poets capture kodak moments in words.... having written this linger...should i have written feelings instead of moments?
when you revise you may want to look again at feeling victimised, ligatured, and needle's tooth
The samples cached safely in my lunch box, why in your lunch box?... (or is it because you are asked to take them to thew other department?)
On 12/4/05, jane bhandari < [EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
>
> Now that was an interesting story.
> And how many of us have read through a volume of poetry, itching to make
> changes we are convinced will improve the poems?
>
> A new little offering...I wrote this yesterday while waiting for a hospital
> department to open and accept my blood. Perhaps Frank might have approved of
> the everyday scene...suggestions welcome, this is the very first draft.
>
> MRS DRACULA
>
> Grey hospital walls, grubby benches,
> Early morning stomach growling hungrily:
>
> Feeling victimised, I lie on the bed
> Arm outstretched and ligatured,
> Fist clenched, and wait for the jab.
> The delicate nibble of the needle's tooth
> And the sight of blood spurting
> Into the vial makes me think of vampires…
>
> Then they say two samples
> Must go to the next department. It's closed.
> I eat my life-saving sandwich and wait,
> The samples cached safely in my lunch box,
> A nice little snack for Dracula.
>
> Jane Bhandari
>
>
> Vivek Narayanan <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
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> From the collection, "100 Pieces for the Left Hand", by J. Robert Lennon
>
>
> A local poet of considerable national fame completed a new collection
> of poems that had, due to a painful and scandalous series of personal
> problems, been delayed in editing and publication for some years. When
> the revisions were finally finished, the poet typed up a clean copy of
> the manuscript and got into his car to bring it to the copy shop for
> reproduction.
>
> On the way, however, the poet was pulled over for running a red light
> and was subsequently found to be drunk. Due to a new and unforgiving
> drunk-driving law in our state, his car was taken from his possession
> and his licence revoked.
>
> Upon regaining sobriety, the poet realized that his poetry manuscript
> was still in the car and asked the police to return it to him. The
> police, however, maintained that the contents of the car no longer
> belonged to him, and refused. Their refusal resulted in a protracted
> legal battle, during which our beloved poet died, leaving uncertain
> the fate of the manuscript.
>
> But the poet's publisher, eager to issue a posthumous volume, struck a
> bargain with the police department: if someone at the station would
> read the finished poems over the phone, an editor could transcribe
> them and issue them in book form without the manuscript changing
> hands. After all, the publisher argued, even if the manuscript legally
> belonged to the city, its contents did not, as they were devised
> outside the poet's car. The police agreed to this scheme, the phone
> recitation took place, and the book was issued to great acclaim,
> assuring the poet a place in the literary canon that he had not
> enjoyed in life.
>
> Eventually, however, the poet's estate won its legal battle against
> the city, and the original manuscript was recovered. All were shocked
> to learn that it bore little resemblance to the published book.
>
> It was not long before a city policeman confessed to having improvised
> much of the manuscript during its telephone transcription. His only
> explanation was that he saw room for improvement and could not resist
> making a few changes here and there. Almost immediately, the policeman
> was asked to leave the force, and the acclaimed book was completely
> discredited. The true manuscript was published in its entirety, to
> tepid reviews.
>
> The policeman has continued to write poetry. Most agree that it is
> excellent, but few will publish the work of someone known to be so
> dishonest.
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