Thanks Rumjhum! I have worked so much on this poem that i got exhausted!! :) so i left it with this draft and wanted to take a break...
however u may help me make it better. will be nice actually. Vidya. --- In [email protected], "ymursawsib" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > -This is a very beautiful poem, Vidyanjali; however I felt that you > need to take another look at the line breaks; sometimes it is good > to have the words together and then play around with them a little > for that perfect cadence, what do you think? :-) Rumjhum > > > -- In [email protected], vidya anjali <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> > wrote: > > > > Reading Old Diaries > > > > Moments, frozen in time, > > Melt in the heat of memory > > As I flip through old diaries. > > > > A verse or two, broken or conjoined, > > That had refused to follow the Muse > > Appear awkwardly before me. > > > > Some interesting tales, lying knotted, > > Unwind, as the mists of passing time > > Clear up, bit by bit. > > > > These old impressions, inked and dried, > > Stir some deeper life within life > > And my past flutters through the pages. > > > > But even before I realize, these moments elude. > > And I'm forced to remind the back-forth reeling mind > > That the stubborn clock won't rewindÂ… > > > > Vidyanjali. > > > > > > > > --------------------------------- > > Enjoy this Diwali with Y! India Click here > > > ------------------------ Yahoo! Groups Sponsor --------------------~--> Get fast access to your favorite Yahoo! Groups. Make Yahoo! your home page http://us.click.yahoo.com/dpRU5A/wUILAA/yQLSAA/yqIolB/TM --------------------------------------------------------------------~-> -- You are encouraged to post poetry, respond critically to the poems circulated and participate in discussions. To post, email your message to [email protected] OR post online at http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/post/ Tell friends to subscribe to ZESTPoets by sending a blank email to [EMAIL PROTECTED], OR, if they have a Yahoo! ID, by visiting http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/join/ ---theZESTcommunity-------------- [1] ZESTCurrent: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCurrent/ [2] ZESTEconomics: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTEconomics/ [3] ZESTGlobal: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTGlobal/ [4] ZESTMedia: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTMedia/ [5] ZESTPoets: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ [6] ZESTCaste: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCaste/ [7] ZESTAlternative: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTAlternative/ [8] TalkZEST: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/TalkZEST/ --- Yahoo! Groups Links <*> To visit your group on the web, go to: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ <*> To unsubscribe from this group, send an email to: [EMAIL PROTECTED] <*> Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to: http://docs.yahoo.com/info/terms/
