Hey, On Nov 8, 2007 5:17 AM, Paul Fremantle <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Sorry for the delay - this is what I've come up with for the Synapse 1.1 > announcement.
I'm guessing you want some feedback on this press release draft ;) If not, feel free to ignore these, I won't mind. > Some of it is left over from the 1.0 announcement, but since that never went > out (!) I thought it was worth keeping. Why didn't the 1.0 press release ever go out? Just curious. Overall I think 1.1 release is quite good. I have a couple of minor (some would say nit-picky) suggestions: - Nowhere is the ESB acronym expanded or explained. I think somewhere near the top of the press release, ideally in the byline, you should actually say Enterprise Service Bus (ESB) instead of just using the acronym. - Having two acronyms in the byline, ESB and SOA, sounds like buzzword soup to me - The C in "Committer" (second quote) does not need to be capitalized - "configuration based" should be hyphenated I think - I'm actually not even sure what "configuration based" means. Does it mean no coding necessary, only editing configuration files? - Microsoft Word is flagging "The Apache Synapse Team have" with the green grammar squiggly line thing. It should probably be "The Apache Synapse team has" (singular and lower case T). By the way, I personally would appreciate draft press releases sent in the body of the email as opposed to a Microsoft Word (or any other format) attachment. It's easier to quickly read and respond. It's also less likely to get flagged as a virus or spam message. Good luck, Yoav --------------------------------------------------------------------- To unsubscribe, e-mail: [EMAIL PROTECTED] For additional commands, e-mail: [EMAIL PROTECTED]
