On 9/20/16 14:08, internet-dra...@ietf.org wrote:

A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
This draft is a work item of the Interface to the Routing System of the IETF.

        Title           : I2RS Ephemeral State Requirements
        Authors         : Jeff Haas
                          Susan Hares
        Filename        : draft-ietf-i2rs-ephemeral-state-17.txt
        Pages           : 11
        Date            : 2016-09-20

   The I2RS (interface to routing system) Architecture document
   (RFC7920) abstractly describes a number of requirements for ephemeral
   state (in terms of capabilities and behaviors) which any protocol
   suite attempting to meet I2RS needs has to provide.  This document
   describes in detail requirements for ephemeral state for those
   implementing the I2RS higher-protocol.

I have found some issues in this document.  See:


XML diff is attached.

--- draft-ietf-i2rs-ephemeral-state-17.xml      2016-09-20 14:06:28.000000000 
+++ /home/jclarke/src/draft-ietf-i2rs-ephemeral-state-17.xml    2016-09-20 
14:48:00.428510000 -0400
@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@
 <?rfc subcompact="no" ?>
 <?rfc iprnotified="no" ?>
 <?rfc strict="no" ?>
-<rfc category="std" docName="draft-ietf-i2rs-ephemeral-state-17"  
+<rfc category="info" docName="draft-ietf-i2rs-ephemeral-state-17"  
     <title abbrev="I2RS Ephemeral State Requirements">I2RS Ephemeral State 
Requirements </title>
@@ -125,7 +125,7 @@
         sections 3-6 to clarify requirements discussed by the I2RS and NETCONF 
working groups. 
         Section 7 provided additional requirements that detail how 
         should be resolved if two I2RS client write the same data. 
-        Section 8 details an additional requirement that details on I2RS 
+        Section 8 details an additional requirement that describes I2RS 
         of multiple message transactions.
         Section 9 highlights two requirements in the I2RS 
publication/subscription requirements
         <xref target="RFC7923"></xref> that must be expanded for 
@@ -187,7 +187,7 @@ service the valid uses of a non-secure t
 <section title="Ephemeral State Requirements"> 
-In requirements Ephemeral-REQ-01 to Ephemeral-15, Ephemeral state 
+In requirements Ephemeral-REQ-01 to Ephemeral-REQ-15, Ephemeral state 
 is defined as potentially including in a data model 
 ephemeral configuration and operational state which is flagged as 
@@ -213,13 +213,13 @@ ephemeral. 
      short lived operational state nodes, such as MPLS LSP-ID or a BGP IN-RIB.
         Ephemeral state constraints should be assessed when the ephemeral 
        state is written, and if any of the constraints change to make the 
constraints invalid
-       after that time the I2RS agent should notify the I2RS client. 
+       after that time the I2RS agent SHOULD notify the I2RS client. 
    <t>Ephemeral-REQ-04: Ephemeral state MUST be able to refer to non-ephemeral 
    as a constraint. Non-ephemeral state can be configuration state or 
operational state. 
-   <t>Ephemeral-REQ-05: I2RS pub-sub <xref target="RFC7923"></xref>, tracing 
(<xref target="RFC7922"></xref>, 
+   <t>Ephemeral-REQ-05: I2RS pub-sub <xref target="RFC7923"></xref>, tracing 
<xref target="RFC7922"></xref>, 
    RPC or other mechanisms may lead to undesirable 
    or unsustainable resource consumption on a system implementing an I2RS 
    It is RECOMMENDED that mechanisms be made available to permit 
@@ -340,10 +340,9 @@ defined in section 7 below in requiremen
    ephemeral state. I2RS protocol MUST NOT mandate the internal mechanism for 
how AAA protocols 
    (E.g. Radius or Diameter) or mechanisms distribute priority per identity 
except that
    any AAA protocols MUST operate over a secure transport layer (See Radius 
<xref target="RFC6614"></xref>
-   and Diameter <xref target="RFC6733"></xref>. 
-   distribute  priority per identity. 
+   and Diameter <xref target="RFC6733"></xref>). 
-   Mechanisms which prevent collisions of
+   Mechanisms that prevent collisions of
    two clients trying to modify the same node of data are the focus.  
@@ -435,7 +434,7 @@ inserted into the I2RS ephemeral state.
                <t>Juergen Schoenwaelder,</t>
                <t>Kent Watsen,</t>
                <t>Robert Wilton, and</t>
-               <t>Joe Clark,</t>
+               <t>Joe Clarke</t>
@@ -458,4 +457,4 @@ inserted into the I2RS ephemeral state.
\ No newline at end of file
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