juhi:
liked #3 more
it has promises...try reducing it further for added punch
#1...please look at the middle stanza...from aesthetics not poetics perspective
# 2...am not sure...cannot get into it...maybe i will return to it later
On 11/21/05, Juhi Dua <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
Untitled 1
White crows
Black butterflies
Let us start afresh
Let us repaint life
Why do we write black thoughts in white
Why do we depict loss figures through vertical stripes
Let us start afresh
Let us rewrite life
Black stars
White skies
Let us start afresh
Let us repaint life
Untitled 2
What are our dreams
If not our personal constructs
Mistaken as fantasized realities
One for me and another for you
What is your black and my white
If not a palette for a common mid-way gleaming gray…
An abode for cathartic smiles
Born of your lack of sorrow and my intense joy
Those sacred vows
Those creased thoughts that you slip hurriedly in the side pockets of my jeans
Languishing on the periphery of our perceptions
Make me long for your caressing gaze
Our dreams form
My dreams are fed
Untitled 3
Like a blind reading Braille to perfection
You read the unwritten from my eyes
Dreams in transition
You hold each damp one
And hang them to dry
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