Hi Sanjukta! Thanks for this-- I've droned on on this list before about how I really feel that translation is in fact creative work, in fact the writing of poetry itself; and just as difficult! So please do put this kind of work.
I have some suggestions/comments towards revision, but will do that when there's a bit more time or when we meet again offline. Cheers Vivek > hello to all the poets, > > I am not sure if i am supposed to put this kind of > work on the mailing list. i am also not sure whether > this at all is my "creative work". > > its a small extract from Tagore's Musical Drama > "Shyama" which I have dared to translate. Pls excuse. > > > thanks > > Shyama - > Forgive me my Love > What is the curse for the sin I did, let the almighty > bestow upon me > You forgive me > My sin was not in thy Book, sinner I am in God's feet > There God shall unleash his rage, retribution be > silently accepted by me > Never shall be able to bear your unforgiveness > > Bajrasen - > Forgive her I could not > Forgive my powerlessness my Lord > My love was crying My love was dying > of shame of remorse > Alas I could not take her in my arms > I hurt my love, sin I did to punish sin > Forgiven she would be by thee, she who falls tumbling > on thy feet of shoulder loaded with sin > Know I this my Lord, that thou shall never forgive me, > never forgive me for my mercilessness. > > >From 'Shyama' > > > > Sanjukta > > http://thisismytruth.rediffblogs.com > > > > > __________________________________________________ > Do You Yahoo!? > Tired of spam? Yahoo! Mail has the best spam protection around > http://mail.yahoo.com > > > > Did you get this mail as a forward? Subscribe by sending a blank mail to > [EMAIL PROTECTED], OR, if you have a Yahoo! ID, by > visiting http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/join. > > Members are encouraged to post poetry, their own and others', respond > critically to the poems circulated, and participate in discussions. Post > via email at [email protected] OR online at > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/post. > > ---theZESTcommunity-------------- > > [1] ZESTCurrent: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCurrent/ > [2] ZESTEconomics: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTEconomics/ > [3] ZESTGlobal: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTGlobal/ > [4] ZESTMedia: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTMedia/ > [5] ZESTPoets: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ > [6] ZESTCaste: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCaste/ > [7] ZESTAlternative: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTAlternative/ > [8] TalkZEST: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/TalkZEST/ > > > > > Yahoo! Groups Links > To visit your group on the web, go to: > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ > To unsubscribe from this group, send an email to: > [EMAIL PROTECTED] > Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to the Yahoo! Terms of Service. Did you get this mail as a forward? Subscribe by sending a blank mail to [EMAIL PROTECTED], OR, if you have a Yahoo! ID, by visiting http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/join. Members are encouraged to post poetry, their own and others', respond critically to the poems circulated, and participate in discussions. Post via email at [email protected] OR online at http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/post. ---theZESTcommunity-------------- [1] ZESTCurrent: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCurrent/ [2] ZESTEconomics: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTEconomics/ [3] ZESTGlobal: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTGlobal/ [4] ZESTMedia: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTMedia/ [5] ZESTPoets: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ [6] ZESTCaste: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCaste/ [7] ZESTAlternative: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTAlternative/ [8] TalkZEST: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/TalkZEST/ Yahoo! Groups Links <*> To visit your group on the web, go to: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ <*> To unsubscribe from this group, send an email to: [EMAIL PROTECTED] <*> Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to: http://docs.yahoo.com/info/terms/
