Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-lisp-pubsub-11: No Objection
When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/about/groups/iesg/statements/handling-ballot-positions/ for more information about how to handle DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-lisp-pubsub/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- # GEN AD review of draft-ietf-lisp-pubsub-11 CC @larseggert Thanks to Roni Even for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review (https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/cR9bos2756DfJOE43Wen3byzgyk). ## Nits All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you did with these suggestions. ### Outdated references Document references `draft-boucadair-lisp-pubsub-flow-examples-01`, but `-03` is the latest available revision. ### URLs These URLs in the document did not return content: * https://www.lisp-lab.org ### Grammar/style #### Section 1, paragraph 8 ``` les] for sample flows to illustrate the the use of the PubSub specification. ^^^^^^^ ``` Possible typo: you repeated a word. #### Section 5, paragraph 16 ``` Notification Publish Procedures The publish procedure is implemented via Map ^^^^^^^^^^^ ``` After "The", the verb "publish" doesn't fit. Is "publish" spelled correctly? If "publish" is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Using the verb "publish" as a noun may be non-standard. #### Section 9.1, paragraph 3 ``` e time. The following subsections provides an inventory of some experience le ^^^^^^^^ ``` The verb form "provides" does not seem to match the subject "subsections". ## Notes This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the [`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT]. [ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md [ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments [IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool _______________________________________________ lisp mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/lisp
