On Fri, Sep 18, 2015 at 9:31 PM, Levi Morrison <[email protected]> wrote:
>
> On Sep 18, 2015 9:04 PM, "Thomas Hruska" <[email protected]> wrote:
>>
>> On 9/18/2015 8:37 AM, Hannes Magnusson wrote:
>>>
>>> Do you have a suggestion on rephrasing?
>>>
>>> -Hannes
>>
>>
>> A couple of ideas:
>>
>> "Fast, flexible and pragmatic, PHP powers everything from your blog to the
>> most popular websites in the world to powerful command-line utilities."
>>
>> The sentence gets a bit wordy and spans multiple lines even at the widest
>> layout.
>>
>>
>> "PHP is a popular general-purpose scripting language for building robust
>> web applications and command-line utilities."
>>
>> It's a bit longer than the original sentence but doesn't span multiple
>> lines at the widest layout.
>>
>>
>> Only one sentence should mention the command-line.  And the above are just
>> a couple of ideas.  If you don't like either one, I can try coming up with
>> something else.  By the way, even if you don't like the second idea, just
>> excluding " and command-line utilities" results in a sentence with more
>> "punch" than the original:
>>
>> "PHP is a popular general-purpose scripting language for building robust
>> web applications."
>>
>> And it's shorter than the original too.
>
> I like this. What do you think, Hannes?

Sounds good. Go for it.
Looks like the header needs a slight change to accommodate shorter tagline.

-Hannes

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