Hey guys,
If you're bored, I was wondering if I might get some feedback from you.
I'm trying to set up a film company these days (www.popcornfilms.com), and we're slowly putting together the funding etc. for our first short film.
I was wondering if you guys might like to critique the screenplay?
Please don't pass this around -- it'll be up for the next couple of days, then I'm taking it down.
Let me know!
http://www.popcornfilms.com/private/unsealed0x29384.pdf
Cheers, Simon
Not really critique, but more of a useful tip...
Though I've learned to write screenplays the same way as you do, it is now considered NOT DONE to include instructions like CLOSE-UP or LONG SHOT or
any other instructions for the DP or basically all other crew as they are all intelligent beings perfectly capable of doing their jobs and they don't need a writer to tell them their work.
Just a helpful suggestion I hope...
Are you planning on selling the screenplay or will you also be producing it yourself?
Shooting on film or video?
Curious, Frans van Egmond

