Thanks Joe,

> > A routing system is all or part of a routing network.  A part of a routing
> > network may be a  single router or a collection of routers.  The routing
system
> > may be further divided to be an interface over which data traffic is
forwarded,
> > or a collection of such interfaces.
> >
> > I2RS facilitates real-time or event driven interaction with the routing
system
> > through a collection of control or management interfaces.  These allow
> > information, policies, and operational parameters to be injected into and
> > retrieved (as read or notification) from the routing system while retaining
data
> > consistency and coherency across the routers and routing infrastructure, and
> > between multiple interactions with the routing system.
> 
> I know this was bikeshedded quite a bit --

A bit? ;-)

> and I have no objection to
> the dual meaning -- but I do think that these two paragraphs mix
> "interface" in a way that might be confusing.  A "router" already has a
> management "interface" (either virtual or physical) and that is
> independent of the "interface" mentioned in paragraph two.
> Unfortunately, I don't have a better suggestion other than putting the
> word "programmatic" or "structured" in there to help disambiguate the
> two uses.  However, since this has been beaten to death, and this is
> what the majority agrees to, then so be it.

I think many object to programmatic on account of we are not building an API,
but a protocol.

While "interface" now appears multiple times in the paragraphs, each is
specifically qualified.

> More of a nit, but I think the parenthetical portion should read, "(as
> read or by notification)

Yes

> > Aug 2013 : Request publication of Informational documents describing use
> cases
> 
> While it's written correctly here, you have two 'b's in "describing" in
> the web charter.

Two b's or not two b's?

> From the web charter:
> 
> "The I2RS working group works to develop a framework and architecture
> that will enable specific use cases, and lead to an understanding of the
> informational models and requirements for encodings and protocols. Small
> and well-scoped use cases are critical to constrain the scope of the
> work and achieve sufficient focus for the working group to deliver
> successfully. Initial work within the working group will be limited to
> within a single administrative domain."
> 
> Another grammatical nit, but perhaps the last two sentences could read:
> 
> "Small and well-scoped use cases are critical to constrain the scope of
> the work an achieve sufficient focus for the working group to deliver
> successful outcomes.  Initial work within the working group will be
> limited to a single administrative domain."

I've made these changes.

Cheers,
Adrian

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