Shepherd review against -09.

Did just browse through -10, i think it is orthogonal to the comments below.

Document is IMHO overall in very good shape!

Sorry for length, but i was trying to minimize the number of RTT to resolve 
comments
by trying to explain my comments as good as possible.

In many cases this resulted
in proposing text to better explain something where i wasn't even sure if i 
undersstood
it correctly. In those cases the texte is always a suggestion, but the ask is
to provide appropriate explanation of the subject matter.

Let me know if/how i can help getting the comments applied.

Cheers
    Toerless

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1.2) Terminology:

a) vendor vs. manufacturer.

The document uses 48 times "vendor" and 13 times "manufacturer". Please
revisit this: If there is a clear reason when/why to use vendor and when/why
to use the term "manufacturer", then please put these explanations into
terminology. Otherwise maybe eliminate "vendor".

For example: Abstract: "using vendor installed X.509 certificate" ...
"vendor's authorizing service". This latter one definitely seems to be
wrong (MASA = "manufacturer authorizied..., not vendor).

b)  Key infrastructure

There  is no definition/reference for this term.  Please describe on
first use and in terminology.  Is there a difference
between "key infrastructure" and  "keying material" ? If not, then
maybe remove one term otherwise pls. describe difference.

c) (terminology) MASA definition: "A third-party Manufacturer...". Why 
"third-party" ?
who are the first two parties ? If this is only slang and we can't explain who 
the
first two parties are, delete "third-party" ?

d) "Domain Registrar" vs. "Join Registrar", JRC. Especially because the text 
mostly
uses "Domain Registrar" and very seldom "Join Registar".

JRC is used in exactly three places in the draft. I also can not find on 
www.google.com
or wikipedia any example of "The term JRC is used in common with other bootstrap
mechanisms" as the Terminology claims. Either provide a non-anima reference for 
the
 use of that term or eliminate it in the document.

Suggest to use "(Domain Join) Registar (and Coordinator) in 1.2 and say for 
example
that the text uses "Join Registrar" when referring to the mechanics of building 
the
connection (Join Proxy and Join Registrar) and Domain Registrar when discussing
authentication and any other aspects of the registrar (where the domain is 
relevant).

e) Voucher
   - misses ":" after term.
   - please change "statement" to "artifact" so the terminology aligns with 
both voucher
     draft and voucher-request text which also uses artifact. See also section 
2.2
      where you use "cryptographically protected" instead of "signed" and 
figure out
     which term you want to use in all cases (hint: signed).

f) IMPORTANT: Please add/define the term "ANI"

  ANI - "Autonomic Network Infrastructure". Systems that support both BRSKI and
  Autonomic Control plane - ACP ([I-D.ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane]). ANI
  systems (pledges, proxies, registrar) have specific requirements detailled in
  the document.

  Without this term we can not nail down the explicit requirements against
  ANI Pledges, Proxies, Registrars that we need from the document (and 
distinguish
  from requirements against any non-ANI adaptation of BRSKI). I added according
  comments into other parts of the doc.

g) Please replace "MASA server" with "MASA service" everywhere.

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Overall:

a) Requirements about EST:

- The introduction says: "Integration with a complete EST enrollment is
  optional but trivial"
- 5.8.3 says "The Pledge MUST request a new client certificate".
- 1.4 says "bootstrapped devices have a common trust anchor and a certificate
   has optionally been issued from a local PKI

a) The text needs to be made consistent across all places where requirements
are defined. I have in general no strong opinion how "optional" the text should
say EST operations are, BUT consider he following points:

b) We need a complete list of BRSKI requirements for ANI devices, where EST
operation requirements are made stronger. I suggest a separate subsection at an
appropriate place so that "ANI requirements" shows up in the table of contents: 

   Section X.Y.Z Requirements for ANI devices:

   For BRSKI on ANI Devices (ANI = BRSKI + ACP), EST operations is mandator.
   The ANI pledge MUST perform
      - "CA Certificates Request",
      - "CSR Attributes"
      - "Client Certificate Request"
      - "Enrollment status Telemetry"
   The ANI registrar MUST support BRSKI and these EST operations.
   All ANI devices SHOULD support the BRSKI proxy function.

c) If EST operations are optional, how about the following considerations: 

   I) In instances of BRSKI where no EST operations happens after bootstrap, the
   Pledge only has trust anchors, but no certificate. This may still be useful,
   but today i think this is not really a considered option at all:

   After receipt of the voucher, the pledge is willing to do some action on 
behalf
   of the BRSKI connection it was previously unwilling to - e.g: receive & 
apply config.
   (i thought Max never liked this idea..., so if it is off the table, then
    _some_ subset of EST seems mandatory because EST operations is the only 
thing
    alowed after receiving a voucher that Ma would like.... unless Max has 
changed
    his opinion).

   II) This leaves the option that EST to install trust anchor is mandatory, but
   enrolment with a certificate is optional (except for ANI case).

Aka: would be good to write a sentence/paragraph exactly outlining what is
permitted to happen after a voucher and if any, what parts of EST are deemed to
be necessary by BRSKI (outside of ANI devices. the requirements for ANI devices
are listed above).

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1.) Introduction

a) The intro of 1. is somehat confusing to the uninitiated.

Suggest the followinf replacement text for two paragraps:

BRSKI provides a solution for secure zero-touch (automated) bootstrap of
virgin (untouched) devices that are called Pledges in this document. These 
Pledges
need to discover (or be discovered by) an element of the network domain to 
which the
Pledge belongs to perform the bootstrap.  This element (device) is called the
(Domain Join) Registrar.  Before any other operation, Pledge and Registrar need 
to
 establish mutual trust:

Then the four existing bullet points, but number them.

Then followed by th following paragraph to replace the existing paragraph after
the four bullet poins.

This document details protocols and messages to answer the above questions.
 It uses a TLS connection and an X.509 certificate
(LDevID) of the Pledge to answer points 1 and 2. It uses a new artefact
called a "voucher" that the registrar receives from a 
"Manufacturer Authorized Signing Authority" and passes to the Pledge to answer
points 3 and 2.

b) It would be nice to have a paragraph mentioning the proxy as a mean to
provide easier connectivity for Pledges (no need for full network connectivity).

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1.1) 

a) "other Bootstrapping Approaches": "other" -> "prior" or "existing" ?

b) "_or_ that domain-specific keying material". Is this not an _and_ ? 

c) "in a costly and non-scaleable manner". "non-scaleable" may be hard to
argue. Whole economies where built on manual labor. Might rather use
qualifiers such as "little or not at all automated", "error-prone" and/or
referring to physical security (.e.g: trusted pre-staging location).

d) "existing mechanisms" -> "existing automated mechanisms".

e) Paragraph 2 and following about EST: The first two sentences sound
contradictory/conflicting. "...minimize user action..." , "details a set of 
non-autonomic bootstrapping methods". Suggest text like:

"EST does reduce user actions during bootstrap but does not provide
solutions for how the following protocol steps can be made autonomic
(not involving user actions).

(Note: first use of "autonomic" here, so an explanation like "not
involving user action" is required (any other definition here what autonomic
or non-autonomic means in the context of this document is fine too,
"not involving user action" is just a suggestion).

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1.3) 

a) The order of paragraphs is confusing. Even if the mayority of readers
(which i don't think) would primarily be interested in class 1 devices,
it is irritating in style and context to start with the first two
paragraphs.

I would suggest to start with existing paragraph 3, change maybe the
sentence to "This solution (BRSKI) can support large router platforms..."

Then insert the first two paragraphs after current paragraph 5. All the
text after paragraph 5 already discusses constrained situations so
it would nicely follow on to the first two paragraphs.

b) paragraph 5 is confusing: What is a handoff, why would somebody
even think to apply BRSKI in a handoff, and why is there a normative,
capital letter SHOULD. Here is how i would write it more explanatory
(if i understand the implied use case correctly):

BRSKI could be used by nomadic or mobile devices to aquire certificates
used as credentials to access the network at the new location. This
is usually called handoff. Nevertheless, BRSKI is not intended for low-latency
handoff which is usually a requirement in mobility solutions (e.g.: seamless
handover). For these solutions BRSKI could be used to aquire keying
material and re-use that during handover without re-initiating BRSKI
during handover later on.

(which is also implying that re-using BRSKI in nomadic environments
 is not off the table, but not saying so explicitly because we really
 have not thought that trough a lot).

c) It would loosen up a very long section to create three subsection headings

- supported environments
- constrained envionments
- network access control

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Section 2 1)

a) ..Each component is logical and may be combined with other components as 
necessary..

    Ok. I always want the pledge to live in the same device as the MASA.

    Would suggest deleting that sentence. More harm than benefit.

b) I suggest to move section 2.4 up to become section 2.1) directly after the
picture in section 2., because otherwise there is no explanaction following
the picture.

c) "The a domain" (delete a)

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Section 2.1

a) The term "Request Join" is only used here, and its IMHO not very logical
(disclaimer: toerless: en.wikipedia.org/wiki/ESL). It sounds to me like the
pledge says "i want to join". And also sounds as if the pledge could be
disappointed if rejected. I would rather call it "Domain membership inquiry".
Or if you're hooked up on the term "joining", then maybe "Join Inquiry".

