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Thanks to all who participate - this is probably the most important text we have

Cheers

Kate


On 10Mar, 2014, at 2:58 PM, Jean-Claude Vanier wrote:

> Hi,
> as you know, I'm not an expert in English and I might be wrong. In this 
> sentence:
> "OpenMandriva aspires as a community to be able to continue the traditions of 
> Free Software and  Open Source movements by providing a place where these 
> aims can be realised"
> the word "continue" makes me feel that it could be interpreted as such: "we, 
> OMA, continue the the FLOSS movement independently of others". Obviously, we 
> are in the stream, not the stream.
> I would prefer something like: "OpenMandriva aspire to enroll in the 
> tradition of the FLOSS". I hope you will understand what I mean and correct 
> me if necessary.
> jcl
> 
> Le dimanche 9 mars 2014, Colin Close <[email protected]> a écrit :
> Hi Anurag,
> Thanks for you proof reading. Having included some of you excellent 
> suggestions I decided to review the whole thing because it was not really 
> getting across what was intended.
> I have bow restructured it somewhat so that meaning is hopefully clearer. I 
> decided to change references to Open Source  to free software having read 
> this page.  https://www.gnu.org/philosophy/open-source-misses-the-point.html. 
> I know RS can be a bit strident sometimes but here I do think he makes a 
> valid point. I also replaced a piece of text that you removed as I believe 
> that is is necessary to make a very positive acknowledgement of previous 
> contributors for a variety of reason not least that the emphasis establishes 
> a continuity of purpose with previous contributors.
> I hope you (and everyone else) will forgive me for doing this revision but 
> one of your comments alerted me to it's deficiencies.
> 
> Here is the revised text for comment,
> 
> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_248KBBtB66kMY-b5Zx5aQDowJbk2YRx1fNhGpkYVM4/edit
> 
> Best,
> Colin
> 
> 
> On Sunday 09 Mar 2014 20:13:23 Anurag Bhandari wrote:
> > That's a +1 from me. Putting philosophy right on the landing page is
> > important. Once the blog post is published, I'll include a link (someone
> > please drop me an email, though, as otherwise I may miss the post).
> >
> > As for the text, here is my proofread version (although it seems to be
> > incomplete at the end; I copy-pasted from Kate's mail):
> >
> > We, t*he group and community **that* *together** form OpenMandriva, wish to
> > create a superlative Linux distribution that will be of the highest
> > quality. To us the term distribution is inadequate to describe what we wish
> > to achieve. To us a distribution consists not only of the operating system
> > that is produced, but also the group of people that produce it and the
> > community that supports it. In order to achieve this goal, we need to have
> > a higher aim than just assembling a few thousand packages into an ISO and
> > making it available on the Internet.*
> >
> > *At **OpenMandriva**, we feel that the continuation of the Open Source
> > movement is the most important ideal not only from the point of view of
> > providing free software, but also to ensure that the power of information
> > technology is freely available to all; these are the principles on which
> > the **core** values of the OpenMandriva distribution were founded. The Open
> > Source movement **has* *matured** to the point where those joining now may
> > not **know** its **origin** {{**I'm* *not* *sure* *why* *we* *are* *using*
> > *this** sentence, **though**}}.*
> >
> > *OpenMandriva hopes that as a group we will be able to continue the
> > tradition of Free Software and the Open Source movements. In doing so we
> > hope to create a **professional** environment which pursues standards as *
> > *its** primary aim. These professional goals will be set by the
> > implementation of standards that are created and agreed by the OpenMandriva
> > **community** {{**this* *sentence* *is* *not* *required**, **IMHO**}}.  The
> > core philosophy of these standards will be driven by the need to encourage
> > and nurture new contributors in all parts of the OpenMandriva community and
> > ultimately to create an operating system that all contributors may be *proud
> > of.
> >
> > *OpenMandriva* *intends* *be* *provide** an **environment* *that* *is* 
> > *highly
> > **conducive** to those who wish to find their way in Open Source, **and**
> > to newcomers **who* *wish** to gain skills in a friendly atmosphere of
> > collaborators working toward a common goal. Students or those who want to
> > upgrade their skills; developers, designers, translators, infra  and **QA**
> > experts: there is open and *{{I could proofread further if I had the text}}
> >
> >
> > May the Source be with you
> > anuragbhandari.com
> > On Mar 9, 2014 7:46 PM, "Kate Lebedeff" <[email protected]> wrote:
> >
> > > Dear all
> > >
> > >  A while ago this text was drafted by Colin (many thanks) and edited by
> > > you guys
> > >
> > >  I now plan to make a blogpost about this and it would be very nice to
> > > have a bookmark on the landing page "philosophy" for example? and to have
> > > this text easily accessible. Infra team, what would you say?
> > >
> > >  It is important for community to know, that what we do is not only about
> > > the technical work, that this great distribution has a philosophy and idea
> > > behind.
> > >
> > >  If you have suggestions to changes or comments, please do this before
> > > 22.00 UTC monday, March 10th- this is when I plan to publish
> > >
> > >  Cheers
> > >
> > >  Kate
> > >
> > >
> > > *The OpenMandriva PhilosophyThe group and Community, who are OpenMandriva,
> > > wish to create a superlative Linux distribution that will be of the 
> > > highest
> > > quality. To us the term distribution is inadequate to describe what we 
> > > wish
> > > to achieve. To us a distribution consists not only of the operating system
> > > that is produced, but also the group of people that produce it and the
> > > community that supports it. In order to achieve this goal, we need to have
> > > a higher aim than just assembling a few thousand packages into an iso and
> > > making it available on the Internet.At OpenMandriva we feel that the
> > > continuation of the Open Source movement is a most important ideal not 
> > > only
> > > from the point of view of providing free software, but to ensure that the
> > > power of information technology is freely available to all; these are the
> > > principles on which the forerunners of the OpenMandriva distribution were
> > > founded. The OpenSource movement is maturing and has reached the point
> > > where those joining now may not remember its formation. OpenMandriva hopes
> > > that as a group we will be able to continue the tradition of Free Software
> > > and the Open Source movement. In doing so we hope to create a community
> > > environment which pursues professional standards as it's primary aim. 
> > > These
> > > professional goals will be set by the implementation of standards that are
> > > created and agreed by the OpenMandriva community.  The core philosophy of
> > > these standards will be driven by the need to encourage and nurture new
> > > contributors to all parts of the OpenMandriva community and ultimately to
> > > create an operating system in which all contributors may be proud.We 
> > > create
> > > and mature highly professional environment, for those who wish to find
> > > their way in Open Source, for newcomers to gain skills in a friendly
> > > atmosphere of collaborators working on a common goal. Students or those 
> > > who
> > > want to upgrade their skills; developers, designers, translators, infra
> > >  and QA experts: there is open and *
> > >
> 
> 



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