The photo works by itself. But if cropping is a necessity, I humbly suggest to also rotate the image to show that the flower is drifting (if it is?).
Its "pistil" (stigma?) leans to the right as if it has a kind of inertia while the flower is pushed to the left. This suggests the water flowing force and the flower movement. By rotating a bit the flower to the right, the effect may be accentuated. Then, cropping the left of the shot moves closer the border where the flower will soon disappear, suggesting a short-lived appearance. Just an idea, maybe better illustrated by a sample if you allow me to do so. --- On Tue, 3/6/12, Larry Colen <[email protected]> wrote: > From: Larry Colen <[email protected]> > Subject: Re: PESO: Adrift > To: "Pentax-Discuss Mail List" <[email protected]> > Date: Tuesday, March 6, 2012, 8:45 AM > > On Mar 5, 2012, at 4:44 PM, [email protected] > wrote: > > > I only rarely make suggestions as to what someone might > do to improve a photo, but I'll make an exception > here. :-) > > > > This is a beautiful photo. The only thing that bothers > me is the bullseye effect. I don't want the flower bigger or > filling more of the frame, but a slight crop just to get the > bloom off centre would make a very good photo even better > imho. > > That's pretty much what I had in mind, though not > being nearly as subtle as Frank, I would have cropped enough > to put it pretty close to the 1/3-1/3 point of one of the > corners, if not fairly tight into the corner itself. > Things like the flower can work in the center, if they are > perfectly in the center (imnsho), but in this case I think > it would be better off any place but the center. > > > > > > Cheers, > > frank > > > > "What can be asserted without proof can be dismissed > without proof." -- Christopher Hitchens > > > > --- Original Message --- > > > > From: "Daniel J. Matyola" <[email protected]> > > Sent: March 5, 2012 3/5/12 > > To: "Pentax-Discuss Mail List" <[email protected]> > > Subject: Re: PESO: Adrift > > > > Thanks, Don. > > > > If the current version doesn't convey the idea of a > tide pool. I might > > as well crop out much of it to focus more clearly on > the flower. > > Dan Matyola > > http://www.pentaxphotogallery.com/danieljmatyola > > > > > > > > On Mon, Mar 5, 2012 at 1:00 PM, Don Guthrie <[email protected]> > wrote: > >> Dan I hadn't had a chance to comment on this photo > yet. It sounds like you > >> were documenting a scene and when you look at this > picture it tells you that > >> story. Looking at it I kinda got that story though > we don't have many tide > >> pools in Midwest.:) > >> > >> So I agree with Larry a tighter crop would be > better art, more universal, > >> but not document what you saw. Your call. > >> > >> > >> > >>> Message: 1 > >>> Date: Sun, 4 Mar 2012 23:46:40 -0500 > >>> From: "Daniel J. Matyola" <[email protected]> > >>> To: Pentax-Discuss Mail List <[email protected]> > >>> Subject: Re: PESO: Adrift > >>> Message-ID: > >>> > >>> > <CAOmwt1zvwp3vk_YzPXdiQy536D3V2PgnYS1g7w_fSkqR=gs...@mail.gmail.com> > >>> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=UTF-8 > >>> > >>> > >>> Thanks for the comment and suggestion. > >>> > >>> I can certainly crop it tighter, but I wanted > to include enough of the > >>> water and rocks to make it cleat that I found > the flower floating in a > >>> tide pool on the beach. > >>> > >>> Dan Matyola > >>> http://www.pentaxphotogallery.com/danieljmatyola > >>> > >>> > >>> > >>> On Sun, Mar 4, 2012 at 6:32 PM, Larry Colen > <[email protected]> > wrote: > >>>> > >>>> Very nice, but I'd like to see it cropped a > lot tighter on the flower. > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> On 3/4/2012 3:23 PM, Daniel J. Matyola > wrote: > >>>>> > >>>>> http://photo.net/photodb/photo?photo_id=15293072 > >>>>> > >>>>> Comments and criticisms are invited > >>>>> > >>>>> Dan Matyola > >>>>> http://www.pentaxphotogallery.com/danieljmatyola > >>>>> > >>>> -- > >>>> Larry Colen [email protected] > (from dos4est) > >>>> > >>>> -- > >>>> PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List > >>>> [email protected] > >>>> http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net > >>>> to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit > the link directly above and > >>>> follow the directions. > >> > >> > >> -- > >> PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List > >> [email protected] > >> http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net > >> to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link > directly above and > >> follow the directions. > > > > -- > > PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List > > [email protected] > > http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net > > to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link > directly above and follow the directions. > > -- > > PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List > > [email protected] > > http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net > > to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link > directly above and follow the directions. > > -- > Larry Colen [email protected] > sent from i4est > > > > > > -- > PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List > [email protected] > http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net > to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link directly > above and follow the directions. > -- PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List [email protected] http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link directly above and follow the directions.