Whatever best makes it clear that rejection is a perfect and important
outcome option.

b) Please see my issue section 5.1 a). If you agree with that statement, then 
there
should be no "rejected" arrow in Figure 2 coming out of the "Identify" block.

I would also suggest that the "Bad Vendor response" arrow does not come out
of the "Imprint" block but out of the "Request Join" block. AFAIK, this is
an error reply to the Request Voucher, so it happens before imprinting
(imprinting happens only when there is a vocker reply. AFAIK).

I don't think "Bad Vendor reply" in Figure 2 is a good term. Most logical to me 
would
be "Error or not member". In any case, the text in section 2 below should
mention the exact words used on the labels, the text is missing ll the
labels on the left: "Factory reset", "Enroll Failure", "Bad Vendor response",...


c)

 Point 1 nicely explains how this is done during TLS.

Likewise, Point 2 should mention that this is the "Voucher Request", and
Point 3 should mention that it is the "Voucher Reply" - so readers can match
up section 2.1 with the rest of the document.

remove the "e.g." from "protocol, e.g. Enrollment over". Otherwise some text
outlining when something else than EST is to be used. (see next comment).

d) 

I am missing in the initial chapters a succinct summary how EST enrollment is 
optional and
 what can be achieved with/without it, there is only some side sentences later 
in the
EST sections. I would suggest to insert such an explanation here.

After point 4 insert (unnumbered) paragraph:

| After step 4, the pledge has received  and authenticated an explicit TA 
(trust anchor)
| (pinned-domain-cert in the Voucher response). In some use cases this may be 
sufficient
| and the bootstrap can be terminated here. The pledge can now use this TA to 
securely
| trust domain members, but it can not securely identify itself to them as a 
domain member.
| Therefore BRSKI usually proceeds with the following steps that support this 
via EST
| enrollment (see also 5.5.1 for the limitations of the trust feasible through 
the imprint).

Also maybe insert some dotted line between imprint and enroll in Figure 2 to
highlight this distinction. Maybe with "mandatory" / "optional" (EST enroll 
part)
on the right hand side

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Section 2.2

a)

 The core sentence is hard to understand because it does not spell out the
implication of the alternatives:

 At the
 lowest security levels the MASA server can indiscriminately issue
 vouchers.  At the highest security levels issuance of vouchers can be
 integrated with complex sales channel integrations that are beyond
 the scope of this document.

Would suggest amending like this:

 At the lowest security levels the MASA server can indiscriminately issue
 vouchers AND LOG CLAIMS OF OWNERSHIP BY DOMAINS.  At the highest security
 levels issuance of vouchers can be integrated with complex sales channel
 integrations that are beyond the scope of this document BUT THAT WOULD
 INTENT TO VERIFY ACTUAL (LEGAL) OWNERSHIP OF THE PLEDGE BY THE DOMAIN.

b) 

"Vouchers provide a signed but non-encrypted communication channel
   between the Pledge, the MASA, and the Registrar."

Why is this  mentioned ? If there is a conclusion of this statement that
is relevant to BRSKI it should be spelled out, otherwise its a detail 
belonging into voucher. I do not see how the following sentence is that
relevant conclusion. But maybe i am too confused by the sentence structure.

Do you mean something like this:

| Vouchers are signed but not encrypted. This allows registars to maintain
| better control over pledges attached to the domains network by examining
| and filtering Vouchers received from a MASA before sending them to the pledge.

If thats the idea, i suggest to use language like i suggested because it's
more explicit and simpler (not having to think what the relevance of 
"communication channel" is etc..).

Also may warrant a note that this control does not necessarily apply to the
case of a Cloud Registrar (see section 2.6).

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Section 2.3)

a)

The first paragraph is too terse and not very explanatory arguing why BRSKI
mandates and how it uses the IDevID. I would suggest a bulleted list
with explained reasons: 

- Uniquely identifying the pledge by parameters in the IDevID. The unique
  identification of a pledge in the voucher objects are derived from
  those parameters as described below.
  
- Securely authentating the pledges identity via TLS connection to registrar. 
  This provides protection against cloned/fake pledged.

- Secure auto-discovery of the pledges MASA by the registrar via the MASA URI
  in IDevID as explained below.

- (Optional) Signing of voucher-request by the pledges IDevID to enable MASA
   to generate voucher only to a registrar that has a connection to the pledge.

- (Optional) authorizing pledge (by registrar) to receive certificate from 
local CA. 

I am unclear about the "authenticating the Pledge during subsequent protocol 
exchanges ...".
Does this refer to the TLS exchange or others ? If others, then please list
accordingly maybe as a separate bullet point which those are.

Please keep the "There is no requirement for a common root PKI hierarchy.
Each device vendor can generate their own root certificate."

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Section 2.3 2)

a) Please put the description of identification of the pledge into a subsection
2.3.1 "Identification of the Pledge"

b) I am confused about the first MUST (serialNumber) and following SHOULD 
(HardwareModuleName).

The conversion rules make it clear that you want the device to be uniquely 
identified
via the serialNumber, but if that is not in the certificate, then you would use 
the
HardwareModuleName. Therefore the conversion rules contradict the MUST for 
serialNumber.
Or else you wouldn't define a fallback if it does not exist.

c) The MUST/SHOULD bullet points are IMHO a duplication of the conversion rules,
so maybe just drop them.

d) I would start the section with a sentence clearly describing what is done 
here:

In the context of BRSKI, pledges are uniquely identified by a "serial-number". 
This
serial-number is used both in the "serial-number" field of Voucher or Voucher 
requests
(see section 3.) and in local policies on Registrar or MASA (see section 5.).  

The serial-number is derived from the IDevID as follows:

... then add the three bullet-points.

e) I do not see "serialNumber" attribute mentioned in rfc4514 nor rfc4108. You 
mention
   "previously defined". Could you provide a reference where "serialNumber" was 
defined ?

f) Please provide example of each of the three fields and how they convert into
   serial-number. This is especially important because for the average reader 
who has
   never seen a certificate (and with no actual reference to e.g.: serialNumber 
format
   thats easily readable), it may be hard to understand if or how something 
called 
   "serialNumber" can unique identify  a device - aka: that it includes also the
   device-type (unless a company only produces one type of device and somehow 
even
   the name of the company can be implied).

   e.g.: if i take the Cisco device IDevID format i used on the anima mailing 
list before:

   serialNumber=PID:C819HWD-A-K9 SN:FXXXXFZ

   That "PID/SN" format makes it clear how a device can be uniquely be 
identified, so
   it would be a great example if it was not just a Cisco speciality (hence the 
ask for
   any reference for the definition). Could be anonymized accordingly:

   serialNumber=PID:MEGAROUTER1 SN:12345

   I also think the examples would be good to explain what otherwise would 
likely be
   hard to figure out from references (assuming there would be references):

   - To uniquely identify a device, the certificate field choosen needs to 
contain some
     form of at least a product identifier and an actual serial number of that 
product
     identifier.
   -  Note that the certificate field itself does not need to identify the 
manufacturer/brand
      of the product as long as the field is unique within the scope of the 
IDevIDs root of
      trust. For example both the EXAMPLE and the ACME manufacturer/brands 
could have a
      MEGAROUTER1 product as long as they use different root of trusts for 
their IDevIDs.
   - Product that have a unique root of trust may have a certificate field that
     is only containing an actual serial number but no product identifier.

   I have no examples of HardwareModuleName. If there is a specific set of 
devices or
   industries that prefers/mandated HardwareModuleName instead of serialNumber, 
then
   an explanatory sentence would be good.

   I only have a non-working example of the "common name" , e.g.: in the  
   cisco example it was:

       cn=C819HWD-A-K9

   which would be insufficient. So any explanation of known cases where the 
common name
   would actually be used (absence of serialNumber/HardwareModuleName) AND 
sufficient
   would be great to describe (not necessarily referring to specific 
vendor/manufacturers
   but rather product types if possible).

g) Please change the examples "JADA123456789" in the remainder of the document 
to
   the example choosen here.

h) Probably need to end the section with "Device types whose above mentioned 
IDevID attributes
   do not allow for unique identification of devices are outside the scope of 
this
   specification. ". Unless you are sure this case can not exist.

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Section 2.3 2)

a) Please put the description of MASA URI into a subsection 2.3.2 "MASA URI"

b) If the following statements are correct, i would suggest to integrate them 
into the
section text to make it clearer and more explicit. If not then i did not 
understand
how it is meant to work and the explanations could be approved accordingly to 
make it
clearer:

- The type and format of the MASA URI indicates the protocol supported by the 
MASA.
- If a MASA supports multiple protocols, multiple instances of the new MASA URI
  can be put into the certificate.
- This document defines the BRSKI-MASA protocol. It is indicated through a URI 
of
  the form 

   MASA URI is "https:// authority "./well-known/est".

  see section 5 for more explanations. (this would replace the current sentence
  mentioning section 5).

c) We discussed the risk of introducing new certificate fields and potential
compatibility issues with existing code parsing such a certificate. Which is 
why we
went for the obfuscated email encoding of the ACP information in the LDevID. It 
would
therefore be good to have an explaining sentence why the new MASA URI extension
is a better solution than encoding into existing attributes and safe to deploy 
into
devices.

I am not sure about the full extent of the answer, but probably IDevIDs are 
meant to
and actually used in a far smaller and newer set of software than that 
processing
arbitrary LDevIDs. Therefore the risk is smaller and the clean encoding 
outweights
the risk of compatibility issues with badly written old software.

