Lynne,

> > Should "Traffic Classification Data Items provided by the modem are" be 
> > "The Traffic Classification Data Item provided by the modem is" or possibly 
> > "Traffic Classification Sub-Data Items provided by the modem are"?  Or does 
> > the text refer to multiple instances of the Traffic Classification Data 
> > Item defined in RFC 9892 (in which case perhaps this should be clarified)?

There can be multiple instances of the Traffic Classification Data Item.
Possibly:

"The Traffic Classification Data Item provided by the modem is defined
in [RFC9892]. In this case, a flow is identified based on information
found in a data plane header, and one or more matches are associated
with a single flow.  As stated in [RFC8982], more than one Data Item
MAY be included in a message to provide information on multiple traffic
classifiers.  Refer to" . . .

I think the wording of the second location you pointed out is ok.

Thanks,
Eric

On Mon Jan 05 10:11:22 -0800 2026, Lynne Bartholomew wrote:
> Dear authors,
> 
> Happy New Year!
> 
> We could not find a reply to the following questions.  Apologies if we missed 
> it.  Please advise.
> 
> Thank you!
> 
> Lynne Bartholomew
> RFC Production Center
> 
> > On Dec 23, 2025, at 3:03 PM, Lynne Bartholomew 
> > <[email protected]> wrote:
> > 
> > Hello again.  Forgot to mention that we also see the following text 
> > elsewhere in this document:
> > 
> > based on the Traffic Classification Data Item defined in
> > [RFC9892]
> > ...
> > flow
> > identification information provided by modems in the Traffic
> > Classification Data Item defined in [RFC9892]
> > ...
> > flow identifier as defined by the Traffic Classification
> > Data Item [RFC9892]
> > 
> > Thank you.
> > 
> > Lynne Bartholomew
> > RFC Production Center
> > 
> > On Dec 23, 2025, at 2:56 PM, Lynne Bartholomew 
> > <[email protected]> wrote:
> > 
> > Dear authors,
> > 
> > Apologies for not spotting this earlier:  We see the following text in this 
> > document:
> > 
> > Traffic Classification Data Items provided by the modem are defined in 
> > [RFC9892].
> > 
> > However, it appears that RFC 9892 only defines one Traffic Classification 
> > Data Item.  Please note that it also defines two Sub-Data Items.
> > 
> > Should "Traffic Classification Data Items provided by the modem are" be 
> > "The Traffic Classification Data Item provided by the modem is" or possibly 
> > "Traffic Classification Sub-Data Items provided by the modem are"?  Or does 
> > the text refer to multiple instances of the Traffic Classification Data 
> > Item defined in RFC 9892 (in which case perhaps this should be clarified)?
> > 
> > Thank you.
> > 
> > Lynne Bartholomew
> > RFC Production Center
> > 
> > 
> >> On Dec 22, 2025, at 8:53 AM, Lynne Bartholomew 
> >> <[email protected]> wrote:
> >> 
> >> Hi, Eric and Bow-Nan.
> >> 
> >> We have noted your approvals on the AUTH48 status page:
> >> 
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9893
> >> 
> >> As this document normatively depends on RFC-to-be 9892, it will be 
> >> published when RFC-to-be 9892 is published.
> >> 
> >> Thank you!
> >> 
> >> Lynne Bartholomew
> >> RFC Production Center
> >> 
> >>> From: "Cheng, Bow-Nan - 0662 - MITLL" <[email protected]>
> >>> Subject: Re: [EXT] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9893 
> >>> <draft-ietf-manet-dlep-credit-flow-control-19> for your review
> >>> Date: December 18, 2025 at 6:13:07 PM PST
> >>> To: Lynne Bartholomew <[email protected]>, Eric Kinzie 
> >>> <[email protected]>
> >>> Cc: Lou Berger <[email protected]>, "[email protected]" 
> >>> <[email protected]>, "[email protected]" <[email protected]>, 
> >>> "[email protected]" <[email protected]>, 
> >>> "[email protected]" <[email protected]>, 
> >>> "[email protected]" <[email protected]>, 
> >>> "[email protected]" <[email protected]>
> >>> 
> >>> I'm fine with this document moving forward -- thanks
> >> 
> >>> On Dec 18, 2025, at 4:15 PM, Eric Kinzie <[email protected]> wrote:
> >>> 
> >>> Lynne,
> >>> 
> >>> I approve this document in its current form.  No further updates needed 
> >>> for me.
