Thanks Denis.

Here's my follow-up comments.

> * The [...]
> * The [...]
> * The [...]
> * The [...]
It was omitted on purpose. This is directed, bulleted communication.
It's usual to omit articles in such cases.

>> * Hardware locked with proprietary screws.
>> * Non-replaceable battery.
> The hardware is not sustainable as it is not repairable, and the
> battery not replaceable either.
Better have two simple sentences than one long sentence. E.g.:
* Hardware cannot be repaired and is thus unsustainable.
* Non-replaceable battery.

>> * Drivers are proprietary and opaque.
>> * Drivers can include bugs and/or backdoors, intentional or
>> unintentional.
>> * Drivers are written once and forever forgotten. Time to market is
>> king.
> * The OS, drivers and applications are all nonfree. Users cannot
>   install free free software applications without breaking the security
>   of the device.
Same as above. Better have it broken into pieces:
* OS, drivers and applications are all nonfree.
* Users cannot install free software applications without breaking the
security of the device.

>> * Graphics are slow as rendering must be done on the CPU.
> 3D acceleration is lacking as the free software drivers require more
> work to be usable in Android (Lima), or because the GPU has no
> documentation and no free drivers (PowerVR).
Too much detail for a non-technical audience. Better something like:
* No 3D acceleration due to lack of free software drivers.


Everything else seems ok.

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