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Section 2.4.1) 1)

  "it does has network" -> "it does have network"

But better: "it does only require subnet (link) local connectivity to the
circuit proxy but no routeable IPv6/IPv6 address (exception: see section 2.6)".

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Section 2.4.2) 1)

  "The proxy mechanism" -> "The circuit proxy mechanism"

  " optional stateless mechanism" -> "optional stateless proxy mechanism"

  add: The registrar (likely?) also needs manual configuration of per-MASA 
credentials to 
  contact them (see section 5.3).

  Q: Any case where unauthenticated BRSKI-MASA connections make sense ?


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Section 2.4.3) 1)

  Suggest to clarify roles:
  separate functions: the MANDATORY ...MASA including audit log, and an 
ADDITIONAL
  OPTIONAL Ownership Tracker providing sales channel integration. 

  Aka: reuse same terminology so readers are not confused. Maybe go through text
  to check only "ownership tracker" and "sales channel integration" are used 
for that part.

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Section 2.4.3) 1)

a)  Expand CMC.
  "authenticate any pledge" -> "authenticate (the IDevID of) any pledge"

b) The document is still very vague on terminology to distinguish between the
initial bootstrap and the (optional) EST server role. Please come up with
a clear terminology and clearly summarize the functionality required to be
supported by the roles.

Here is my suggested text. If any explanation to cover this information is
felt to be too long for 2.4.3, please find another place but make 2.4.3 refer to
that place. 

| A "Domain Join Registar and CMC" (abbreviated Domain Registrar in most of the 
document)
| serves two roles: BRSKI Bootstrap Service and BRSKI enhanced EST Enrollment 
Service.
| 
| The "BRSKI Bootstrap Service" role is newly defined in this document. It 
performs
| the bootstrapping of Pledges with a "pinned-domain-cert" called trust anchor.
| The BRSKI Bootstrap Service communicates with the Pledge and the MASA. It does
| not need to communicate with the Key Infrastructure (as long as it can support
| cacerts from locally stored information). As a HTTPS/REST server it supports 
the
| following REST services under /.well-known/est/ newly defined in this 
document:
|         /voucher-request, /cacerts, /status-telemetry
| As a HTTPS/REST client, it support the following REST service under 
/.well-known/est
| to request vouchers from MASAs:
|         requestvoucher, requestauditlog
| 
| The "BRSKI enhanced EST Enrollment Service" is an enhanced version of the 
RFC7030 
| defined EST-Server to support automated enrollment of Pledges with 
certificates. This
| role does not need to support certificate renewal or other services not 
related to initial
| enrollment. This role communicates with Pledges and Key Infrastructure. It 
does not
| communicate with MASA.  As a HTTPS/REST server it supports (at least) the 
following
| RFC7030 defined servervices under /.well-known/est/:
|          /cacerts, /fullcmc, /csrattrs, /simpleenroll, /serverkeygen
| This document does add new requirements against the details required to be 
supported
| in the /csrattr service.
| In addition, it supports the new service under /.well-known/est defined in 
this document
| (which makes it a "BRSKI enhanced" EST Enrollment Service):
|          /enrollstatus

[Here is where i wonder:]

| While not recommended, BRSKI Bootstrap Server and BRSKI enhanced EST-Server 
can
|be provided by separate servers. In this case, the BRSKI Bootstrap Server must
| support redirection of the Pledge after a successfull requestauditlog to the
| URI of a BRSKI enhanced EST-Server.

[I am not sure if this is true, or how else it would work, but if that 
separation
 is meant to be supported that level of detail needs to be written, otherwise
 the opposite:]

| This document does not cover cases where BRSKI Bootstrap Server and BRSKI 
enhanced EST
| Enrollment Server are separated onto two servers. It also does not define what
| (additional) functionality might be required on Pledges to support this.

IMHO with the current design decisions, one would even need to write something 
like this: 

| The design choosen in BRSKI does not always allow to use common modular design
| choices of HTTP(S)/REST servers to separate the Bootstrap Service from the 
enhanced
| EST enrollment service without operating them on separate transport locators:
| When using a single transport locator, REST request can only be demultiplexed
| by the request path and both Boothstrap Service and EST enrollment service do 
not
| only share the /.well-known/est/ prefix but even the same /cacerts command.

c) The document must include a statment such as:

| An ANI "Domain Join Registar and CMC" MUST support both BRSKI Bootstrap 
Service
| and BRSKI enhanced EST Enrollment Service roles.

[or whatever terms you choose to use]


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Section 2.4.4)

a) It would be IMHO good to move the (mayority of the) initial paragraph of 5.4 
into
this section to explain what the scope of the MASA functionality is by listing 
the
interface services requestvoucher and requestauditlog here - similar to how i
proposed to summarize the interfaces of the Domain Registrar above for section 
2.4.3.

5.4 is not a good place to do that because it's only about requestvoucher, and
then after another non-maza intermezzo 5.6 requestauditlog is again about the
MASA. So no single place summarizing the MASA functionality at this level. 

More details see comments about 5.4 below.

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Section 2.4.x)

a) Please add subsection "Architectural Component: Key Infrastructure (PKI)"

Suggested text (as in: this is the type of information i would like to see
explained here, whatever language you use):

| The Key Infrastructure (PKI) administers certificates for the domain of 
concerns,
| providing the trust anchor(s) for it and allowing enrollment of Pledges
| with domain certificates.
|
| The Domain Registrar ('s BRSKI Bootstrap service role) uses a Trust Anchor 
(TE)
| from the PKI in the BRSKI Voucher  pinned-domain-cert to authenticate itself 
to the
| Pledge with the help of MASA.
|
| The Domain Registrar ('s BRSKI enhanced EST enrollment service) acts as an
| EST Server and request certificates for Pledges from the Key Infrastructure.
| 
| The requirements and expectations against the Key Infrastructure are unchanged
| from RFC7030: There are no BRSKI specific features defined or required for
| the Key Infrastructure - only for the Domain Registrar.

Would especially like to see something like the last paragraph because its IMHO
the key part of being able to deploy BRSKI and right now it's hidden in 
explanations
in specific explanation in section 5.

b) Figure 1 labels the path to the PKI with "EST" and i remember Max to 
repeatedly
state that CAs could support EST. Nevertheless, i read in RFC7030: 

"The nature of communication between an EST server and a CA is not described in 
this document".  

But then it defines the term "EST CA". So i am confused if there is an actual
spec stating the EST profile? of an EST CA.

Aka: Can we write here:

| It is recommended but not required that the Domain Registrar ('s BRSKI 
enhanced EST
| Enrollment service) also uses RFC7030 to talk to the PKI, e.g.: a CA or 
subordinate
| CA supporting EST. Nevertheless, the Domain Registrar may choose any 
standardized
| or non-standardized protocol to talk to the PKI.

If we can not make the first part of that statement here, then also remove 
"EST" label
from picture 2 and replace with something like "Any CMC? protocol" ?

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Section 2.5) 1)

a)  If the following sentence is functionally correct, please add text 
accordingly:

  Bootstrapping Pledges that have a Realtime Clock (RTC), SHOULD use it to 
verify
  certificate validity.

b) And from my own experience, it should add:

  but they MUST be prepared to recognize local time failure and revert to the 
above
  described mechanisms. For example when RTC battery failure leads to a 
well-known
  default-time (e.g.: Jan 1 1970).

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Section 2.5) 2)

a) Please move the bullet about the registrar behavior out of the bullet list, 
maybe at
   the end of the section.  Even better:
   - rename 2.5 to "Certificate Validity"
   - 2.5.1 "Lack of Realtime Clock in Pledges
   - 2.5.2 "Infinite Lifetime of IDevID"
     (move text into 2.5.1)

b) Its hard to comprehend what the pargraph means to say. I think its something 
like:

   According to RFC5280, IDevIDs are examples of certificates that should have
   no well-defined expiration date. This is indicated through the 
   GeneralizedTime value of 99991231235959Z". Registrars SHOULD have a 
configuration
   option to ignore IDevID lifetime values if they do not conform to this 
recommendation.

   As expected, i always like an explicit example to bring it to the point:

   For example, IDevID may have incorrect lifetime of N <= 3 years, rendering 
replacement
   Pledges from storage useless after N years unless registrars support this 
option.

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Section 2.6)

IMHO, without further text, it is unclear a) what a cloud registrar is,
b) why we care and c) how a solution using a cloud registrar would have to be 
built
to work.

