Hi PMario, Thank you so much for your good advice.
I have made changes, to font size, added a download button, relaxed the text in "Recognise another TW user" a little . I think the arrow button in the first slide will be recognised now ;-). It is not like the other buttons though...but just for the fun of it. Birthe Hi Birthe, > > I love this "comic" style of a presentation. It's a great intro! > > Some ideas: > > - For a new user it may not be obvious, that there is a "-> next" button > on the bottom right corner. So the first arrow should be more visible. > - The font may be a little bit bigger. > - The sentences are too long. eg: > > "Don't just stand there staring at me, "come on in"....I'm sure you want > to know a little more, and try your hands at some tiddler fiddling. " > > could be > > - Don't just stand there staring at me, "come on in"! <- come on in ... > may be green. and a link to the next page. > - I'm sure you want to know a little more > - try your hands at some tiddler fiddling. > > > page: My bowl > > "that the official TiddlyWiki mascot is:" may be "that the official > TiddlyWiki mascot is *Jack*:" > > The font size here is good. may be the whole TW should have this size. ... > switching size in the middle of a presentation shouldn't happen. > > > page: Recognise another TW user > > hmmm, imo this text can be improved, with some positive rephrasing. > > > > page: This Site Uses TiddlyWiki > > > > The end ... Instead of "the end" there should be a "call to action" > link. eg: > > - download this TW ... or > - watch the TW intro video or > - go to tiddlywiki.com or > - have a look at a second "intro" (same style) > - ... <you name it> > > have fun! > mario > > > > > > -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "TiddlyWiki" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. To post to this group, send email to [email protected]. Visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/tiddlywiki. To view this discussion on the web visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/tiddlywiki/1c0fb94d-704d-4447-80ce-50649cfec296%40googlegroups.com. For more options, visit https://groups.google.com/d/optout.
