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On Thu, Aug 13, 2009 at 2:34 PM, web gurl <[email protected]> wrote: > Okay, I'll take you up on the Comment Away! LOL > > I think it sounds great except for a couple of small grammatical bits which > are probably a matter of personal preference more than anything. > > Under Principles > > Operates with wide participation and open communication, plans for its > long-term sustainability, and is responsive to community need > > Somehow this statement seems a little unclear in terms of who or what > 'its' is referencing. Of course, it could just be how I read it on first > pass. ;-) > > Perhaps something like this (may not be the best choice): > Operates with wide participation and open communication, plans for > long-term sustainability of DIG, and is responsive to community need > > In the second statement > Manages documentation via single-sourcing, a central repository, version > control, and the use of broader standards and best practices. We use DocBook > for text-based documents > > This sentence includes a second sentence which doesn't really follow the > writing pattern of the other statements. > > Perhaps something like > > Manages documentation via single-sourcing, a central repository, version > control, and the use of broader standards and best practices, utilizing the > semantic language markup, DocBook, for text-based documents > > Just my thoughts after a first read. > Great job overall and very clear. > Robin Fay > > > > > On Wed, Aug 12, 2009 at 5:49 PM, Paul J. Weiss <[email protected]>wrote: > >> Shannon and I now have a draft terms of reference to show you all. It is >> at >> >> http://evergreen-ils.org/dokuwiki/doku.php?id=evergreen-docs:dig_terms_of_reference >> , >> and includes a mission statement, scope, and principles. Comment away! >> I'll also put this on the agenda for the next DIG meeting. >> >> Paul >> >> _______________________________________________ >> OPEN-ILS-DOCUMENTATION mailing list >> [email protected] >> http://list.georgialibraries.org/mailman/listinfo/open-ils-documentation >> > > > > -- > http://contentdivergent.blogspot.com > -- http://contentdivergent.blogspot.com
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