To resolve a), b) better i suggest to replace first paragraph with something 
like this:

Local Registrars are those for which proxies can be discovered by means under 
control
 of the network to which the pledge connects, such as GRASP or mDNS (see 
<appropriate sections>).
When a pledge connects to a network connection not under the control of the
domain claiming to own the pledge or if the Pledge's target use
cases want to simply deployments by avoiding the use of proxies, local 
Registrars and/or
network methods to discover proxies, then the pledge can only connect to a so 
called
Cloud Registrar via a URL well-known to the non-bootstrapped pledge.

c) If i understand it correctly, then the explanation for c) would be something 
like this:

When a cloud registrar is used, it must be assumed that it is not operated by 
the
owner of the pledge. Instead, it would be operated by or on behalf of the 
manufacturer
similar to the MASA. Such a Cloud Registrar can provide a Voucher to the Pledge,
but that Vouchers pinned-domain-cert could not help the Pledge to authenticate 
the
BRSKI EST connection because the Cloud Registrar does not belong to a domain of 
the
owner which the pinned-domain-cert is used for. Therefore trust for the Cloud 
Registrar
must be provided by the Plede itself:

[add existing second paragraph of 2.6 here]

[I am not sure exactly how you thought about answering c). Here is what i guess 
could work:,
so this would have to go at the end of 2.6 ]

A Cloud Registrar may operate in different ways:

III) It can answer the Pledges Voucher request with a redirect response to 
cloud based BRSKI
 Registrar oeperarted by or on behalf of the Pledges domain owner. We call this 
service
of a Cloud Registrar the "redirect-only" model. When the Pledge connects to 
that BRSKI
server after the redirect, it would again have to perform delayed authentication
of the Registrar after it receives a Voucher from it.


II) Alternatively, the Cloud registrar could provide the pledge with a Voucher 
and 
respond with a redirect response to a successful Voucher Status Telementry,
redirecting the Pledge to a potentially cloud based EST server operated by the 
owner
of the pledge to complete the Pledge enrollment with a domain certificate. When 
the
pledge connects to that EST server, it can authenticate it using the 
pinned-domain-cert
from the Voucher. The pledge would not need to repeat the Voucher request/Status
telemetry transactions.

II) Finally, the Cloud Registrar could provide Voucher AND EST enrolment to the 
Pledge
directly without any redirect. The mutual trust models for this (between the 
domain owner
and Cloud Registrar operator) are outside the scope of this specification.

Finally, most crazy (but i know how customers had to do this with pre-BRSKI 
methods,
so it might make sense):

Pledges MAY support a model in which domain operators could redirect URI 
connections
from a cloud registrar to a domain operated Registrar because this can be a 
lightweight
Registrar discovery mechanism - assuming the pledge connects to a network under 
control
of the domain operator. This can be done by overriding the DNS resolution for 
the
URI or transport layer redirection. In this case the above decribed implicit TA 
check by
the client for the TLS connection to the Cloud Registrar fails, but the Pledge 
falls
back to the delayed authentication after receipt of a voucher as it does for 
non-Cloud
Registrars.

If you feel this is overall too much, then maybe delete the whole section 2.6
and put it into a followup document. Borderline to me. If its "just" what i 
sugested
above, its fine, if there is more to it to make it work, maybe better in 
separate document.

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Section 2.7 1)

a)

> Note that the Registrar can only select the configured MASA URL based on the
> trust anchor -- so vendors can only leverage this approach if they
> ensure a single MASA URL works for all Pledge's associated with each
> trust anchor.

I do not think this is true. A registrar could have configuration policy
mapping from IDevID serial-number patterns to MASA URI.

Rewrite accordingly ? Let me know if you hate this approach, i had had to 
brainstorm it
for my planned yang model for ANI.

b) I also think it might be necessary for Registrars to allow policies that
override MASA URIs learned from the IDevID because the longevity of URIs can
not always be guaranteed and the MASA may move (merger & aquisitions etc.. ).

c) I am unclear from the document whether registrars may require configuration
to know what specific options for voucher-requests a MASA supports.

 - If i understand it correctly, a registrar may use a voucher-request to 
request a
   voucher in the absence of the pledge (stage the voucher). This certainly is 
something
   not every MASA must support, so that would need to be configured.
 - It is not clear to me if the REgistrar can correctly fill out all Registrar
   voucher-requests in the presence of the pledge (aka: after receiving the 
Pledge
   voucher-request). See also discussion for Section 3. If this is not fully 
automatic,
   but may rquire Registrar configuration, this counfig should be mentionedhere.

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Setion 3. 1)

So... I guess Registrars can request Vouchers for pledges before being in 
contact
with that pledge, right ?

If correct, the following would be less confusing to read for me:

| Voucher-requests are how vouchers are requested.
| 
| A Pledge send "Pledge voucher-requests" and submit them to the Registrar.
| The Registrar in turn submits a voucher-request to the MASA server. The
| "proximity-registrar-cert" leaf may be used in these Pledge voucher-requests.
| The "prior-signed-voucher-request" leaf may be used in Registrar 
voucher-requests
| that include a Pledge voucher-request. See [XXX] for a description of the
| semantics of these leafs.
| 
| An addition, Registrars may retrieve (nonceless) vouchers by sending 
| Pledge voucher-requests to the MASA. The "prior-signed-voucher-request" leaf
| is never used in these voucher-requests. 


In any case, you need at least a forward reference for those leaf types if
you want to mention them without other explanations.

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Setion 3. 1)


a) Even with above concern Section 3. 1) fixed the section still does not 
provide a
good taxonomy of the different type of voucher-requests and how to fully 
identify
them because of the "may be used"...

b) There is no text here explaning how a registrar transforms a Pledge
Voucher request to a Registrar voucher request. If explained later, insert 
a forward reference. Else. pls add text to explain.

b) I have my doubts that the flow of the document is ideal with all the
yang formalisms thrown into section 3. If this is what other documents do as
well, fine. I for once would like it better if it was put into a separate 
section
towards the end of the document.

"nah, not going to happen" is an acceptable answer ;-)

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Setion 3.2 1)

 "provides voucher examples" -> "provides voucher-request examples"

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Section 4. 1)

a.1) Suggest to change title to "Proxying Details (Plege - Proxy - Registrar)"
because the section does not only discuss the proxy but also the 
aspects/reqirements
of proxying relevant to Client and Registrar. 

a.2) paragraph 1: "configured on the Proxy" append:
 "or automatically discoverded (e.g.: via GRASP, see below).

b) Add: This section defines a statefu proxy which is therefore called a 
"circuit" proxy.

c) Simplify whole paragraph with  "(In a completely autonomic network...)" - 
this
discussion is not specific to AN. E.g.:

Registrars are assumed to have logically a locally integrated Proxy to support 
directly
(subnet) connected Pledges - because Registrars themself does not define any 
functions
for Pledges to discover them. Such a logical local proxy does not need to 
provide actual
TCP proxying (just discovery) as long as the Registrar can operate with subnet 
(link)
local addresses on the interfaces where Pledges may connect to.

d) "to discovery the" -> "to discover the"

e) Paragraph starting with: "If the Proxy joins an Autonomic Control Plane"
   Suggest following replacement:

   In the ANI, the Autonomic Control Plane (ACP) secured instance of GRASP 
(<ref>)
   MUST be used for discovery of ANI Registrar ACP addresses  and ports by ANI 
Proxies.
   The TCP leg of the proxy connection between ANI Proxy and ANI Registrar 
therefore
   also runs across the ACP.

   (separate because it would apply for any GRASP learning, not only ACP):

   If GRASP is used by proxies for discovery of Registrars (ACP or not),
   the proxy can also learn the proxy mechanism (Circuit Proxy vs. IPIP 
encapsulation
   or other)

   (there is no negotiation in GRASP, therefore "agreed" as in current text is 
not
    a good choice of word).

f) "SHOULD be the same as on the registrar in order for the proxy to remain 
stateless".
Does such a proxy makes sense when it is not stateless ? Aka: should this not 
be a MUST
instead of a SHOULD ? 

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Section 4. 2)

"In order to permit the proxy functionality to be implemented on the
 maximum variety of devices...
 with available capabilities for the proxy function similar to many class 2 IoT 
devices"

This IMHO is an incorrect assumption. I am not aware of any network device in
ANIMAs "well managed network" charter" that would today fall into class 2. I was
and am often extremely annoyed how underpowered control plane of multi-terrabit
switches are but those too don't get down to that level. Even OpenWRT small home
rotuers (outside scope of ANIMA) don't go below 4 MByte these days.

Here are statements i could support/recommend:

- Registrars must support the proxy method supportable by the type of proxies it
  needs to support. If pledges could be IoT class 2, then IPIP would be a better
  solution for them than a CP circuit proxy. Note that in ANI adopted to class 
2 IoT
  or similar "mesh network" solutions, Plege become proxies proxy and therefore 
IoT
  class 2 pledges imply also the need to support IoT class 2 proxies.


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Section 4.1 1)

a) "[RFC4941] temporary addresses is encouraged...."
   Please remove or add text explaining why. Given how a pledge is happy to 
spill it's
   IDevID to everyone claiming to be a proxy i am not sure what benefit privacy
   addresses have, and they are additional implementation work for pledges, 
whereas
   link-local (permanent) addresses are always required. And changing addresses
   makes diagnostics harder.

   I also am not even sure if RFC4941 is even creating additional link-local 
(temporary)
   addresses. I don't even think so. And all the concerns RFC4941 discusses 
about
   correlating traffic is hardly applicable to what the link-local address is 
used for.
   link local GASP discovery, BRSKI-TCP, maybe later some ACP tunnell..


b) IMHO the text should express the following reuirements:

   - ANI Plegdes and ANI Proxies MUST , other Pledges/Proxies SHOULD obtain
    link-local scope IPv6 addresses according to [RFC4862] ...

   (RFC4862 also specifies global addresses, so text needs to be specifica 
about just
    the link-local scope IPv6 addresses).

   - Pledges MAY use RFC4941... if you can figure out some text explaining why.

