Hi, Eric.  Thanks for your prompt reply to our follow-up items!  We have 
changed '"Credit Window Initialization"' to "credit window initialization" 
(quotation marks removed; they're here only to show what was updated).

This update is reflected in the latest files, which are posted here.  Please 
refresh your browser:

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   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.html
   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.xml
   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-diff.html
   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-rfcdiff.html (side by side)
   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48diff.html
   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48rfcdiff.html (side by side)
   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastdiff.html
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   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff1.html
   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff2.html
   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-alt-diff.html

Thanks again!

Lynne Bartholomew
RFC Production Center

> On Dec 2, 2025, at 3:58 PM, Eric Kinzie <[email protected]> wrote:
> 
> On Tue Dec 02 13:21:58 -0800 2025, Lynne Bartholomew wrote:
>> Hi, Eric.  Thank you for the email.
>> 
>> We have updated this document per your notes below.
>> 
>> A couple follow-up items for you:
>> 
>> * Please review our update regarding our question 8); it appears that you 
>> approved our "Perhaps" text.  We kept both citations for RFC 8175 to avoid 
>> possible confusion between "Status Data Item" and "Credit Window Status Data 
>> Item".  Please let us know whether or not our update is correct here (and if 
>> you object to the second citation for RFC 8175).
> 
> I approved the "Perhaps" text.  Your update is correct.
> 
>> 
>> * May we change '"Credit Window Initialization"' to '"credit window 
>> initialization"' in this sentence (appears to be used generally and applies 
>> to this document only)?
>> 
>> Modems provide an initial credit window size at the time of "Credit
>> Window Initialization".
> 
> Yes, changing that to lowercase letters makes sense.  I also think the
> quotation marks can be removed, but I'll leave that to your judgement.
> 
> Thanks,
> Eric
> 
>> = = = = =
>> 
>> The latest files are posted here.  Please refresh your browser:
>> 
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.txt
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.pdf
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.html
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.xml
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-diff.html
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-rfcdiff.html (side by side)
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48diff.html
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48rfcdiff.html (side by 
>> side)
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastdiff.html
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastrfcdiff.html (side by side)
>> 
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff1.html
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff2.html
>>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-alt-diff.html
>> 
>> Thanks again!
>> 
>> Lynne Bartholomew
>> RFC Production Center
>> 
>>> On Dec 2, 2025, at 8:38 AM, Eric Kinzie <[email protected]> wrote:
>>> 
>>> Lynne, please see my responses below.
>>> 
>>> Thanks,
>>> Eric
>>> 
>>> On Mon Dec 01 08:33:00 -0800 2025, Lynne Bartholomew wrote:
>>>>> Authors,
>>>>> 
>>>>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessar=
>>>>> y) the following questions, which are also in the source file.
>>>>> 
>>>>> 1) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in =
>>>>> the
>>>>> title) for use on <https://www.rfc-editor.org/search>. -->
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 2) <!-- [rfced] Abstract:  As it appears that the two new message types
>>>>> (Credit Control and Credit Control Response) also figure prominently
>>>>> in this document (and appear to be mentioned in the document title),
>>>>> would you like to also mention them in the Abstract?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> This document defines new Dynamic Link Exchange Protocol (DLEP) Data
>>>>> Items that are used to support credit-based flow control.  Credit
>>>>> window control is used to regulate when data may be sent to an
>>>>> associated virtual or physical queue.  The Data Items are extensible
>>>>> and reusable.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Possibly:
>>>>> This document defines new Dynamic Link Exchange Protocol (DLEP) Data
>>>>> Items that are used to support credit-based flow control.  Credit
>>>>> window control is used to regulate when data may be sent to an
>>>>> associated virtual or physical queue.  These Data Items are
>>>>> extensible and reusable.
>>>>> 
>>>>> This document also defines new messages that support credit window
>>>>> control. -->
>>> 
>>> That change is fine.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 3) <!-- [rfced] FYI:  We have added expansions for abbreviations where
>>>>> they are first used, per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide")
>>>>> (https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc7322).  Please review the
>>>>> following expansions to ensure correctness.
>>>>> 
>>>>> DSCP: Differentiated Services Code Point (Figure 1)
>>>>> MAC: Media Access Control (Section 2)
>>>>> PCP: Priority Code Point (Figure 1) -->
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 4) <!-- [rfced] Section 1:  We updated "control plane pause based
>>>>> mechanism" per RFC 8651.  Please let us know any objections.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> For example, a credit-window
>>>>> scheme for destination-specific flow control which provides aggregate
>>>>> flow control for both modem and routers has been proposed in
>>>>> [I-D.ietf-manet-credit-window], and a control plane pause based
>>>>> mechanism is defined in [RFC8651].
