Best Regards,
Paul


On Thu, Jan 13, 2022 at 3:17 AM Tim Bray <[email protected]> wrote:

> Thank you so much for addressing this!  May I suggest a couple of slight
> edits to the proposed text, just for clarity and slightly more idiomatic
> English?
>
> <<<<<<<<<<<<
> This section shows XML examples of I2NSF NSF Monitoring data
> delivered via Monitoring Interface from an NSF.  In order for the XML data
> to be used correctly, the prefix (i.e., the characters before the colon)
> in the
> content of the element that uses the "identityref" type
> (e.g., /i2nsf-event/i2nsf-system-detection-alarm/alarm-category/) in
> the YANG module described in this document MUST be the same as the
> namespace prefix for urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-i2nsf-nsf-
> monitoring.  Therefore, XML software MUST be chosen that makes the
> namespace prefix information available.
> <<<<<<<<<<<<<<
>
> I hope that in future we can arrange for YANG namespace registrations to
> include this note?
>
> On Wed, Jan 12, 2022 at 10:07 AM Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong <
> [email protected]> wrote:
>
>> Hi Tim,
>> We authors have addressed your comments in the beginning of Section 11.
>> The update is as follows:
>> ------------------
>> - OLD:
>>
>> 11.  XML Examples for I2NSF NSF Monitoring
>>
>>    This section shows the XML examples of I2NSF NSF Monitoring data
>>    delivered via Monitoring Interface from an NSF.
>>
>> - NEW:
>>
>> 11.  XML Examples for I2NSF NSF Monitoring
>>
>>    This section shows the XML examples of I2NSF NSF Monitoring data
>>    delivered via Monitoring Interface from an NSF.  In order for the XML
>>    to work, the prefix in the element that uses "identityref" type
>>    (e.g., /i2nsf-event/i2nsf-system-detection-alarm/alarm-category/) in
>>    the YANG module described in this document MUST be the same as the
>>    namespace prefix for urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-i2nsf-nsf-
>>    monitoring.  The XML software MUST be chosen that makes the namespace
>>    prefix information available.
>> ------------------
>>
>> Is this update fine to you?
>>
>> Thanks.
>>
>> Best Regards,
>> Paul
>>
>> On Fri, Dec 17, 2021 at 12:03 PM Tim Bray <[email protected]> wrote:
>>
>>> Sorry, but this has the same problem in figure 11.1 that we've just been
>>> discussing with Ian.
>>>
>>> For it to work, (a) the prefix in the alarm-category element MUST be the
>>> same as the namespace prefix for
>>> urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring, which means that XML
>>> software MUST be chosen that makes the namespace prefix information
>>> available.  I don't think it's OK for the draft not to say those thigns.
>>>
>>> <alarm-category
>>>            xmlns:nsfmi="urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:\
>>>                       ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring">
>>>            nsfmi:memory-alarm
>>>          </alarm-category>
>>>
>>>
>>> On Thu, Dec 16, 2021 at 4:25 PM Amanda Baber via RT <
>>> [email protected]> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Hi Tim and Martin (cc: i2nsf WG),
>>>>
>>>> Have you had a chance to review the XML registration in this document?
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model/
>>>>
>>>> thanks,
>>>> Amanda
>>>>
>>>> On Tue Nov 30 21:38:22 2021, michelle.cotton wrote:
>>>> > Dear Tim and Martin,
>>>> > (cc to i2nsf WG)
>>>> >
>>>> > As the designated experts for the ns IETF xml registry, can you review
>>>> > the proposed registration in draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-
>>>> > model-12 for us? Please see
>>>> >
>>>> >
>>>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-
>>>> > model/
>>>> >
>>>> > If this is OK, when the IESG approves the document for publication,
>>>> > we'll make the registration at
>>>> >
>>>> > https://www.iana.org/assignments/xml-registry
>>>> >
>>>> > The IESG has asked us to set a two-week deadline for registration
>>>> > reviews. The due date for this request is 14 December 2021.
>>>> >
>>>> > Thank you,
>>>> >
>>>> > Michelle Cotton
>>>> > IANA Services
>>>>
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