> >>> 
> >>> Thanks,
> >>> Eric
> >>> 
> >>> On Mon Dec 15 10:42:42 -0800 2025, Lynne Bartholomew wrote:
> >>>> Dear Bow-Nan and Eric,
> >>>> 
> >>>> A reminder that we do not believe that we have heard from you regarding 
> >>>> the status of this document.  Please let us know whether further updates 
> >>>> are needed or you approve this document for publication in its current 
> >>>> form.
> >>>> 
> >>>> The latest files are posted here.  Please refresh your browser:
> >>>> 
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.txt
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.pdf
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.html
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.xml
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-diff.html
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-rfcdiff.html (side by side)
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48diff.html
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48rfcdiff.html (side by 
> >>>> side)
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastdiff.html
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastrfcdiff.html (side by 
> >>>> side)
> >>>> 
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff1.html
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff2.html
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-alt-diff.html
> >>>> 
> >>>> The AUTH48 status page is here:
> >>>> 
> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9893
> >>>> 
> >>>> Thank you!
> >>>> 
> >>>> Lynne Bartholomew
> >>>> RFC Production Center
> >>>> 
> >>>>> On Dec 9, 2025, at 4:13 PM, Lynne Bartholomew 
> >>>>> <[email protected]> wrote:
> >>>>> 
> >>>>> Hi, Lou.
> >>>>> 
> >>>>> We have noted your approval on the AUTH48 status page:
> >>>>> 
> >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9893
> >>>>> 
> >>>>> Thanks to you as well!
> >>>>> 
> >>>>> Lynne Bartholomew
> >>>>> RFC Production Center
> >>>>> 
> >>>>>> On Dec 8, 2025, at 3:29 PM, Lou Berger <[email protected]> wrote:
> >>>>>> 
> >>>>>> The document looks good to me.
> >>>>>> 
> >>>>>> Thank you for all the work!
> >>>>>> 
> >>>>>> Lou
> >>>>>> 
> >>>>>> On 12/8/2025 1:25 PM, Lynne Bartholomew wrote:
> >>>>>>> Dear Bow-Nan, Lou, and Eric,
> >>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>> Checking in with you regarding the status of this document.  Please 
> >>>>>>> let us know whether further updates are needed or you approve this 
> >>>>>>> document for publication in its current form.
> >>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>> The latest files are posted here.  Please refresh your browser:
> >>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.txt
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.pdf
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.html
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.xml
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-diff.html
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-rfcdiff.html (side by side)
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48diff.html
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48rfcdiff.html (side 
> >>>>>>> by side)
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastdiff.html
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastrfcdiff.html (side by 
> >>>>>>> side)
> >>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff1.html
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff2.html
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-alt-diff.html
> >>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>> The AUTH48 status page is here:
> >>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9893
> >>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>> Thank you!
> >>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>> Lynne Bartholomew
> >>>>>>> RFC Production Center
> >>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>> On Dec 3, 2025, at 9:03 AM, Lynne Bartholomew 
> >>>>>>>> <[email protected]> wrote:
> >>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>> Hi, Eric.  Thanks for your prompt reply to our follow-up items!  We 
> >>>>>>>> have changed '"Credit Window Initialization"' to "credit window 
> >>>>>>>> initialization" (quotation marks removed; they're here only to show 
> >>>>>>>> what was updated).
> >>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>> This update is reflected in the latest files, which are posted here. 
> >>>>>>>>  Please refresh your browser:
> >>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.txt
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.pdf
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.html
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.xml
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-diff.html
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-rfcdiff.html (side by 
> >>>>>>>> side)
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48diff.html
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48rfcdiff.html (side 
> >>>>>>>> by side)
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastdiff.html
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastrfcdiff.html (side by 
> >>>>>>>> side)
> >>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff1.html
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff2.html
> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-alt-diff.html
> >>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>> Thanks again!
> >>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>> Lynne Bartholomew
> >>>>>>>> RFC Production Center
> >>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>> On Dec 2, 2025, at 3:58 PM, Eric Kinzie <[email protected]> wrote:
> >>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>> On Tue Dec 02 13:21:58 -0800 2025, Lynne Bartholomew wrote:
> >>>>>>>>>> Hi, Eric.  Thank you for the email.
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> We have updated this document per your notes below.
