On Tue, May 5, 2009 at 11:25 AM, geni <[email protected]> wrote: > 2009/5/5 <[email protected]>: >> -----Original Message----- >> From: FT2 <[email protected]> >> To: English Wikipedia <[email protected]> >> Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am >> Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win >> >> Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this: >> >> "The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between >> Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock >> on!">> >> >> --------------------- >> Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ? And remove "The" >> Also "was" is much shorter than "took place" >> >> "Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the >> Spartan-led Eponymous League." >> > > "Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led > Eponymous League."
"Eponymous" could be confusing. Repeating the word Peloponnesian is less confusing. Carcharoth _______________________________________________ WikiEN-l mailing list [email protected] To unsubscribe from this mailing list, visit: https://lists.wikimedia.org/mailman/listinfo/wikien-l