   - ANI Pleges/Proxies MUST, other Pledges/Proxies SHOULD use DULL GRASP 
announcements 
     of the objective ...

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Section 4.1 2)

> Methods SHOULD be run in parallel to avoid head of queue problems
> wherein an attacker running a fake proxy or registrar can operate
> protocol actions intentionally slowly.

methods == circuit proy, IPIP, ... ?
would also be recommended to try different proxies in parallel, right ?

> Once a connection to a Registrar is established (e.g. establishment
> of a TLS session key) there are expectations of more timely
> responses, see Section 5.2.

not clear what the pointer to 5.2 is good for. Does not explain
how establishment of TLS session key helps. IMHO, you need to finish
authentication of TLS connection before you can trust registrar and
expect timely responses.

But thats not where the problem of trusting the connection ends...

Suggested text fixes:

| Pleges SHOULD attempt bootstrapping via multiple discovered proxies and/or
| methods supported by them (TLS circuit proxy, IPinIP,..) in parallel ...
| [continue with existing paragraph text]
|
| Only once the Pledge has completed authention of the provisional bootstrap TLS
| connection (received & authenticated a voucher), can it expect to talk to a
| legitimate Registrar, and from then on there SHOULD be an expectation of
| more timely responses by the Proxy. 
|
| To achieve this, Registrars need to ensure that only legitimate Proxies can
| build connections to them. ANI Registrars for example only permit ANI Proxies 
to
| connect to them because they must use the ACP. In addition deployments of
| legitimate Proxies SHOULD | take measures that prohibit fake proxies to become
| Men-In-The-Middle attackers between them and Pledges - such as filtering of 
| (GRASP) discovery | messages from user (fake attacker) ports on access layer 
2 switches.

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Section 4.1 1)

a) The requirement to do proxy discovery via GRASP was already written in 4.1. 
Please
remove. Please use term DULL GRASP instead of just GRASP.

>   proxy-objective = ["AN_Proxy", [ O_IPv6_LOCATOR, ipv6-address,
>   transport-proto, port-number ] ]
>
>   ipv6-address       - the v6 LL of the proxy
>   transport-proto    - 6, for TCP 17 for UDP
>   port-number        - the TCP or UDP port number to find the proxy

That text does not use correct GRASP syntax. It is IMHO highly useful to also 
have
an example - to understand where address, port number etc. are.

I would also suggest to revisit the name of the objective. The objective
name suggested in the following proposed text would be aligned with the mDNS 
names
i would suggest:
  - It is IMHO counterproductive to have "AN" in the name. BRSKI should be able 
to
    be adopted without other ANI/AN components, and whoever adopts it should 
have
    to change as little as possible.
  - bootstrapks for mDNS is IMHO not ideal. The mechanism is known by the name 
brski.
    Thats like using "enrollmentst" instead of "est"  (luckily "est" was 
registerd with
    IANA!).
  - Want to be able to announce/discover both registrar and proxy, therefore
    IANA service-names should be (IMHO) brski-proxy, brski-registrar.

Here is suggested text:

  Example:
       [M_FLOOD, 12340815, h'fe80000000000000c0011001FEEF0000, 180000,
           [ ["SRV.brski-proxy", 4, 1, "https" ],
             [O_IPv6_LOCATOR,
                h'fe80000000000000c0011001FEEF0000, TCP, 15000]
           ] ,
           [ ["SRV.brski-proxy", 4, 1, "coap" ],
             [O_IPv6_LOCATOR,
                h'fe80000000000000c0011001FEEF0000, UDP, 13000]
           ] ,
           ... optionally more objectives, such as ACP as described above
       ]

  The formal CDDL definition is:

           flood-message = [M_FLOOD, session-id, initiator, ttl,
                            +[objective, (locator-option / [])]]

           objective = ["SRV.brski-proxy", objective-flags, loop-count,
                                                  objective-value]

           objective-flags = sync-only ; as in the GRASP specification
           sync-only =  4    ; M_FLOOD only requires synchronization
           loop-count = 1    ; limit to link-local operation
           objective-value = method
           method = "https"  ; or future methods
                             ; CoAP not considered yet, see below

   The objective-flags field is set to indicate synchronization.

   The loop-count is fixed at 1 since this is a link-local operation.

   It is recommended to send these M_FLOOD messages every 60 seconds, the TTL
   in the above example is 180 seconds (18000 msec).

   The session-id is a random number used for loop prevention,
   distinguishing a message from a prior instance of the same message.
   In DULL this field is irrelevant but must still be set according to
   the GRASP specification.

   The initiator address MUST be the IPv6 link local address of the 
   originating Proxy node on the sending interface.

   The method parameter is a string indicating the Proxy
   method at the specified locator. It only needs to distinguish
   methods distinguishable by the Pledge: TCP circuit proxy and IPIP
   (stateless) proxy are indistinguishable to the proxy, so the above
   example "https" method announcement could come from either a TCP
   circuit proxy or IPIP proxy. CoAP on the other hand would require
   a different transport protocol stack also on the Pledge and therefore
   require a different method.

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Section 4.2) 1)

a) Append: Therefore the "coap" method in the previous section was only
used for the example but is not included in the CDDL definition of the
GRASP objective above.

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Section 4.3) 1)

a) I would suggest removing this section and putting the requirement into 4.1
together with the rest of the requirments.

Wherever the requirements are written into, it must include this sentence for 
ANI.

ANI Proxies MUST support a TLS circuit proxy to support the "https" method,
they MAY also support the IPIP proxy method to support the https method.

For non-ANI i suggest the following (or we don't even mention them and leave
it up to followup work to define non-ANI profiles):

Non ANI Proxies are free to choose their proxy option as long as that guarantees
interopeability with Pledges and Registrars in their target deployments.

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Section 4.3) 1)

a) Suggest to move the first paragraph with requirements to section 4.1

b) Requirements must include:

ANI Registrars MUST announce their Registrar service via the ACP instance of
GRASP. They MUST support ANI TLS circuit Proxy and therefore BRSKI across
HTTPS/TLS native across the ACP. ANI Registrars MAY support the IPIP proxy
method by implementing IPIP tunneling for their HTTPS/TLS traffic across the 
ACP.
ANI Proxies MUST support GRASP discovery of Registrars .

c) The following is fixed up text for the remainder of 4.3 to solve the 
following issues:
 - change of GRASP objective-name (SRV.brski-registrar) and methods
   ("https", "https-ipip" as well as coap for examples sake).
 - changed address of registrar to be an actual ACP address
 - GRASP example was cut off/incomplete
 - also modified example to show both methods (circuit, ipip)
 - Fixed text to not refer to EST server but Registrars.
 - Fixed text to give timing recommendations only for ANI.

 - See discussion after following proposed text for the open issues.


   The registrar announces itself using GRASP M_FLOOD messages.  The
   M_FLOOD is formatted as follows:

   Example:

       [M_FLOOD, 12340815, h'fd89b714f3db00000200000064000001, 180000,
           [ ["SRV.brski-registrar", 4, 255, "https" ],
             [O_IPv6_LOCATOR,
                h'fd89b714f3db00000200000064000001, TCP, 15000]
           ] ,
           [ ["SRV.brski-registrar", 4, 255, "ipip" ],
             [O_IPv6_LOCATOR,
                h'fe80::1234, 41, 0]
           ] ,
           [ ["SRV.brski-registrar", 4, 255, "coap" ],
             [O_IPv6_LOCATOR,
                h'fd89b714f3db00000200000064000001, UDP, 13000]
           ] 
       ]


   The formal CDDL definition is:

        flood-message = [M_FLOOD, session-id, initiator, ttl,
                            +[objective, (locator-option / [])]]

           objective = ["SRV.brski-proxy", objective-flags, loop-count,
                                                  objective-value]

           objective-flags = sync-only ; as in the GRASP specification
           sync-only =  4    ; M_FLOOD only requires synchronization
           loop-count = 1    ; limit to link-local operation

           transport-proto /= 41

           objective-value = method
           method = "https" / "ipip"  ; or future methods
                                      ; CoAP not considered yet


   The M_FLOOD message MUST be sent periodically.  The period is subject
   to network administrator policy (for example configuration on Registrars).
   It must be so low that the aggregate amount of periodic M_FLOODs from
   Registrars is negligible for the network. for ANI Registrars, the
   recommended defaults are to send messages periodically every 60
   seconds and use a TTL of 180000 milliseconds (as in the example).

   The example shows the type of locators used for each of the discussed
   methods. For IPIP, the port is always 0, and the IPv6 address of its
   locator option is not the address used by the registrar but instead
   the virtual link-local address that IPIP Proxies need to use on their
   network to receive/send packets from/to Pledges when performing IPIP
   proxying. The Registrar supports IPIP tunneling for the other methods
   indicated in the same M_FLOOD. In the example above, the registrar
   support IPIP for both https and coap. Proxies MUST constrain 
   IPIP tunneled traffic to the protocols and port numbers announced
   by the Registrar (TCP port 15000 and UDP port 13000 in the above example).

