[email protected] wrote: > At this point, a semi-final review is requested for the proposed new PLUG > website; i'm taking all critiques, be it spelling, technique, aesthetics, > broken links, etc. Overall the site looks great. Thanks for all the work on it.
Here are the things my editor eye spotted: ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Opening paragraph on: http://nathanewilliams.com/projects/pdxlinux/meetings/ is likely from long ago. By now it probably make more sense to switch to "was" instead of "has been" as in: The advanced topic meeting was a dream of Zot O'Connor and David Mandel. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- The sidebar on: http://nathanewilliams.com/projects/pdxlinux/mail/ I only recently learned that there are two schools of thought on links to other sites: open in a new window, or open in the current window. I've always been a fan of open in a new window. I bow to the collective wisdom of the rest of the group if my preference is in the minority. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Style issue on: http://nathanewilliams.com/projects/pdxlinux/history/ I'm guessing that David Mandel wrote the content of this page, but it reads as an unnamed narrator in the first section, followed by a switch to the first person in the second section. Perhaps a by-line could be added under "History of Plug" at the top of the page, or the section under "David Mandel takes over in 1995" could be rewritten as if the unnamed narrator was talking about David. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Sentence construction, or maybe just a typo on: http://nathanewilliams.com/projects/pdxlinux/history/ The second event under "PLUG activities and events included:" includes the sentence, "This was actually a two meetings." Maybe that "a" should be "at." Also, the last sentence sounds like it was partially rewritten but only changed in one spot. " Since few people were at both meetings, so the total audience was quite large." Either drop the word "Since" or the word "so" after the comma. In either case, the comma is unnecessary. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- OK. Now that I've reached the end of the History page, I see that David did write the content. I still think it would be better to move the by-line to just under the title. Most of that content is still relevant. But, the section on Netule might want to be removed, or edited to indicate the what happened to the project. Perhaps the page could be expanded, by someone who remembers, to include what's happened between 2002 and now. David? ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Sidebar on History page: 1997. Shouldn't that be, "Linux trademark assigned to Linus Torvalds," instead of "Linux Torvalds?" ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Back on the Home page, could we have the name of the month included with the calendar? I realize that it is the current month, but I'm too used to seeing calendars with the month name included. (Personal preference. Willing to be overruled.) Thanks again for the work on the site. -- Regards, Dick Steffens _______________________________________________ PLUG mailing list [email protected] http://lists.pdxlinux.org/mailman/listinfo/plug
