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Server: cvs.openpkg.org Name: Ralf S. Engelschall
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Module: openpkg-doc Date: 19-Sep-2002 11:28:57
Branch: HEAD Handle: 2002091910285700
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openpkg-doc/articles/sysadmin
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--- openpkg-doc/articles/sysadmin/mails.txt 19 Sep 2002 08:10:32 -0000 1.9
+++ openpkg-doc/articles/sysadmin/mails.txt 19 Sep 2002 09:28:57 -0000 1.10
@@ -853,3 +853,109 @@
Ralf S. Engelschall
[EMAIL PROTECTED]
www.engelschall.com
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+From [EMAIL PROTECTED] Thu Sep 19 11:27:21 2002
+Date: Thu, 19 Sep 2002 11:27:21 +0200
+From: "Ralf S. Engelschall" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
+To: [EMAIL PROTECTED]
+Subject: Re: OpenPKG Article for SysAdmin
+Message-ID: <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
+Reply-To: [EMAIL PROTECTED]
+References: <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
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+In-Reply-To: <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
+User-Agent: Mutt/1.4i
+Organization: Engelschall, Germany.
+X-Web-Homepage: http://www.engelschall.com/
+X-PGP-Public-Key: http://www.engelschall.com/ho/rse/pgprse.asc
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+On Wed, Sep 18, 2002, [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote:
+
+> Let me know if there are
+> changes, and please fax back your contract, etc.
+> [...]
+
+The paperwork stuff I'll fax back to you today. The article was imported
+very thoroughly by you. Thanks. There are just the following few little
+errors which we now easily can fix to make the article ready for final
+production:
+
+o page 2 (90%): Our fault, this could be not clear enough to the reader.
+ Please replace "If any of these tools are not present, an alternative
+ approach exists in which the binary version of the shell script is
+ used instead." with "If any of these tools are missing, an alternative
+ approach exists in which a shell script containing binaries provides the
+ missing tools."
+
+o page 2 (95%): "openpkg->version-release.src.sh" and
+ "openpkg-version-release.arch-os-id.sh". Here our markup was
+ partly destroyed. For comparison reasons, if you look at
+ http://www.openpkg.org/doc/articles/sysadmin/article.html you'll see
+ that the intended markup should be: both are filenames and hence
+ should be typeset in fixed font. But because the "version", "release",
+ "arch", "os" and "id" parts are variables these parts of the string
+ should be typeset in italics.
+
+o page 4 (15%): You added a "will" but without removing a "s", so please
+ fix the grammar: "will renames it" -> "will rename it"
+
+o page 4 (30%): a missing whitespace: "rpm -qfprefix" -> "rpm -qf prefix"
+
+o page 4 (50%): missing dash to be consistent with other occurences
+ of the phrase: "Run commands for every package" -> "Run-commands for
+ every package".
+
+o page 5 (40%): please replace 'openpkg_ignall="yes"' with
+ 'openpkg_runall="no"', because this was changed this way in the
+ software in the meantime.
+
+o page 5 (95%): We originally had "It reduces the required maintenance
+ when vendor version updates occur as well." For unknown reasons
+ you replaced it with "It also reduces the required maintainance of
+ vendor version updates". Unfortunately this makes the statement less
+ correct, I think. Because an update does not have to be maintained.
+ The maintainance is caused by updates. So, please either change it
+ back to the old sentence or use as an alternative "It also reduces the
+ typical maintainance required by vendor version changes."
+
+o page 6 (5%): just remove a left over closing angle bracket from
+ the original markup: "prefix>/bin/cc" -> "prefix/bin/cc"
+ (but keep existing italic and fixed-font markup as is!)
+
+o page 6 (50%): in "RPM for all packages" please make the word
+ "all" italic to emphasize the important accentuation on it.
+
+o page 7 (5%): just remove a left over closing angle bracket from
+ the original markup: "prefix/local/PKG/pkg-name>/" ->
+ "prefix/local/PKG/pkg-name/" (but keep existing italic and fixed-font
+ markup as is!)
+
+o page 7 (75%): grammar: "postings to a public mailing lists" ->
+ "postings to public mailing lists" (just remove the "a").
+
+o page 7 (98%): just remove a left over opening "I" and angle bracket from
+ the original markup: "N.I<YYYYMMDD" -> "N.YYYYMMDD" (but keep existing
+ italic markup as is!)
+
+o page 11 (50%, left-side): under "%description" there is a text paragraph
+ which badly breaks because of the column width. You can change the
+ line breaks as you wish to better look in print here as long as
+ you make sure that each line is still preceeded with four space
+ characters. This way you can get rid of the currently badly looking
+ "method", "just" and "link" words.
+
+If possible and time permits, you can send us again the fixed article
+for final review by us. Else we're now already happy from our side and
+await the print issue.
+
+Thanks.
+ Ralf S. Engelschall
+ [EMAIL PROTECTED]
+ www.engelschall.com
+
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