Discussion: 

  I would strongly advise to move IPIP out of this document and write it
  into a separate follow-on standards track rfc. That should be easily 
adoptable as a
  WG document within the current charter, but it requires some significant
  additional work that IMHO could further delay current BRSKI draft:

  a) The above "transport-proto /= 41" is technically an update to GRASP RFC
    which allows only UDP / TCP. There is some process around updating another
    RFC. We could avoid this by just putting "UDP" in there and decribe
    that "ipip" always means 41 even if the locator says UDP. That would be
    just like DNS-SD only having _udp for any non-tcp protocol. But thats
    a longer discussion.

  b) The use of the virtual link-local address in the locator-option is
     also not in-line with GRASP AFAIK , so i fear that too would require a 
GRASP update. 

    We could avoid this by not using the locator-option (which is specified by
    GRASP) by IPIP, but by putting the info into the objective-value, e.g.:

       [ ["SRV.brski-registrar", 4, 255, 
         [ "ipip", h'fe80::1234, [ h'fd89b714f3db00000200000064000100, 265]  ]
       ] ,

    This would tell proxies that they can build IPIP tunnels using locally just 
a
    single ACP address, but remotely on the registrar they hae 265 addresses 
available,
    so they use a different one for every local inerface they have.
    h'fd89b714f3db00000200000064000100 ... h'fd89b714f3db000002000000640001ff

  c) I am not sure how we solve the problem of multiple IPIP Proxies on a single
     LAN fighting to own h'fe80::1234. It seems to me we would have to figure 
out
     if/how those proxies could use VRRP to decide which one should be active.
     (assuming VRRP has the same virtual address mechanisms as HSRP, i've never
      looked into it in detail. And it would need to support link-local 
addresses).

   d) Appendix C discusses some additional GRASP signaling that seems to be
      mandatory?/desirable? to tell the Registrar upfront which tunnels it 
should
      build up. But that GRASP signaling is not specified:

      "The Join Proxy SHOULD do a GRASP M_NEG_SYN for
       each interface which they wish to relay traffic, as this allows the
       Registrar to do any static tunnel configuration that may be required"

      Please insert implementable GRASP objective specifications for this step 
here...

   Let me know how BRSKI authors feel about proceeding on IPIP. If they want to 
keep
   it in the current BRSKI spec, i am happy to help, but i have not completely
   tried to analyze appendix C, so i am not sure if/what other issues than the 
ones
   above there might be.

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Section 5)

a) Suggest changing the title to "Protocol Details (Pledge - Registrar - MASA / 
CA)"
to distinguish from Section 4. Might consider also to move up section 5.8 as a
new section 6 so that you have a clearer separation between the core of BRSKI
(this section 5), and the (optional) EST integration (then of course the titles
would be (Plege - Registrar - MASA) for section 5 and (Pledge - Registrar - CA) 
for new section 6.

b) MASA URI is "https:// authority "./well-known/est".
                       ^
missing a " ?

  MASA URI is "https://"; authority "./well-known/est".

c) BRSKI-EST connections SHOULD use persistent connections
   The intention of this guidance is to ensure the provisional TLS
   authentication occurs only once and is properly managed.

This is not clear to me, please rephrase.

  - What does "properly managed" mean ?
  - Why would provisional TLS authentication have to occur more than once 
without
    persistent connection ?

    The first connection only retrieves the voucher, but then lets say the 
Pledge
    closes the connection and builds a new one for EST enrollment. On that 
second one
    it would not need to do provisional authentication. /cacerts after 
/requestvoucher ?

  - Btw: 5.8 says "As noted above, use of HTTP 1.1 persistent connections 
simplifies
    the Pledge state machine" and only this section 5 mentions persistent 
connections,
    but it doesn't mention siplification of pledge state machinery. Is that what
    section 5. should say instead of "properly managed" ? Not sure though how 
the
    state machinery actually does get simplified either.

d)  Q: How would BRSKI work in the absence of persistent connections or in the 
presence
    of failures ? I guess each request from the pledge is a standalone 
transaction and
    the pledge would just repeat them until it succeeds or until a return code 
would
    indicate that the Registrar does not support this step and the pledge has 
to terminate.

    Is this something that each reader is assumed to understand because the 
magical
    term "BRSKI REST" is used but not explained ? "Ah, rest, stateless 
transactions... etc."
    or should BRSKI readers deserve a written explanation ?

    Aka: The way i see it, the reason for persistent connections is really just
    avoiding unnecessary repeated (expensive) TLS connection setup...


e)  "If the Registrar responds with a redirection to other web origins"

    A reason for this rule should be written into that paragraph.
    ... This is to minimize attacks by fake registrars trying to indefinitely 
redirect 
    a pledge.

f)  "It should proceed to other discovered Registrars if there are any"

    Pledes don't discover Registrars, the discover Proxies. 
    the Proxy can see a couple redundant Registrars.

    Possible solution:

    - "proceed to other discovered Proxy locators (that are being mapped to 
different
       Registrars, see XXXX), if there are more"
    
    - And then in an appropriate XXX subsection of  section 4:

      To allow Pledges to avoid stalling on a faulty Registrar (see  section 5),
      proxies MAY announce via GRASP for multiple discovered Registrars the 
SRV.brski-proxy
      objective, each with a locator option using a different port and mapping
      Pledge connection requests for each such port to a different discovered 
Registar.
      Pledges MUST treat multiple SRV.brski-proxy announcements from the same 
      proxy address accordingly as representing different Registrars (see 
section 5).

f.1) "If necessary the Pledge calls the EST defined /cacerts method to
      obtain the domain owners' CA certificate."

     Please add an explanation when/why this is necessary. This seems to 
contradict
     the statement in 5.8.1 about not doing /cacerts,/fullcmc during Bootstrap 
but only
     during enrollment: "Although these limitations are acceptable during 
initial bootstrapping"
     (aka: "no need for /cacerts during bootstrap").

g)  After "This moves the BRSKI-EST TLS connection out of the provisional 
state." add:

    - Afterwards the Pledge trusts this and other Registrars using the same 
trust anchor.
      It MAY permit more than one redirects, but it MAY still time out the 
registrar for
      further REST operations and revert to another one.

    - Mandatory boostrap steps conclude with Voucher Status Telementry (see XXX)

    - Move "Optionally, the BRSKI- EST TLS connection can now be used for EST 
enrollment."
      out of the bullet list merge wi next sentence ("The extensions...").
      
h)  "In the language of RFC6125 this provides for a SERIALNUM-ID category of 
identifier.."

    RFC6125 does not use the term SERIALNUM-ID and BRSKI does not use this term 
outside
    of this paragraph either, so it seems redundant. The whole paragraph is 
also quite dense,
    so maybe rewrite/simplify the language.

    Would suggest to also move any details o the whitelist logic desccription 
to 5.1,
    5.0 is just overview. And in 5.1 you mention TLS setup uses RFC7030 
mechanisms
    while in 5.0 it refers to RFC6125, so i think it would become easier to 
write & read
    if tht 5.0 whitelisting stuff was moved into 5.1 paragraphs refering to EST 
TLS
    setup.

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Section 5.1) 1)

Suggested append if you agree with it (whatever wording you like):

A Registrar could recognize from the IDevID presented by the Pledge that it is 
not
interested in it, but it SHOULD not immediately close the connection to the 
pledge
after connection setup but instead wait for the Voucher Request, provide an
appropriate error reply to it and then close the BRSKI connection. This allows 
for
better error diagnostics on the Pledge (that could be presented via local 
interfaces
and/or captured in logs). Connection close during TLS setup on the other hand 
can have
various third-party causes (firewall etc. pp.). The approach also allows 
Registrars to distinguish
between actual Pledge connection attempts and other connection attempts which is
especially useful when the Registrar also acts as an EST Server. Pled

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Section 5.2 1)

a) "nonce:  The Pledge voucher-request MUST contain" ...
   ..."Doing so ensures Section 2.5 functionality"
   
   If one just follows the reference to section 2.5, it looks contradictory:
   "_If_ the voucher contains a nonce then the Pledge MUST confirm "

   Please clarify, this is confusing:
   - If the nonce is a MUST because of section 2.5, then the MUST would only 
have to
     apply to RTCless Pledges. But its not clear to me why... (forgot our 
discussions,
     and readers where never part of them, so explanation would be nice).
   - If the nonce MUST is in your opinion valid with/without RTC, don't refer 
to 2.5,
     but provide explanation accordingly why MUST.
   - Add "See section 6.2 for reduced security Pledge options".

   - fix to "MUST NOT be reused for _MULTIPLE_ bootstrapping attempts
     IMHO also: (especially not across repeated first bootstrap attempts  after 
power cycling).

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Section 5.3 1)

a) "The Registrar initiates the connection and uses the MASA URL obtained
    as described in Section 2.7 for RFC6125 authentication of the MASA server."

   Q: Does this mean:
   "The Registrar initiates the connection and uses the DNS name of the MASA 
URL obtained
    as described in Section 2.7 for (RFC6125) authentication of the MASA server 
certificate."

   Aka: for the less PKIX/Websecurity initiated readers like me, writing out
   what is actually implied could make the sentence easier to parse (instead of 
having to
   read more of RFC6125.

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Section 5.4 

a) See comment for section 5.4.4  for where i think the first paragraph 
description should be.
   (aka: make this paragrap a summary of what the MASA interface is, mentioning 
both
    requestvoucher and requestauditlog and move to 2.4.4).

b) The paragraph is difficult to parse and has IMHO wrong pieces.
   - What does "simplicity" mean ?
   - "the Registrar is not required to make use of any other EST functionality 
when
     communicating with the MASA service"... what does that mean.. ? Not 
required =
     but could optionally do it ?
   - "is defined as an optional EST message" - requestvoucher is NOT optional 
for MASA,
     and i don't think its in-profile for other roles supported by EST 
(Registrar, CA,...).

