Hi Barry,
ke, 2020-03-04 kello 21:07 -0800, Barry Leiba via Datatracker
kirjoitti:
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> draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-30: No Objection
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> Given this document’s dependency on concepts and terminology from
> 5770, I think
> that document has to be a normative reference. Can someone really
> understand
> and implement this without any reference to 5770?
I changed the refence to normative.
> — Abstract —
>
>The main
>difference from the previously specified modes is the use of HIP
>messages instead of ICE for all NAT traversal procedures due to
> its
>kernel-space dependencies.
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> The antecedent to “its” is unclear: it could be “use of HIP
> messages”, or
> “ICE”, or “NAT traversal”. Please rephrase to clarify.
changed to "due to the kernel-space dependencies of HIP".
> — Section 1 —
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>Also, especially NATs usually require the
>host behind a NAT to create a forwarding state in the NAT before
>other hosts outside of the NAT can contact the
>
> What does “especially” mean in this sentence? It doesn’t make sense
> to me.
> Does it add anything?
I removed it.
>which will be referred as "Legacy ICE-HIP" in this document.
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> Nit: “referred to”
changed as suggested
>HIP poses a unique challenge to using standard ICE, due not only
> to
>its kernel-space implementation, but also due to its close
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> Same comment about “its” as in the abstract: please replace “its”
> with what
> you’re talking about, as it isn’t clear.
changed to "kernel-space dependencies of HIP".
Thanks for your comments!
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