http://codereview.appspot.com/5096046/diff/1/Documentation/notation/pitches.itely
File Documentation/notation/pitches.itely (right):

http://codereview.appspot.com/5096046/diff/1/Documentation/notation/pitches.itely#newcode258
Documentation/notation/pitches.itely:258: If you carefully consider all
the rules above and remember that the
Probably a bit too contorted in the beginning.

Just "One consequence of these rules is that" would be quite more
concise, decreasing the chances of the reader falling asleep before he
gets to the conclusion.

Graham's warning against complex language was quite valid; the
"monosyllabic" version in the mail exchange a definite improvement.  The
levity of language makes it fit less well with a reference manual,
though.  Cutting down the starting sentence of the version quoted here
seems still prudent.

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