Here is my prompt to gemini3:

> Please suggest improvements to Leo's "preface" at 
https://leo-editor.github.io/leo-editor/preface.html

Everything that follows is the response. Looks like I flunked marketing 101:

Based on an analysis of the text at the provided URL, the "preface" (titled 
"A Brief Summary of Leo") exhibits several rhetorical weaknesses that 
undermine its effectiveness for a technical audience.

The current text relies on subjective claims, dated comparisons, and 
insider jargon ("Leonine way"). A skeptical reader will likely view the 
broad listing of features (IDE, PIM, Outliner) as a sign of a tool lacking 
a defined scope, rather than a versatile one.

The following improvements address these issues, focusing on precision and 
verifiable value propositions.

1. Remove the Dated Comparison

*Current:* *“Word outlines are very useful. But Leo makes Word look like a 
clunky toy.”—Joe Orr*

*Critique:* Comparing a developer tool to Microsoft Word is a category 
error. It lowers the ceiling of expectations. Most developers do not use 
Word for code or serious data organization; they use VS Code, Vim, Emacs, 
or Obsidian. Acknowledging Word implies the tool is aimed at non-technical 
office users, which contradicts the later claim that it is a 
"fully-featured IDE."

*Recommendation:* Remove the quote entirely. Start with a direct definition 
of the tool's primary differentiator: the integration of outlining with 
codebase logic.

2. Clarify the "Directed Acyclic Graph" (DAG) Claim

*Current:* *“Leo's underlying data is a Directed Acyclic Graphs. As a 
result, Leo organizes data in completely new ways.”*

*Critique:* Stating the data structure is a DAG is a factual statement 
about implementation, not a benefit. The statement "organizes data in 
completely new ways" is vague marketing fluff. The user needs to know *why* 
a DAG matters (i.e., zero-cost aliasing/cloning of nodes).

*Recommendation:* Replace the implementation detail with the functional 
consequence.

   - 
   
   *Proposed Revision:* "Unlike standard tree-based editors, Leo allows a 
   single node to appear in multiple places simultaneously (clones). Editing a 
   node in one location updates it everywhere, allowing for multidimensional 
   organization of source code."
   
3. Define "The Leonine Way" or Remove It

*Current:* *“Leo's clone find commands enable the Leonine way to refactor 
programs.”*

*Critique:* This is circular terminology. A new user does not know what 
"Leonine" means. Using proper nouns to describe a methodology often signals 
an insular community rather than a standard tool.

*Recommendation:* Describe the methodology strictly in operational terms.

   - 
   
   *Proposed Revision:* "Leo enables refactoring by treating code structure 
   as a manipulatable [sic] outline, allowing you to reorganize large 
   codebases via drag-and-drop operations rather than text cutting and 
   pasting."
   
4. Address the "Jack-of-All-Trades" Risk

*Current:* The list claims Leo is an IDE, an Outliner, a Data Manager, a 
Scripting Environment, and a study tool.

*Critique:* Tools that claim to do everything often trigger skepticism 
regarding their depth in any single area. A developer will question how a 
single tool can compete with IntelliJ (IDE) and Obsidian (PIM) 
simultaneously.

*Recommendation:* Hierarchy is needed. Define the tool primarily as one 
thing (likely a *Literate Programming Editor* or *Scriptable Outliner*) and 
list the others as secondary capabilities derived from that core.

5. Reframe the "Steep Learning Curve" Warning

*Current:* *“You won't learn all about Leo in a day or two... Please ask 
for help immediately if you get stuck.”*

*Critique:* While honest, this frames the complexity as a liability rather 
than an investment. "Ask for help immediately" suggests the UI is 
non-intuitive.

*Recommendation:* Focus on progressive disclosure.

   - 
   
   *Proposed Revision:* "While Leo's advanced scripting features offer 
   depth that takes time to master, the basic outlining features provide 
   immediate utility for navigating complex files."
   
6. Verify the "100% Pure Python" Claim

Assumption: The claim "Written in 100% pure Python" assumes the user values 
interpretability over performance.

Critique: For a modern IDE, "100% Python" may raise concerns about latency 
and UI responsiveness compared to Rust or C++ based editors (like Zed or VS 
Code).

Recommendation: If performance is a concern, qualify this claim by 
explaining why it is Python (e.g., "ensuring the entire editor is hackable 
[sic] and scriptable by the user at runtime").

Summary of Proposed Structural Changes


   1. 
   
   *Headline:* Change from "A Brief Summary" to "Technical Overview".
   2. 
   
   *Lead:* Delete the Word quote. State clearly that Leo is a *scriptable 
   outline editor* for code and data.
   3. 
   
   *Features:* Group features by workflow (e.g., "For Coding," "For 
   Scripting," "For Knowledge Management") rather than a flat list.
   4. 
   
   *Technical differentiation:* explicitly link "Clones" to the DAG 
   structure to explain the mechanism of action.
   
Edward

P.S. Here <https://gemini.google.com/share/653d72b46500>is the initial link 
to this conversation.

EKR

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