Fellow Knight,

Overall, great effort - like they say simplification is more complex
than we think.

I think you should simplify it a little more - have highlighted areas
where I think will not be understood. HTH

>   (a) Linux is an 'Operating System' (OS)

You might need to say what an OS is

that is non-propreitary and falls
> under the Open Source
>   category(OSS).

which means...

> The source code is available for development and
> modification. This has spawned a
>   variety of versions tailormade for various critera. Some of the more known
> flavours

flavors? We all understand this word, am not so sure somebody outside
the roundtable will.

> are Red Hat
>   Linux, Debian, Suse, Mandrake, Mint, Ubuntu etc.
>   (b) Linux is economical in the use of processor time and computing
> resources.

nitpick only: efficient/economical?

> It is flexible and
>   can be scaled to large, small and embedded applications.

Can you make this simpler - like 'is very stable and is the most
widely used internet servers like xxxx, yyy'

> The availability
> of the source code has
>   facilitated this.

uh, how?

> Thus it has found application in servers, embedded
> appliances and devices with
>   specialised and limited application.

You could provide examples here - specifically for the last line above.

> The low cost and flexibility has made
> it an ideal choice for
>   low cost, mass produced, quality computing devices and older systems.

good wording. Maybe elaborate a bit more/drop 'older systems'.

>   (c) It was originally conceptualised by Mr Linus Travos

Torvalds

> aind led to the
> development of many
>   commercial and specialised software products. The variety of flavours and
> distributions have large
>   user groups who offer support and advice. The repository

repository?

> of software and
> aplications are stored on
>   servers and is available freely for download and use.

stored where? on all linux servers? This might need some correction to
be technically correct.


Regards,
-- 
Madan U S
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