On Thu, 2020-06-18 at 12:37 +0800, Kevin Buckley via lfs-dev wrote: > On Wed, 17 Jun 2020 at 22:01, Pierre Labastie via lfs-dev > <lfs-dev@lists.linuxfromscratch.org> wrote: > > Please tell us what you think of: > > http://www.linuxfromscratch.org/~pierre/lfs-svn/index.html > > (I've not bee able to remove the latin numbering in the > > "Preliminary > > material") > > Seems a much better separation of the "introductory" and the > "practical" material. > > Still prefer this one with a "Temporary" added, so > > 7. Entering Chroot and Building Additional Temporary Tools > > so as to reinforce the "Temporary" nature. > > Also suggest that > > 7.17. Finishing Temporary Tools > > reads as more of a > > 7.17 Cleaning up and Saving the Temporary Tools environment
Why "environment"? I'm not sure here. We really save the tools. And what we "clean up" is not really an environment (rather we remove unneeded files from the file system). > > or perhaps, > > 7.17 Cleaning up and Saving the Chroot environment This one, I really dislike: a chroot environment is a set of variables, not files. We cannot save it either, since actually we have to reenter it each time. What about "Cleaning up and Saving the Temporary system"? > > than a "finishing" > > Given your note in another thread, as to the Chroot files being > overwritten, > it might be worth making the one final note, reminding people that > once > they start using the Chroot to build the LFS system, it's no longer > the Chroot > that they started Chapter 8 with, into a Note box in its own right > Put a note at the beginning of the section. > And there's a typo in the current reminder: > > Unfortunatly, all the temporary tools will be removed, too. > > it's missing the "e" from Unfortunately, Thanks. This is "just" a typo here, but I guess we'll find some more errors: a big rewrite like that implies two very different tasks: - make the instructions work (lot of trial and error) - keep the text in sync with the instructions (not always easy since the first task is a moving target:) So there may be remnants in the text of all the various paths that have been followed during the first task and lead to dead ends... xry111 has already found two (thanks). Pierre -- http://lists.linuxfromscratch.org/listinfo/lfs-dev FAQ: http://www.linuxfromscratch.org/faq/ Unsubscribe: See the above information page