>>>>> 
>>>>> Currently:
>>>>> For example, a credit-window
>>>>> scheme for destination-specific flow control that provides aggregate
>>>>> flow control for both modems and routers has been proposed in
>>>>> [Credit-Window-Extension], and a mechanism referred to as the
>>>>> Control-Plane-Based Pause Extension is defined in [RFC8651]. -->
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 5) <!-- [rfced] Section 2:  We had trouble determining what is listed in
>>>>> this sentence.  We updated as follows.  If this is incorrect, please
>>>>> clarify the text.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> This means that the use of FIDs, TIDs and the
>>>>> association of a TID to a DLEP destination enables a modem to share
>>>>> or dedicate resources as needed to match the specifics of its
>>>>> implementation and its attached transmission technology.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Currently:
>>>>> This means that the use
>>>>> of FIDs and TIDs, and the association of a TID to a DLEP destination,
>>>>> enable a modem to share or dedicate resources as needed to match the
>>>>> specifics of its implementation and its attached transmission
>>>>> technology. -->
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 6) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.1:  We had trouble following this sentence.
>>>>> Does "framing" mean "frame size" or something else?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> In the example of Ethernet, framing,
>>>>> header and trailer are all included in this count. -->
>>> 
>>> "framing" is used here as it is used in the Ethernet standard.  I would
>>> prefer to leave this unchanged.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 7) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.2.1:  We had trouble parsing these sentences.
>>>>> If the suggested text is not correct, please clarify "having data
>>>>> traffic available to send, but no credits available".
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> Modems will need to balance the
>>>>> load generated by sending and processing credit window increases
>>>>> against a router having data traffic available to send, but no
>>>>> credits available.
>>>>> ...
>>>>> Routers will need to balance the load
>>>>> generated by sending and processing credit window requests against
>>>>> having data traffic available to send, but no credits available.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Suggested:
>>>>> Modems will need to balance the
>>>>> load generated by sending and processing credit window increases
>>>>> against a router that has data traffic available to send but no
>>>>> available credits.
>>>>> ...
>>>>> Routers will need to balance the load
>>>>> generated by sending and processing credit window requests against
>>>>> having data traffic available to send but no available credits. -->
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 8) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3:  Does "a Status Data Item" refer
>>>>> specifically to the Status Data Item defined in RFC 8175 - in which
>>>>> case RFC 8175 should be cited here - or does it refer to the Credit
>>>>> Window Status Data Item as defined in this document?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> In particular, the node parsing
>>>>> the Data Item MUST terminate the session with a Status Data Item
>>>>> indicating Invalid Data.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Perhaps:
>>>>> In particular, the node parsing
>>>>> the Data Item MUST terminate the session with a Status Data Item
>>>>> [RFC8175] indicating "Invalid Data".
>>> 
>>> It refers to the Status Data Item defined in RFC 8175.  This wording
>>> is fine.  I think it is also ok to remove "; see [RFC8175]" from the
>>> previous sentence if this seems repetitive.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> Or possibly:
>>>>> In particular, the node parsing
>>>>> the Data Item MUST terminate the session with a Credit Window Status
>>>>> Data Item indicating "Invalid Data" as defined in [RFC8175]. -->
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 9) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.1:  As the dashes initially appeared to be
>>>>> minus signs, we changed them to colons.  If this is incorrect, please
>>>>> consider whether these entries could be written in some other way.
>>>>> 
>>>>> We also gave the table a title.  Please let us know any objections.
