From: OPSAWG <[email protected]> on behalf of Jean Quilbeuf 
<[email protected]>
Sent: 25 April 2022 18:37

Dear All,
This new version of the draft addresses the comments from Tom Petch and Mohamed 
Boucadair.  Thanks again for their reviews.

<tp>
mmmmm I see a structural problem that I think will confuse users.

IANA Considerations (where I start) registers three YANG module which is not 
fine; the prefix definitions are a nonsense.  When I turn to the body of the 
I-D, which by default is Normative, I find six YANG modules only three of which 
are in IANA Considerations and so exist.  I think that this will confuse.

What I see (all?) other authors do is  put examples in Appendices which by 
convention are Informative.  Often the explanatory text is there too since it 
too is mostly or all Informative.  I think that at least the three example 
modules should be in Appendices A. B. C. - I would put them before the sample 
protocols. Some text likely belongs in the Normative part of the document but 
only what is Normative, what someone creating an extension SHOULD or MAY or 
MUST do when creating an extension; details of what to do with a specific 
extension e.g. OSPF belong in the Appendix IMO.

Section 8 should not exist.  The IETF has rules about names of IETF and 
non-IETF work and they should not be here.  Rather this I-D should reference 
those rules, if it needs to; many YANG modules expect vendors to augment them 
and I cannot recall any other I-D including such guidance.  Vendors need to 
know what they are doing

I note in passing

   The second YANG module, ietf-service-assurance-device, extends 

   The third YANG module, ietf-service-assurance-device, is another

Like I said, may cause confusion.

Tom Petch

Best,
Jean

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> 04.txt
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> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts 
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> This draft is a work item of the Operations and Management Area Working
> Group WG of the IETF.
>
>         Title           : YANG Modules for Service Assurance
>         Authors         : Benoit Claise
>                           Jean Quilbeuf
>                           Paolo Lucente
>                           Paolo Fasano
>                           Thangam Arumugam
>       Filename        : draft-ietf-opsawg-service-assurance-yang-04.txt
>       Pages           : 45
>       Date            : 2022-04-25
>
> Abstract:
>    This document specifies YANG modules representing assurance graphs.
>    These graphs represent the assurance of a given service by
>    decomposing it into atomic assurance elements called subservices.  A
>    companion RFC, Service Assurance for Intent-based Networking
>    Architecture, presents an architecture for implementing the assurance
>    of such services.
>
>    The YANG data models in this document conforms to the Network
>    Management Datastore Architecture (NMDA) defined in RFC 8342.
>
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