Tom Petch
Best regards,
Mach
From: Robert Wilton [mailto:[email protected]]
Sent: Wednesday, August 01, 2018 11:37 PM
To: Mach Chen <[email protected]>;
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Hi Mach,
Thanks for the comments, we will address all of these.
Specifically for the abstract, I propose changing the text to:
"
This document defines a YANG data model for the management of the
Address Resolution Protocol (ARP). It extends the basic ARP
functionality contained in the ietf-ip YANG data model, defined in
[RFC8344], to provide management of optional ARP features and
statistics.
The YANG data model in this document conforms to the Network
Management Datastore Architecture defined in [RFC8342].
"
Thanks,
Rob
On 01/08/2018 09:48, Mach Chen wrote:
Hello
I have been selected to do a routing directorate “early” review of
this draft.
https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ding-rtgwg-arp-yang-model-02
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Document: draft-ding-rtgwg-arp-yang-model-02
Reviewer: Mach Chen
Review Date: 01 August 2018
Intended Status: Standards Track
Summary
The draft defines a YANG model for ARP configurations, which covers
static ARP, ARP caching, proxy ARP and gratuitous ARP. The model is very
short and the content is straightforward. It can be a reasonable start
point for WG adoption call.
General comments:
Although I am not a native English speaker, I also feel that the
document needs some enhancements on its wording and grammar to make it
more clean and readable.
For example, the following text needs some rewording or may be
removed.
Abstract:
"The data model performs as
a guideline for configuring ARP capabilities on a system. It is
intended this model be used by service providers who manipulate
devices from different vendors in a standard way."
Specific comments:
1. It's lack of the IANA section.
2. Section 3.1 and Section 3.3, suggest to add relevant references to
ARP caching and gratuitous ARP.
3. import ietf-interfaces {
prefix if;
description
"A Network Management Datastore Architecture (NMDA)
compatible version of the ietf-interfaces module
is required.";
}
import ietf-ip {
prefix ip;
description
"A Network Management Datastore Architecture (NMDA)
compatible version of the ietf-ip module is
required.";
}
Lack of the reference RFCs.
And the descriptions seem not appropriate, some of other descriptions
in this document have the similar issue, suggest to revise those
descriptions.
In addition, idnits tool shows:
== Missing Reference: 'RFC826' is mentioned on line 77, but not
defined
== Missing Reference: 'RFC6536' is mentioned on line 583, but not
defined
** Obsolete undefined reference: RFC 6536 (Obsoleted by RFC 8341)
== Unused Reference: 'I-D.ietf-netmod-rfc7223bis' is defined on line
606,
but no explicit reference was found in the text
== Unused Reference: 'RFC0826' is defined on line 636, but no
explicit
reference was found in the text
Best regards,
Mach
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