I've made this briefer according to your suggestions.
beers, Janek http://codereview.appspot.com/5096046/diff/1/Documentation/notation/pitches.itely File Documentation/notation/pitches.itely (right): http://codereview.appspot.com/5096046/diff/1/Documentation/notation/pitches.itely#newcode258 Documentation/notation/pitches.itely:258: If you carefully consider all the rules above and remember that the On 2011/09/21 07:50:05, dak wrote:
Probably a bit too contorted in the beginning.
Just "One consequence of these rules is that" would be quite more
concise,
decreasing the chances of the reader falling asleep before he gets to
the
conclusion.
Graham's warning against complex language was quite valid; the
"monosyllabic"
version in the mail exchange a definite improvement. The levity of
language
makes it fit less well with a reference manual, though. Cutting down
the
starting sentence of the version quoted here seems still prudent.
Done. http://codereview.appspot.com/5096046/ _______________________________________________ lilypond-devel mailing list [email protected] https://lists.gnu.org/mailman/listinfo/lilypond-devel
