IMO the article doesn't seem that interesting to read, especially the
first part. The first part should get the reader interested and telling
him what happened. Currently it just tells the reader that nothing has
happened.

I suggest to reorder the article.
Right now it reads: You haven't heard about OGP lately, but it's still
alive and still doing whatever it's been doing last (nothing new here),
oh and it has released a video at Youtube (like anyone else), the video
shows something, which is a major step for OGP (something more interesting).

IMHO it should be more like: OGP, the project to create free graphics
hardware has reached a major milestone: Linux booting, there's a Youtube
video of it, in the end tell thos ethat don'T know, what OGP is.

Philipp

P.S.: I'm not a native speaker of English.

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