   Eg: i would suggest the following for the first paragraph:

     e.g.: The MASA uses EST (RFC7030) REST calls with the EST prefix 
"/.well-known/est/"
     to allow reuse of existing EST server code to implement a MASA service. 
The 
     MASA service requirs only two new operations: requestvoucher and 
requestauditlog.
     If a shared code basis is used for MASA and other EST/BRSKI defined 
service roles
     (Domain Registrar, CA,...), the MASA service MUST properly reject any EST 
functionality
     requests it does not wish to service; a requirement that holds for any 
REST interface.

 "To allow the reuse of existing EST server code basis for MASA
     functionality," 
   If you where thinking of other types of "simplicity", please refer to the 
most
   important one because without any explanation, simplicity is hollow.

c) If you agree to above and moved first paragraph out to 2.4.4, just reword 
second
   paragraph to something like: Domain Registrars requests vouchers from a MASA
   with an HTTP POST ...

d) An example (in parenthesis is fine) for a "future media type" would be 
useful to justify
   to readers more easily the paragraph mentioning a SHOULD against them.

e) "request a Voucher when the Pledge is offline" ->
   "request a Voucher when the Pledge is unable to connect to the Registar" ??
   (i hope thats whats meant with "offline").

   "when the Registrar is expected to be offline" ->
   "when the Registrar is expected to be unable to connect to a MASA"

   Offline can be confusing because it does not explain who is not able to talk 
with
   whom, and i think in both cases two of the three are still expected to talk
   with each other (or at least that part does not matter).

   I am still confused about the "Pledge is unable to connect to the Registrar" 
case.
   Is this a case where BRSKI-EST does not happen but something else (e.g.: 
sneakernet)
   between Registrar and Plege ? Please add a sentence explaining what this 
case means.
   
f) "since the registrar is not known to the MASA server in advance"

   Given how the HTTPS connection requires authentication, there is some 
knowledge
   about the registrar from that, so the above sentence is confusing. Whats the
   correct statement to be made here thats takes the existance of the HTTPS
   authentication of the Registrar to the MASA into account ?
   
g) Registrar revocation consistency:

   Maybe change the lead in in this section to something like: "If the Registrar
   uses a CA known to the MASA to make certificate revocation information 
available
   to the MASA, MASA SHOULD check ... of the Registrar Certificate. MASA MAY
   limit service to Registrar where this applies to provide owners protection 
against
   impacted registrar (e.g.: stolen).

   In any case a short reasoning why to do this step would be helpfull.

h) Pledge proximity assertion:

   Sentence summarizing one most important attack vector reducet by this. Or 
pointer
   to reference where this is explained.
  
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Section 5.5

a) "immediately complete authentication of the provisional"

   This sounds contradictory to the potential need to perform /cacerts first as
   described in section 5. Add something like (potentially after performing 
/cacerts,
   see section 5.) ?

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Section 5.5.1

a) "which is an additional justification
   for the recommendation to proceed with EST key management operations.
   Once a full CA Certificate Response is obtained it is more
   authoritative for the domain than the limited 'pinned-domain-cert'
   response."

   This sounds contradicting to the statement in section 5., where it sounds as 
if
   provisional state is completes only after the (optional /cacerts) and cacerts
   is part of bootstrap, whereas here it sounds as if its part of enrollment 
only.

b) If /cacerts is not required for finish provisional state or voucher 
telementry,
   maybe the Pledge would ask for cacerts after voucher telemetry, and then
   a REgistrar that does not want to be a full EST (enrolment) servdr, would 
reply
   with a redirect to an actual enrolment server in the same domain. That would
   eliminate the "discovery" part discussed in the last paragraph of this 
section.

Still confused why/where cacerts needs to happen and why exactly there in the 
flow...

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Section 5.6)

a) "The domain is expected to provide indications to the system
    administrators concerning device lifecycle status.  To facilitate
    this it needs telemetry information concerning the device's status."

    Nice language.

    Whats missing is the IMHO quite relevant recommendation to go beyond that
    and provide diagnostics / suggestions that could go as much as 

    "actionable recommendations in support of expedient resolution of the 
failure".

    Aka:
       (Failure) Reason: "voucher certificate not valid yet".
       Suggestion:      "Replace empty RTC battery "

    Can we add something like Suggestion to the structure ?
    Not sure if "suggestion" is the best word, but it would be great if we can 
put a
    stake in the ground adding this to the structure. I have seen too many times
    where it took eternities to find the magic offline manual mapping from a 
range
    of crazy error codes (reasons) to the suggestions what to do next.

b)  Recommendations for how to mitigate the potential security issues of 
diagnostics
    would be great:

    - Reasons could be per-device encoded, requiring vendor for further insight:
      Reason: "error 23498y354AZRFF"
      Suggestion: "call manufacturer"
    - Operations after errors can be slowed down to reduce/eliminate brute 
force attacks
    
c)  "message is being sent" -> "message may be sent" (above example of 
non-attack issue).

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Section 5.7)

a) Paragraph 1: Did we not discuss the option that the Registrar might want to
   examine the authorization log before even forwarding the voucher to the 
Pledge ?
   I do not remember what the outcome is but it would be good to mention why or
   why not this should be an option. o

b) It is recommended put to put some
                     ^^^^^^^^^^

   And not even clear what it would mean if the sentence was fixed.
   Does it mean something like: Cacheable object name could be large randomn 
number ?
   
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Section 5.7)

a) The current described examples of the Audit Log are all somewhat scary,
   a bit like "The doctor told me something bad... should i ignore it".
   Or worse: This audit log stuff is made up by Vendors to scare us into buying
   only manufacturer refurbished gear with a clean history bill.

   Can we mention some simple positive examples o better sell the value of the 
audit log,
   E.g.:

   Audit logs can not only help to identify candidate security risks, but
   Audit Logs can also help to identify mislocated devices, for example in 
office parks
   connected to the wrong network connector. Audit logs can help tracking 
history
   of devices re-deployed in large companies - which department originally 
bought
   this equipment,.

   The biggest concern i think we will see from privacy advocats is that
   vouchers/audit-logs are a big-brother initiative from vendors. This too might
   be something to document counter arguments for:

   The amount of traceability of audit-log information is highly flexible.
   The PKI for pinned-domain-certs used to identify owners do not have to be 
public,
   and if the authentication of Registrars with MASA is set up to be 
non-traceable
   (or the MASA is operated by a trusted third party providing privacy 
protection
    of authentication data), audit-logs can provide similar privacy options to 
block-chains
    - you can only identify another party (in the audit-log) if you can trace 
the
   pinned-domain-cert to an owner.

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Section 5.8)

a) "The Pledge is also RECOMMENDED to implement the following EST automation 
extensions"
   add: An ANI Pledge MUST implement them.

b) Last paragraph: It looks as if this is in answer of my question about
enrolling multiple certificates. Thanks!

  - Please put at the end of 5.8 (eg: new subsection before CoAP - "enrolling 
multiple
    certificates). No need to derail the core track what BRSKI does with
    consideratations of what it can not do.
  - The text reads as if its a fault of BRSKI/CSR-attributes that its impossible
    to get multiple certificates and reads in a way as if "RFC7030 alone without
    BRSKI wouldn't be a problem". Maybe i am overinterpreting.

  - How about adding a sentence like:

    Enrolling with additional trust-anchor/certificate pairs for additional 
services/roles
    for which the primary TA/certificate are not useable is subject to future
    specifications. It could for example simply be achieved by performing
    EST operations for an additional <service> via URIS of the form
      /.well-known/est/<service>/{cacerts,csrattrs,simpleenroll,...}

    Unless i misunderstood the "arbitrarylabel" examples in RFC7030.

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Section 5.8.2) 

a) The wording of the first paragraph makes it somewhat hard to understand what 
point
it is trying to make:

| In some deployments its plausible that the Pledge generates a certificate
| request containing only identity information known to the Pledge (essentially
| the X.509 IDevID  information) specific identity information

"in other deployments the pledge magically generates a certificate request
including information not known to the pledge"  ???

First two paragraphs text is somewhat confusing and incomplete.  Suggest to 
reword
with the following bullet items as goals to describe: 

   - BRSKI Cert model:
     - no BRSKI specific CA requirements - Any CA, Registrar<->CA protocol 
support.
     - Registrar is policy decision point for what should be in the certificate:
       - operation model: Registrar in responsibility of department running 
service
         and know what needs to be in cert, CA more often simple "security 
department"
     - Example service attribute: ACP information field for ANI Pledges.

   - IDevID attributes specific service case: 
     - Want to have them in LDevID to avoid weakening-of/attacks-against LDevID
       keying material (can not be renewed on IDevID but can be renewed in 
LDevID).
     - For uniformity and better control, Registrar also determines which IDevID
       attributes are put how into LDevID.

