On Monday, June 27, 2011 11:49:15 Mike Williams wrote: > On 27/06/2011 16:57, sc wrote: > > On Monday, June 27, 2011 04:43:23 [email protected] wrote: > >> Comment #2 on issue 16 by shlomif: [PATCH] Missing comma in > >> usr_10.txt http://code.google.com/p/vim/issues/detail?id=16 > >> > >> It does not read fine to me and other people: > >> > >> <rindolf> Hi all. http://paste.debian.net/121122/ - "In > >> chapter 4 several ways to make small changes were > >> explained." - I think there should be a comma after the > >> "chapter 4" - am I right? > > > > there could be a comma there, but so what -- there can also > > not be one, and adding one doesn't add a thing to the > > clarity of the sentence -- i've been an english speaker all > > my life (long time) and IMHO it reads fine without a comma > > > > it's starting to sound to me as if someone's got too much > > time on their hands
> There is nothing quite like a bit of bike-shedding at the end > of the working day ;-) > The introductory paragraph does seem a little stilted. > Usually this is a sign that a rewrite would help. Doing just > the first sentence would give: > Chapter 4 explained several ways to make small changes. > Combining with the second sentence seems a nicer still: > Where chapter 4 explained several ways to make small > changes, this chapter goes into making changes that are > repeated or can affect a large amount of text. > And to be honest the last couple of sentences seem a bit stiff > as well. How about. > Blocks of test can be changed with Visual mode, and more > complicated changes can be done using an external program. > 2p's worth. fine -- i'll go there if it's stilted it's because of the use of the phrase "goes into" -- if i had a power drunk english teacher who insisted i re-write it i'd take In chapter 4 several ways to make small changes were explained. This chapter goes into making changes that are repeated or can affect a large amount of text. and change it to read: In chapter 4 we explained several ways to make small changes. In this chapter we'll discuss methods of repeating changes and ways of affecting a large amount of text. thus changing passive voice to active and eliminating the "goes into" heresy happy? sc -- You received this message from the "vim_dev" maillist. Do not top-post! Type your reply below the text you are replying to. For more information, visit http://www.vim.org/maillist.php