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> A couple follow-up items for you:
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> * Please review our update regarding our question 8); it appears 
> >>>>>>>>>> that you approved our "Perhaps" text.  We kept both citations for 
> >>>>>>>>>> RFC 8175 to avoid possible confusion between "Status Data Item" 
> >>>>>>>>>> and "Credit Window Status Data Item".  Please let us know whether 
> >>>>>>>>>> or not our update is correct here (and if you object to the second 
> >>>>>>>>>> citation for RFC 8175).
> >>>>>>>>> I approved the "Perhaps" text.  Your update is correct.
> >>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> * May we change '"Credit Window Initialization"' to '"credit 
> >>>>>>>>>> window initialization"' in this sentence (appears to be used 
> >>>>>>>>>> generally and applies to this document only)?
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> Modems provide an initial credit window size at the time of "Credit
> >>>>>>>>>> Window Initialization".
> >>>>>>>>> Yes, changing that to lowercase letters makes sense.  I also think 
> >>>>>>>>> the
> >>>>>>>>> quotation marks can be removed, but I'll leave that to your 
> >>>>>>>>> judgement.
> >>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>> Thanks,
> >>>>>>>>> Eric
> >>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> = = = = =
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> The latest files are posted here.  Please refresh your browser:
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.txt
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.pdf
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.html
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893.xml
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-diff.html
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-rfcdiff.html (side by 
> >>>>>>>>>> side)
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48diff.html
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-auth48rfcdiff.html 
> >>>>>>>>>> (side by side)
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastdiff.html
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-lastrfcdiff.html (side 
> >>>>>>>>>> by side)
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff1.html
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-xmldiff2.html
> >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9893-alt-diff.html
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> Thanks again!
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>> Lynne Bartholomew
> >>>>>>>>>> RFC Production Center
> >>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> On Dec 2, 2025, at 8:38 AM, Eric Kinzie <[email protected]> wrote:
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> Lynne, please see my responses below.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> Thanks,
> >>>>>>>>>>> Eric
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> On Mon Dec 01 08:33:00 -0800 2025, Lynne Bartholomew wrote:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Authors,
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> necessar=
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> y) the following questions, which are also in the source file.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 1) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> appear in =
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> title) for use on <https://www.rfc-editor.org/search>. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 2) <!-- [rfced] Abstract:  As it appears that the two new 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> message types
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> (Credit Control and Credit Control Response) also figure 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> prominently
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> in this document (and appear to be mentioned in the document 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> title),
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> would you like to also mention them in the Abstract?
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> This document defines new Dynamic Link Exchange Protocol (DLEP) 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Items that are used to support credit-based flow control.  
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> window control is used to regulate when data may be sent to an
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> associated virtual or physical queue.  The Data Items are 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> extensible
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> and reusable.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Possibly:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> This document defines new Dynamic Link Exchange Protocol (DLEP) 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Items that are used to support credit-based flow control.  
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> window control is used to regulate when data may be sent to an
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> associated virtual or physical queue.  These Data Items are
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> extensible and reusable.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> This document also defines new messages that support credit 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> window
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> control. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> That change is fine.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 3) <!-- [rfced] FYI:  We have added expansions for 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> abbreviations where
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> they are first used, per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Guide")
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> (https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc7322).  Please review the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> following expansions to ensure correctness.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> DSCP: Differentiated Services Code Point (Figure 1)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> MAC: Media Access Control (Section 2)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> PCP: Priority Code Point (Figure 1) -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 4) <!-- [rfced] Section 1:  We updated "control plane pause 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> based
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> mechanism" per RFC 8651.  Please let us know any objections.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> For example, a credit-window
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> scheme for destination-specific flow control which provides 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> aggregate
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> flow control for both modem and routers has been proposed in
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [I-D.ietf-manet-credit-window], and a control plane pause based
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> mechanism is defined in [RFC8651].
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Currently:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> For example, a credit-window
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> scheme for destination-specific flow control that provides 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> aggregate
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> flow control for both modems and routers has been proposed in
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [Credit-Window-Extension], and a mechanism referred to as the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Control-Plane-Based Pause Extension is defined in [RFC8651]. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 5) <!-- [rfced] Section 2:  We had trouble determining what is 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> listed in
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> this sentence.  We updated as follows.  If this is incorrect, 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> please
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> clarify the text.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> This means that the use of FIDs, TIDs and the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> association of a TID to a DLEP destination enables a modem to 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> share
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> or dedicate resources as needed to match the specifics of its
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> implementation and its attached transmission technology.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Currently:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> This means that the use
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> of FIDs and TIDs, and the association of a TID to a DLEP 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> destination,
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> enable a modem to share or dedicate resources as needed to 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> match the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> specifics of its implementation and its attached transmission
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> technology. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 6) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.1:  We had trouble following this 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> sentence.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Does "framing" mean "frame size" or something else?
