On 27/06/2011 22:23, sc wrote:
On Monday, June 27, 2011 11:49:15 Mike Williams wrote:
On 27/06/2011 16:57, sc wrote:
On Monday, June 27, 2011 04:43:23 [email protected] wrote:
Comment #2 on issue 16 by shlomif: [PATCH] Missing comma in
usr_10.txt http://code.google.com/p/vim/issues/detail?id=16
It does not read fine to me and other people:
<rindolf> Hi all. http://paste.debian.net/121122/ - "In
chapter 4 several ways to make small changes were
explained." - I think there should be a comma after the
"chapter 4" - am I right?
there could be a comma there, but so what -- there can also
not be one, and adding one doesn't add a thing to the
clarity of the sentence -- i've been an english speaker all
my life (long time) and IMHO it reads fine without a comma
it's starting to sound to me as if someone's got too much
time on their hands
There is nothing quite like a bit of bike-shedding at the end
of the working day ;-)
The introductory paragraph does seem a little stilted.
Usually this is a sign that a rewrite would help. Doing just
the first sentence would give:
Chapter 4 explained several ways to make small changes.
Combining with the second sentence seems a nicer still:
Where chapter 4 explained several ways to make small
changes, this chapter goes into making changes that are
repeated or can affect a large amount of text.
And to be honest the last couple of sentences seem a bit stiff
as well. How about.
Blocks of test can be changed with Visual mode, and more
complicated changes can be done using an external program.
2p's worth.
fine -- i'll go there
if it's stilted it's because of the use of the phrase "goes
into" -- if i had a power drunk english teacher who insisted i
re-write it i'd take
In chapter 4 several ways to make small changes were
explained. This chapter goes into making changes that are
repeated or can affect a large amount of text.
and change it to read:
In chapter 4 we explained several ways to make small changes.
In this chapter we'll discuss methods of repeating changes and
ways of affecting a large amount of text.
thus changing passive voice to active and eliminating the
"goes into" heresy
happy?
Ecstatic :-)
Mike
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