-----BEGIN PGP SIGNED MESSAGE----- Hash: SHA512 On 2016-12-21 19:06, Patrick Bouldin wrote: > Hi, re: > https://www.qubes-os.org/doc/template/fedora/upgrade-23-to-24/ > > Really nice job on the instructions, wow! Very detailed and > precise. I could maybe add a few tidbits to consider adding on the > documentation. Probably not needed if I could do it but anyway... > > I would suggest indenting steps 5 through 6 to really drive home > it's a path taken only if needed
Updated. > maybe even make step 4 a decision tree at the end. > Not sure what you have in mind. (It's just a single conditional.) > Step 7 - To help newer folks, just like you did in step 9-3, > consider adding (from dom0). I realize it's obvious, but I missed > it. > The prompt portion contains "dom0" or "fedora-24" as appropriate. I've added notes about this at the beginning of each set of instructions. With regard to this specific step, it wouldn't make sense to remove the cache file from fedora-24, as it doesn't exist there (and trying to do so wouldn't be harmful). > Step 9 - I would consider not saying this is optional... You might > say "Strongly Suggested!" > Changed to "recommended." Some of the substeps truly are optional. For example, many users won't want to set the new template as their default TemplateVM or DVM template. > Step 9-2 - consider adding "Look at the Qubes VM manager, highlight > and right-click any and all VMs that show Fedora 23, and then > change the template to Fedora 24. > Updated. Note that right-clicking is not the only way. You can also click the "VM Settings" button at the top of QM. > Step 10 - Might add a note: Be careful not to remove fedora-24 !!! > I almost did it, no idea how, temporary dyslexia maybe! > Added a warning. > Well, I'm "in the masses" of folks, some of these things may seem > too elementary but perhaps it would help some. > > Again, great job! Patrick Dallas > Thanks for the feedback! - -- Andrew David Wong (Axon) Community Manager, Qubes OS https://www.qubes-os.org -----BEGIN PGP SIGNATURE----- iQIcBAEBCgAGBQJYW2y6AAoJENtN07w5UDAwLCsP/3nqDgHWuS5Txt7HCYgrbhEn CxN0m7Pu+lOKT9Nhq1pNgKZiWxCaNqIXAeF2nvIdlkJgj0T7JuYci3g3a8KUvUC2 E8II5tpeurE3Fd7QTDfl843mEw/tEjUjBxSZryJaW/PgfGU7WWRRKtlzbCZtjlz0 XIG8YHkD+ea0k5bGtDr4669IsmYamXZsRjgEO7N6f2TNM1rZf4jTQ+7WYShspRfM XWQfU4f1RtkmjUBeCrIK9Im2rfgqj9vFrTbcFRSEkrXBbUpE4qgDscN6PdxUjxIe 6AgtPqF3TAcP8kPe5HumERhTUFKjYKMYlwT7h+LnSxebJBDHnn2TwYJVUYSgrjZG 2kvQekKpl/+o+RRPk9gKlZMJpuRb9siLAdIAyaZF3urhiOl7C9Gx2iUM91MU8wLB I7Eq8B75p2aX79MlSm8v6IKIq3CRSdbX208czm7pW3By4Kz/cdrt5YsNjtG4qSwL YHGOACB9QFu3sjr1MH5D6wiqbzycaKMX0S9rFq7uGlbXMw7/NFBO0y35fwy5EgdZ IkD7hjQX2j/eH7Cq/niBrRGsCl9s7uwiWV4MvrPE8xFmOn+oLykj+VUGU1fWew+j HJcltdSTDFGU+GSb33uhhhoLfS5S1jY1OjA32by8OECemFGFE7h4nd+MfzFiNWGM CqY74Vujdxgg9cBrOqdc =iTCm -----END PGP SIGNATURE----- -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "qubes-devel" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. To post to this group, send email to [email protected]. To view this discussion on the web visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/qubes-devel/9a9bac86-b1f9-8621-4b6f-8d28e741e0a7%40qubes-os.org. For more options, visit https://groups.google.com/d/optout.