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Section 5.8.4)

a) "The EST protocol assumes an end user" -> "RFC7030 assumes an end user"

b) There seems to be text missing after second paragraph (before discussing 
success/failure):

   -If the /simpleenroll or other RFC7030 4.2 enrolment fails due to problems
    locally to the Pledge (and therefore not known without telemetry by the 
Registrar),
    the Pledge logs an app FAILURE via enrollment status telemetry.
   -If enrollment succeeded and once the pledge has managed to re-establish the 
TLS
    connection with its LDevID, it logs an /enrollstatus SUCCESS.
   - If enrollment succeeded, but re-establishment of the TLS
    connection fails, the Pledge reverts to re-establish a TLS connection with 
its IDevID
    and logs an appropriate FAILURE enrollment status telemetry. It then 
attempts
    to re-enroll a new certificate with exponentially increasing delay to allow
    operations to overcome any possible problems in the CA/Registrar setup
    that could have caused the problem.

Or similar if i didn't get it right.

c) " This allows for clients that wish to minimize their crypto operations
   to simply POST this response without renegotiating the TLS session -
   at the cost of the server not being able to accurately verify that
   enrollment was truly successful."

   Bullocks. First you scare off readers with "diagnostics bad" (5.6), and
   now Pleges SHOULD just do good diagnostics (try new LDevID to see it works) ?
   
   Please make the SHOULD re-negotiate a MUST and delete this last paragraph.
   If a plege can not afford a single validation of a BRSKI certificate, its not
   worth receiving one. 


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Section 6)

a) Suggest Change title to eg: "Additional security options"

  - Some text (eg. first paragraph mentioning NEA) talks also about 
additional/higher
    security, so lower is not necessarily always true.

b) Need to be more specific about how text in this section relates to BRSKI 
compliance:

   It seems as if the intent of this section targets to be part of the BRSKI 
standards
   specification as well and any implementations that match the MUST/SHOULD in 
this
   section are still compliant with BRSKI. I hope i understand this correctly. 
I think
   this should be written out explicity. E.g.:
   
   This section is part of BRSKIs standard specification. Implementations
   following the MUST/SHOULD in this section will still be compliant with BRSKI.
   All lowered security options in this section are explicit manufacturer 
   choices and operators MUST be made well aware of of these choices reduced 
   security achievable under those choices through appropriate 
documentation/labelling
   (e.g.: "Device with/without IDevID").

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Section 6.2)

a)  fix to "not involved in security considerations in this chapter"

   Remember text in earlier sections where you claimed that yu do expect
   fewer attacks after completion of TLS/provisional and how having trusted
   Plege/Registar-Pledge path achieves this.
  
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Section 6.3)

a) MASA server -> MASA service (i may have said that in before, but you can 
ignore
   me on these stylistics. You'll just get them later from RFC editor, pretty 
good
   spotting inconsistent terminology.
   proxy involved in security cond

b) "Trust on first Use" for physical ports: suggest to modify to:
   "trust on first use" for methods with a strong dependency on physcial 
posession,
   such as taking ownership via configuration on a serial console.

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Section 7)

a) This document is extending the .well-known "est" definition. We need to
   determine how to correctly handle this and have started to inquire.

   I suggest to add the following text to the IANA section for this:

| This document extends the definitions of "est" (so far defined via RFC7030) in
| the "https://www.iana.org/assignments/well-known-uris/well-known-uris.xhtml"; 
registry
| as follows:
| 
|   - add /.well-known/est/requestvoucher (see section 5.4)
|   - add /.well-known/est/requestauditlog (see section 5.7)

We can then let the IETF review, IANA review etc. decide whether / how this
will ultimately be handled, e.g.: having to add "updates RFC7030" to the
document and/or adding BRSKI RFC to the registry.

b) It would be good to create subsections for each registray mentioned so
that one can see from the table of content what registries are impacted.

c) Probably need a summary of updates this document makes to RFC7030, the
easiest way would IMHO be to create a short section "Updates to RFC7030",
saying that all REST services introduced in this document are extensions ot
RFC7030 ESTE because they use the EST well-known prefix, and then point to
section 2.4 which with the text i proposed provides IMHO a good summary
of those services as used by each role (Pledge, Registrar, MASA).

RFC 7030 has these nice tables with service URIs and properties. Some of
those would be nice for BRSKI extension/used-RFC7030, but lots of work...

d) Add section to request brksi-proxy and brski-registrar to
   IANA service name registry.

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Section 8)

a) First paragraph: Unvailable MASA is not a security but an operational 
consideration.
Feel free to add "Operational considerations" section before security
considerations and move it there. Might want to add some more considerations 
around
MASA to set context: Suggest something like:

- Operationally main novelty of BRSKI is dependency against vendor/cloud 
operated
  security service (MASA). Main point of discussion in this section.

- Operationally, BRSKI is most easily a fit for solutions in which other part of
  operations are already in the cloud so that the main operational issues of
  cloud connectivity for MASA is not novel. For example, SD-WAN equipment, 
services
  or in general solutions where already part of a (SDN-) OAM management plane
  are moved into the cloud (management products as a service, cloud-only managed
  service equipment, ...).

- Even if active OAM/SDN/Management elements of a network are still 
"on-premises",
  dependency against cloud/Internet reachability exists more and more on the 
user/
  application side. In this respect too, BRSKI/MASA does not increase the need 
for
  cloud/Internet reachability beyond pre-existing requirements in many networks
  (most Enterprises, Service Providers).

- There are nevertheless many evolving areas / industries (such as IoT, 
industrial
  OT networks) where cloud dependency is more novel and variations of MASA 
options as
  defined in this document (or through future add-on work) need to be explored 
to match
  the operational requirements AND provide the required level of security.

- A variety of those deployments can be handled through a variety of the 
Section 7
  decscribed altered/reduced security option.

  [ insert existing paragraph here ]

- Not described but an example of modified operational model: Very large 
customers
  that already often receive often customer specialized equipment like defense
  networks/solution may hav unique "offline" requirements. These might simply 
partner
  with manufacturers to the extend of being able to run MASA services 
themselves for
  the vendor equipment they use or receive custom equipment versions with 
IDevID using a 
  (potentially secondary) trust anchor of the customer so that registrar 
co-located MASA
  can create vouchers.

b) Possible lead in to security session:

- With the focus of BRSKI on strong security, the main considerations in this 
section
  are attack attempts against this security infrastructure, above described
  (section 7) reduced security options and implementation risks.

c) "The MASA authorization log..."

   Not security consideration either IMHO.  Suggest to move into a new "Privacy 
considerations"
   section. Cut into two or more paragraps (too long now). 
   Also Point to the text i suggested above for section 5.7.

   Add note that privacy considertins can equally be mitigated through options
   mentioned in operational consideration section (what i suggested to add with 
eg:
   defense customer example).

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Appendix A)

a) Would change title to non-IPv6 or non-ANI operations:

b) Initial explanation:

Specification of BRSKI in Section 4. only covered the mechanisms for an IP6
Pledge (link-local IPv6 address) and Proxy options necessary for IPv6 and ANI.
It does not cover the options for non-IPv6 Pledge or non-ANI Proxies (IPv4 or 
IPv6).

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Appendix A.2)

a) Replace with:

A.2.  Use of DHCP

   A non-ANI Plege MAY obtain a (non-link-local-scope) IP address via DHCP 
[RFC2131]
   IPv4 and/or DHCPv6 [RFC3315] instead of or after proxy discovery via 
link-local
   address(es).

   DHCP needs to be set up to not only provide an IP address, but for DNS 
information
   (DNS server, DNS prefix) to make unicast DNS-SD lookups as described in 
following section B.


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Appendix B)

a) Use suggested service name of "_brski-proxy" in all caes where "_bootstrapks"
   is used. (see comment for section 4.1.1 for why that name is better).

b) After "The Pledge MAY perform DNS-based Service Discovery", new paragraph:

   A non-ANI Proxy MAY perform DNS-based Service Discovery using unicast DNS
   to discover Registrars searching for searching for the service
   "_brski-registrar._tcp.local.".

c) "To prevent unaccceptable levels of network traffic" -> add ", when using 
mDNS"
  
d) "received a useable IPv4 address via DHCPv4 as suggested in Appendix A" ->
   "received a useable IP address via DHCP/DHCPv6 as suggested in Appendix A.2"

e) "If no local bootstrapks service": Add at end of paragraph: See Section 2.6
   (Cloud Registrar).
 
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Appendix C)

a) See discussion for section 4.3 above for the issues i see with current IPIP
  specification and suggestion to maybe move out of BRSKI to resolve with more 
time.

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Appendix E)

a) Please add a sentence how to decode Hex Certs (not keys) with utility
   at the very top of the appendix (right now its further down in the text).

b) E.1.4: which element in the cert would become the serial-number ?

c) There are no ASN1 decodings of the artefacts, Please fix.
   If this is subject to IANA assignments, please add RFC editor note to
   block draft progressing.

   [RFC-Editor: There is text missing here that can only be inserted
    after finishing mandator IANA assignment. Do not publish version of 
    this draft before this is resolved.]

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X) Applicability outside ANIMA

If i am not mistaken, BRSKI-MASA should be one option how a bootstrap
server in "draft-ietf-netconf-zerotouch" could obtain a voucher from a
MASA (if i understand it correctly, the mean by which such a bootstrap
server obtains a voucher is left open). If that is correct, then it would
be great to mention this in a sentence or two in an appropriate section
of BRSKI as a very explicit example how BRSKI can be reused outside the
 complete ANIMA scope (also add draft-ietf-netconf-zerotouch as an informational
reference).

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