>>>>> If you prefer a different title, please specify.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original (dashes are broken in order to avoid xml2rfc's "Double
>>>>> hyphen within comment" error):
>>>>> Value  Scale
>>>>>  - - - - -
>>>>>      0   B - Bytes     (Octets)
>>>>>      1  KB - Kilobytes (B/1024)
>>>>>      2  MB - Megabytes (KB/1024)
>>>>>      3  GB - Gigabytes (MB/1024)
>>>>> 
>>>>> Currently:
>>>>> +=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D+=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=
>>>>> =3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D+
>>>>> | Value |          Scale          |
>>>>> +=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D+=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=
>>>>> =3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D+
>>>>> | 0     | B: Bytes (Octets)       |
>>>>> +- - - -+- - - - - - - - - - - - -+
>>>>> | 1     | KB: Kilobytes (B/1024)  |
>>>>> +- - - -+- - - - - - - - - - - - -+
>>>>> | 2     | MB: Megabytes (KB/1024) |
>>>>> +- - - -+- - - - - - - - - - - - -+
>>>>> | 3     | GB: Gigabytes (MB/1024) |
>>>>> +- - - -+- - - - - - - - - - - - -+
>>>>> 
>>>>>    Table 1: Valid Scale Field Values -->
>>> 
>>> That table looks good.  No objection.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 10) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.1:  Does "Credit Value" specifically refer
>>>>> to the Credit Value field, or does it mean "credit value" as used
>>>>> generally elsewhere in this document (e.g., "appropriate credit
>>>>> values" as written in Section 2)?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> If the resulting
>>>>> Credit Value results in the credit window exceeding the represented
>>>>> Credit Window Max Size, the Credit Window Max Size field value is
>>>>> used as the new credit window size. -->
>>> 
>>> It means "credit value" as used generally elsewhere and should not be
>>> capitalized.
>>> 
>>> New:
>>> If the resulting
>>> credit value results in the credit window exceeding the represented
>>> Credit Window Max Size, the Credit Window Max Size field value is
>>> used as the new credit window size.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 11) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.2:  Because this sentence as written
>>>>> indicated that the data plane state is updated as needed, we changed
>>>>> "are" to "is" accordingly (also per "In both cases, a router MUST
>>>>> also ensure that any data plane state, e.g.,
>>>>> [I-D.ietf-manet-dlep-credit-flow-control], that is associated with
>>>>> the TID is updated as needed." in
>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification, where it cites this
>>>>> document).  If this is incorrect, please clarify what is being
>>>>> updated as needed.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> If the traffic classification information is located, the
>>>>> router MUST ensure that any data plane state that is associated with
>>>>> the TID and its corresponding FIDs are updated as needed (per
>>>>> Section 2.1).
>>>>> 
>>>>> Currently:
>>>>> If the traffic classification information is located, the
>>>>> router MUST ensure that any data plane state that is associated with
>>>>> the TID and its corresponding FIDs is updated as needed (per
>>>>> Section 2.1). -->
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 12) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.3:  Does "a Credit Window Status Data Item
>>>>> or items" mean "one or more Credit Window Status Data Items" here, or
>>>>> does "or items" refer to some other types of items other than Data
>>>>> Items?  We ask because we see "Credit Window Status Data Item(s)" in
>>>>> the next sentence.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original (the next sentence is included for context):
>>>>> When a Credit Window Grant Data Item is received in other
>>>>> message types, the receiving router MUST send a Credit Window Status
>>>>> Data Item or items reflecting the resulting Credit Window value of
>>>>> the updated credit window.  When the Credit Grant Data Item is
>>>>> received in a Destination Up Message, the Credit Window Status Data
>>>>> Item(s) MUST be sent in the corresponding Destination Up Response
>>>>> Message.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Perhaps:
>>>>> When a Credit Window Grant Data Item is received in other
>>>>> message types, the receiving router MUST send one or more Credit
>>>>> Window Status Data Items reflecting the resultant Credit Window
>>>>> value of the updated credit window. -->
>>> 
>>> This means "one or more Credit Window Status Data Items".
>>> 
>>> New:
>>> For each Credit Window Grant Data Item received in other
>>> message types, the receiving router MUST send a Credit Window Status
>>> Data Item reflecting the resulting Credit Window value of
>>> the updated credit windows.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 13) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.5:  Should "credit request" be "credit
>>>>> window request" as used generally elsewhere in the text?  We don't
>>>>> see "credit request" used anywhere else in this document or group of
>>>>> documents (Cluster 541 /
>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/cluster_info.php?cid=3DC541).
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> A special FID value, as defined below, is used to
>>>>> indicate that a credit request is being made across all queues. -->
>>> 
>>> Yes, it should be "credit window request".
