[email protected] wrote (17 Apr 2014 20:38:00 GMT) : > I started working on ticket #5977: "Adapt documentation from Incognito". > The scope is quite vague but I'll try to do as much as I can before > Tails 1.0.
> So doc reviews, you can have a look at three branches: > - doc/introduction Looks good. Pushed a typo fix (aa2dc1e). I'm unsure about dropping the note that helps the reader understand that they're not supposed to read everything in one go, but you're probably right about it. > - doc/network-manager This phrasing feels odd: "you can activate the [[Network connections persistent volume feature|first_steps/persistence/configure#network_connections]]" In "read our documentation about [[network fingerprint|doc/about/fingerprint]]", use "network fingerprinting" instead? It feels a bit weird to have only one first-level title, that is the last section. Otherwise, all right! > - doc/unsafe_browser > - <span class="guimenuitem">Unsafe Browser</span> > -</span>. > + <span class="guimenuitem">Unsafe Browser</span></span>. I'm curious why. No big deal anyway :) > * While this browser can be used unrestrictively for anything, it is > *highly* recommended to only use it to access and log in to captive portals. ... feels like a duplicate, considering we have this very visible warning 2 lines above: > <p><strong>The <span class="application">Unsafe Browser</span> is not > anonymous</strong>. Use it only to log in to captive portals.</p> >The lack of the onion icon added by Torbutton > is another such small visual reminder. Not sure if "added by Torbutton" is useful to the average user. > is another such small visual reminder Drop "small"? Otherwise, all right! Cheers, -- intrigeri | GnuPG key @ https://gaffer.ptitcanardnoir.org/intrigeri/intrigeri.asc | OTR fingerprint @ https://gaffer.ptitcanardnoir.org/intrigeri/otr.asc _______________________________________________ Tails-dev mailing list [email protected] https://mailman.boum.org/listinfo/tails-dev To unsubscribe from this list, send an empty email to [email protected].