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> In the example of Ethernet, framing,
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> header and trailer are all included in this count. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> "framing" is used here as it is used in the Ethernet standard.  I 
> >>>>>>>>>>> would
> >>>>>>>>>>> prefer to leave this unchanged.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 7) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.2.1:  We had trouble parsing these 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> sentences.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> If the suggested text is not correct, please clarify "having 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> data
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> traffic available to send, but no credits available".
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Modems will need to balance the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> load generated by sending and processing credit window increases
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> against a router having data traffic available to send, but no
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> credits available.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> ...
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Routers will need to balance the load
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> generated by sending and processing credit window requests 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> against
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> having data traffic available to send, but no credits available.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Suggested:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Modems will need to balance the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> load generated by sending and processing credit window increases
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> against a router that has data traffic available to send but no
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> available credits.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> ...
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Routers will need to balance the load
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> generated by sending and processing credit window requests 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> against
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> having data traffic available to send but no available credits. 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 8) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3:  Does "a Status Data Item" refer
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> specifically to the Status Data Item defined in RFC 8175 - in 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> which
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> case RFC 8175 should be cited here - or does it refer to the 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Window Status Data Item as defined in this document?
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> In particular, the node parsing
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the Data Item MUST terminate the session with a Status Data Item
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> indicating Invalid Data.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Perhaps:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> In particular, the node parsing
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the Data Item MUST terminate the session with a Status Data Item
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [RFC8175] indicating "Invalid Data".
> >>>>>>>>>>> It refers to the Status Data Item defined in RFC 8175.  This 
> >>>>>>>>>>> wording
> >>>>>>>>>>> is fine.  I think it is also ok to remove "; see [RFC8175]" from 
> >>>>>>>>>>> the
> >>>>>>>>>>> previous sentence if this seems repetitive.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Or possibly:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> In particular, the node parsing
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the Data Item MUST terminate the session with a Credit Window 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Status
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data Item indicating "Invalid Data" as defined in [RFC8175]. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 9) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.1:  As the dashes initially 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> appeared to be
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> minus signs, we changed them to colons.  If this is incorrect, 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> please
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> consider whether these entries could be written in some other 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> way.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> We also gave the table a title.  Please let us know any 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> objections.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> If you prefer a different title, please specify.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original (dashes are broken in order to avoid xml2rfc's "Double
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> hyphen within comment" error):
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Value  Scale
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> - - - - -
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 0   B - Bytes     (Octets)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 1  KB - Kilobytes (B/1024)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 2  MB - Megabytes (KB/1024)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 3  GB - Gigabytes (MB/1024)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Currently:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> +=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D+=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> =3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D+
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> | Value |          Scale          |
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> +=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D+=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> =3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D+
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> | 0     | B: Bytes (Octets)       |
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> +- - - -+- - - - - - - - - - - - -+
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> | 1     | KB: Kilobytes (B/1024)  |
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> +- - - -+- - - - - - - - - - - - -+
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> | 2     | MB: Megabytes (KB/1024) |
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> +- - - -+- - - - - - - - - - - - -+
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> | 3     | GB: Gigabytes (MB/1024) |
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> +- - - -+- - - - - - - - - - - - -+
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Table 1: Valid Scale Field Values -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> That table looks good.  No objection.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 10) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.1:  Does "Credit Value" 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> specifically refer
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> to the Credit Value field, or does it mean "credit value" as 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> used
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> generally elsewhere in this document (e.g., "appropriate credit
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> values" as written in Section 2)?
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> If the resulting
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Value results in the credit window exceeding the 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> represented
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Window Max Size, the Credit Window Max Size field value 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> is
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> used as the new credit window size. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> It means "credit value" as used generally elsewhere and should 
> >>>>>>>>>>> not be
> >>>>>>>>>>> capitalized.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> New:
> >>>>>>>>>>> If the resulting
> >>>>>>>>>>> credit value results in the credit window exceeding the 
> >>>>>>>>>>> represented
> >>>>>>>>>>> Credit Window Max Size, the Credit Window Max Size field value is
> >>>>>>>>>>> used as the new credit window size.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 11) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.2:  Because this sentence as 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> written
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> indicated that the data plane state is updated as needed, we 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> changed
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> "are" to "is" accordingly (also per "In both cases, a router 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> MUST
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> also ensure that any data plane state, e.g.,
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [I-D.ietf-manet-dlep-credit-flow-control], that is associated 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> with
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the TID is updated as needed." in
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification, where it cites 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> this
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> document).  If this is incorrect, please clarify what is being
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> updated as needed.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> If the traffic classification information is located, the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> router MUST ensure that any data plane state that is associated 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> with
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the TID and its corresponding FIDs are updated as needed (per
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Section 2.1).