>>> New:
>>> A special FID value, as defined below, is used to
>>> indicate that a credit window request is being made across all queues.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 14) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.5:  We do not see a Type field in RFC 8175,
>>>>> but we see a "Data Item Type" field.  May we update as suggested
>>>>> (per Section 11.3 ("DLEP Generic Data Item") of RFC 8175), to
>>>>> distinguish this definition from the definitions of Length in
>>>>> Sections 11.1 ("DLEP Signal Header") and 11.2 ("DLEP Message Header")
>>>>> of RFC 8175, which do not mention excluding a "Type" field?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> As specified in [RFC8175], Length is the number of octets in the
>>>>> Data Item, excluding the Type and Length fields.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Suggested:
>>>>> As specified in [RFC8175], Length is the number of octets in the
>>>>> Data Item, excluding the Data Item Type and Length fields. -->
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 15) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.5:  We changed "Credit Increment" to "credi=
>>>>> t
>>>>> window increment" here, as we could not find the initial-capitalized
>>>>> form elsewhere in this document, in the group (cluster) of related
>>>>> documents, or in any published RFC to date.  This update is also in
>>>>> line with this sentence from Section 2.2.1:
>>>>> 
>>>>> A modem receiving this
>>>>> message MUST respond with a Credit Control Response Message based on
>>>>> the received message and Data Item and the processing defined in
>>>>> Section 2.2.2, which will typically result in credit window
>>>>> increments being provided.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Please let us know any objections.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> A modem receiving this Data Item MUST provide a Credit Increment for
>>>>> the indicated credit windows via Credit Window Grant Data Items
>>>>> carried in a new Credit Control Message.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Currently:
>>>>> A modem receiving this Data Item MUST provide a credit window
>>>>> increment for the indicated credit windows via Credit Window Grant
>>>>> Data Items carried in a new Credit Control Message. -->
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 16) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.4:  We changed "the mismatch of capabilities"
>>>>> to "any mismatch in capabilities" per
>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-ether-credit-extension.  Please let us know any
>>>>> objections.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> In
>>>>> either case, the mismatch of capabilities SHOULD be reported to the
>>>>> user via normal network management mechanisms, such as the user
>>>>> interface or error logging.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Currently:
>>>>> In
>>>>> either case, any mismatch in capabilities SHOULD be reported to the
>>>>> user via normal network management mechanisms, such as the user
>>>>> interface or error logging. -->
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 17) <!-- [rfced] Section 4:  We had trouble following "some updated
>>>>> references to external documents listed below" in this paragraph.
>>>>> It appears that "external documents" is intended to refer to
>>>>> [BCP195], [IEEE-802.1AE], and [IEEE-8802-1X].
>>>>> 
>>>>> However, we see that [RFC8175] cites [IEEE-802.1X] ("IEEE Standards
>>>>> for Local and metropolitan area networks-Port-Based Network Access
>>>>> Control"), but this document cites [IEEE-8802-1X] ("IEEE/ISO/IEC
>>>>> International Standard-Telecommunications and exchange between
>>>>> information technology systems-Requirements for local and
>>>>> metropolitan area networks-Part 1X:Port-based network access
>>>>> control").
>>>>> 
>>>>> May we update as suggested?  If not, please clarify the text.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> The transport layer security mechanisms documented in [RFC8175], with
>>>>> some updated references to external documents listed below, can be
>>>>> applied to this document.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Suggested:
>>>>> The transport layer security mechanisms documented in [RFC8175],
>>>>> along with the latest versions of [BCP195], [IEEE-802.1AE], and
>>>>> [IEEE-8802-1X] at the time of this writing, can be applied to this
>>>>> document. -->
>>> 
>>> The IEEE documents should not be referenced in this sentence.
>>> 
>>> New:
>>> The transport layer security mechanisms documented in [RFC8175],
>>> along with the latest version of [BCP195] at the time of this writing,
>>> can be applied to this document.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 18) <!-- [rfced] [IEEE-802.1AE]:  The title listed here does not match
>>>>> the title found at the provided URL.  Is the intent here to
>>>>> specifically point to Amendment 4 (in which case the citation string
>>>>> should be changed to [IEEE-802.1AEdk-2023] and the URL should be
>>>>> changed to <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/10225636>), or would
>>>>> you prefer to list [IEEE-802.1AE] per
>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification-17?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> [IEEE-802.1AE]
>>>>>         "IEEE Standard for Local and metropolitan area networks-
>>>>>         Media Access Control (MAC) Security Amendment 4: MAC
>>>>>         Privacy protection",
>>>>>         <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/8585421>.
>>>>> 
>>>>> As listed in the edited copy of
>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification-17:
>>>>> [IEEE-802.1AE]
>>>>>         IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Local and metropolitan area
>>>>>         networks-Media Access Control (MAC) Security",
>>>>>         DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2018.8585421, IEEE Std 802.1AE-2018,
>>>>>         December 2018,
>>>>>         <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/8585421>. -->
>>> 
>>> I don't think it's necessary to specify amendment 4.
