On Wed, Aug 28, 2002, Ralf S. Engelschall wrote: > > Log: > 1.0 already did this, now we can talk about past, I think > [...] > -of software deployment is taking form. > +of software deployment took form.
Then consider the followinig altered paragraph:
A flexible and powerful software packaging facility, OpenPKG eased the
cross-platform installation and administration of Unix software.
As it consolidated different vendor approaches into a unified architecture,
it served system administrators of large networks previously burdened
by non-conformant systems. OpenPKG leveraged proven technologies like
Red Hat Package Manager (RPM) and provided an additional system layer
on top of the operating system. With OpenPKG, a new and unique method
of software deployment took form.
Sounds schwulisch? Of course, because it's written in past tense. If you want
to break the consistency of the paragraph, then finish it off with the past
tense. Otherwise, I recommend that we back the change out.
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