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Currently:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> If the traffic classification information is located, the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> router MUST ensure that any data plane state that is associated 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> with
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the TID and its corresponding FIDs is updated as needed (per
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Section 2.1). -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 12) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.3:  Does "a Credit Window Status 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data Item
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> or items" mean "one or more Credit Window Status Data Items" 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> here, or
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> does "or items" refer to some other types of items other than 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Items?  We ask because we see "Credit Window Status Data 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Item(s)" in
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the next sentence.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original (the next sentence is included for context):
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> When a Credit Window Grant Data Item is received in other
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> message types, the receiving router MUST send a Credit Window 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Status
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data Item or items reflecting the resulting Credit Window value 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> of
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the updated credit window.  When the Credit Grant Data Item is
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> received in a Destination Up Message, the Credit Window Status 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Item(s) MUST be sent in the corresponding Destination Up 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Response
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Message.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Perhaps:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> When a Credit Window Grant Data Item is received in other
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> message types, the receiving router MUST send one or more Credit
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Window Status Data Items reflecting the resultant Credit Window
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> value of the updated credit window. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> This means "one or more Credit Window Status Data Items".
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> New:
> >>>>>>>>>>> For each Credit Window Grant Data Item received in other
> >>>>>>>>>>> message types, the receiving router MUST send a Credit Window 
> >>>>>>>>>>> Status
> >>>>>>>>>>> Data Item reflecting the resulting Credit Window value of
> >>>>>>>>>>> the updated credit windows.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 13) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.5:  Should "credit request" be 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> "credit
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> window request" as used generally elsewhere in the text?  We 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> don't
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> see "credit request" used anywhere else in this document or 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> group of
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> documents (Cluster 541 /
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/cluster_info.php?cid=3DC541).
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> A special FID value, as defined below, is used to
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> indicate that a credit request is being made across all queues. 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> Yes, it should be "credit window request".
> >>>>>>>>>>> New:
> >>>>>>>>>>> A special FID value, as defined below, is used to
> >>>>>>>>>>> indicate that a credit window request is being made across all 
> >>>>>>>>>>> queues.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 14) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.5:  We do not see a Type field in 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> RFC 8175,
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> but we see a "Data Item Type" field.  May we update as suggested
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> (per Section 11.3 ("DLEP Generic Data Item") of RFC 8175), to
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> distinguish this definition from the definitions of Length in
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Sections 11.1 ("DLEP Signal Header") and 11.2 ("DLEP Message 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Header")
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> of RFC 8175, which do not mention excluding a "Type" field?
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> As specified in [RFC8175], Length is the number of octets in the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data Item, excluding the Type and Length fields.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Suggested:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> As specified in [RFC8175], Length is the number of octets in the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data Item, excluding the Data Item Type and Length fields. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 15) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3.5:  We changed "Credit Increment" 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> to "credi=
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> t
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> window increment" here, as we could not find the 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> initial-capitalized
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> form elsewhere in this document, in the group (cluster) of 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> related
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> documents, or in any published RFC to date.  This update is 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> also in
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> line with this sentence from Section 2.2.1:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> A modem receiving this
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> message MUST respond with a Credit Control Response Message 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> based on
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the received message and Data Item and the processing defined in
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Section 2.2.2, which will typically result in credit window
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> increments being provided.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Please let us know any objections.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> A modem receiving this Data Item MUST provide a Credit 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Increment for
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the indicated credit windows via Credit Window Grant Data Items
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> carried in a new Credit Control Message.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Currently:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> A modem receiving this Data Item MUST provide a credit window
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> increment for the indicated credit windows via Credit Window 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Grant
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Data Items carried in a new Credit Control Message. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 16) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.4:  We changed "the mismatch of 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> capabilities"
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> to "any mismatch in capabilities" per
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-ether-credit-extension.  Please let us 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> know any
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> objections.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> In
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> either case, the mismatch of capabilities SHOULD be reported to 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> user via normal network management mechanisms, such as the user
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> interface or error logging.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Currently:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> In
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> either case, any mismatch in capabilities SHOULD be reported to 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> user via normal network management mechanisms, such as the user
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> interface or error logging. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 17) <!-- [rfced] Section 4:  We had trouble following "some 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> updated
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> references to external documents listed below" in this 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> paragraph.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> It appears that "external documents" is intended to refer to
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [BCP195], [IEEE-802.1AE], and [IEEE-8802-1X].