>>> 
>>> New:
>>> [IEEE-802.1AE]
>>>         IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Local and metropolitan area
>>>         networks-Media Access Control (MAC) Security",
>>>         DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2018.8585421, IEEE Std 802.1AE-2018,
>>>         December 2018,
>>>         <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/8585421>. -->
>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 19) <!-- [rfced] Appendix B:  We changed "traffic classification data sub
>>>>> items" to "Traffic Classification Sub-Data Items" per
>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification and the rest of this
>>>>> group (Cluster 541 /
>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/cluster_info.php?cid=3DC541) of documents.
>>>>> Please let us know any objections.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> [I-D.ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification] defines the traffic
>>>>> classification data sub items such as DiffServ code points that map
>>>>> to the FIDs.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Currently:
>>>>> [RFC9892] defines the Traffic
>>>>> Classification Sub-Data Items, such as DSCPs, that map to the FIDs. -->
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 20) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the
>>>>> online Style Guide at
>>>>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>,
>>>>> and let us know if any changes are needed.  Updates of this nature
>>>>> typically result in more precise language, which is helpful for
>>>>> readers.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this
>>>>> should still be reviewed as a best practice. -->
>>> 
>>> Reviewed.  I haven't found anything that does not comply with the NIST
>>> guidance.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> 21) <!-- [rfced] Please let us know if any changes are needed for the
>>>>> following:
>>>>> 
>>>>> a) The following terms were used inconsistently in this document.
>>>>> We chose to use the latter forms.  Please let us know any objections.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Additional Credit (field name, i.e., "Additional Credit:") /
>>>>> Additional Credits ("Additional Credits field")
>>>>> 
>>>>> credit based flow control / credit-based flow control (added hyphen)
>>>>> 
>>>>> Credit-Based Flow Control (in text) / credit-based flow control
>>>>> 
>>>>> Credit Control message (2 instances) / Credit Control Message
>>>>> 
>>>>> Credit Control Response message (1 instance) /
>>>>> Credit Control Response Message
>>>>> 
>>>>> Credit Window size (1 instance, i.e., "a Credit Window size") /
>>>>> credit window size (7 instances, e.g., "an initial credit window
>>>>> size") (used generally throughout Section 2)
>>>>> 
>>>>> data item / Data Item (per the rest of this document and per this
>>>>> group (cluster) of documents)
>>>>> 
>>>>> different Credit windows / different credit windows
>>>>> 
>>>>> Messages / messages ("common Messages", "No messages")
>>>>> (We changed "common Messages" to "common messages".)
>>>>> 
>>>>> Window Association Data Item (2 instances in Appendix B) /
>>>>> Credit Window Association Data Item (10 instances in text,
>>>>> the table entry in the IANA Considerations section, and
>>>>> <https://www.iana.org/assignments/dlep-parameters/>)
>>> 
>>> OK.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> b) The following term appears to be used inconsistently in this
>>>>> document.  Please let us know which form is preferred.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Credit Window / credit window (used generally, e.g., "associated
>>>>> Credit Window", "associated credit window",
>>>>> 'logical "Credit Window(s)s"')
>>>>> (Note:  We also see 'logical "Credit Windows"' in
>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-da-credit-extension.  Otherwise, all of the
>>>>> documents in this group of documents use the lowercase form
>>>>> "credit window" when used generally.)
>>> 
>>> Let's use lowercase "credit window" when used generally.
>>> 
>>> 
>>>>> c) Please let us know how/if the following should be made consistent:
>>>>> 
>>>>> Credit Grant Data Item (3 instances in text) /
>>>>> Credit Window Grant Data Item (~13 instances in text) /
>>>>> Grant Data Item (2 instances in text) ("each Grant Data Item",
>>>>>  "or Grant Data Item")
>>>>> Suggested, assuming that these different forms all refer to the
>>>>>   same type of Data Item:  Credit Window Grant Data Item, per
>>>>>  <https://www.iana.org/assignments/dlep-parameters/>.
>>>>> 
>>>>>  Alternatively, please let us know if the IANA entry needs to
>>>>>  be changed (e.g., from "Credit Window Grant" to "Credit Grant"
>>>>>  or simply "Grant", noting that any such change would not match
>>>>>  the format of the other entries on the page.) -->
>>> 
>>> These can all be changed to "Credit Window Grant Data Item".
>> 

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