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> However, we see that [RFC8175] cites [IEEE-802.1X] ("IEEE 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Standards
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> for Local and metropolitan area networks-Port-Based Network 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Access
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Control"), but this document cites [IEEE-8802-1X] ("IEEE/ISO/IEC
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> International Standard-Telecommunications and exchange between
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> information technology systems-Requirements for local and
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> metropolitan area networks-Part 1X:Port-based network access
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> control").
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> May we update as suggested?  If not, please clarify the text.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> The transport layer security mechanisms documented in 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [RFC8175], with
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> some updated references to external documents listed below, can 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> be
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> applied to this document.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Suggested:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> The transport layer security mechanisms documented in [RFC8175],
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> along with the latest versions of [BCP195], [IEEE-802.1AE], and
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [IEEE-8802-1X] at the time of this writing, can be applied to 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> this
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> document. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> The IEEE documents should not be referenced in this sentence.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> New:
> >>>>>>>>>>> The transport layer security mechanisms documented in [RFC8175],
> >>>>>>>>>>> along with the latest version of [BCP195] at the time of this 
> >>>>>>>>>>> writing,
> >>>>>>>>>>> can be applied to this document.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 18) <!-- [rfced] [IEEE-802.1AE]:  The title listed here does 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> not match
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the title found at the provided URL.  Is the intent here to
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> specifically point to Amendment 4 (in which case the citation 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> string
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> should be changed to [IEEE-802.1AEdk-2023] and the URL should be
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> changed to <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/10225636>), or 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> would
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> you prefer to list [IEEE-802.1AE] per
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification-17?
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [IEEE-802.1AE]
> >>>>>>>>>>>>>   "IEEE Standard for Local and metropolitan area networks-
> >>>>>>>>>>>>>   Media Access Control (MAC) Security Amendment 4: MAC
> >>>>>>>>>>>>>   Privacy protection",
> >>>>>>>>>>>>>   <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/8585421>.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> As listed in the edited copy of
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification-17:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [IEEE-802.1AE]
> >>>>>>>>>>>>>   IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Local and metropolitan area
> >>>>>>>>>>>>>   networks-Media Access Control (MAC) Security",
> >>>>>>>>>>>>>   DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2018.8585421, IEEE Std 802.1AE-2018,
> >>>>>>>>>>>>>   December 2018,
> >>>>>>>>>>>>>   <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/8585421>. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> I don't think it's necessary to specify amendment 4.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> New:
> >>>>>>>>>>> [IEEE-802.1AE]
> >>>>>>>>>>>   IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Local and metropolitan area
> >>>>>>>>>>>   networks-Media Access Control (MAC) Security",
> >>>>>>>>>>>   DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2018.8585421, IEEE Std 802.1AE-2018,
> >>>>>>>>>>>   December 2018,
> >>>>>>>>>>>   <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/8585421>. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 19) <!-- [rfced] Appendix B:  We changed "traffic 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> classification data sub
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> items" to "Traffic Classification Sub-Data Items" per
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification and the rest of 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> this
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> group (Cluster 541 /
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/cluster_info.php?cid=3DC541) of 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> documents.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Please let us know any objections.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [I-D.ietf-manet-dlep-traffic-classification] defines the traffic
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> classification data sub items such as DiffServ code points that 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> map
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> to the FIDs.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Currently:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> [RFC9892] defines the Traffic
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Classification Sub-Data Items, such as DSCPs, that map to the 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> FIDs. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 20) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> of the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> online Style Guide at
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>,
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> and let us know if any changes are needed.  Updates of this 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> nature
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> typically result in more precise language, which is helpful for
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> readers.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> this
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> should still be reviewed as a best practice. -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> Reviewed.  I haven't found anything that does not comply with the 
> >>>>>>>>>>> NIST
> >>>>>>>>>>> guidance.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 21) <!-- [rfced] Please let us know if any changes are needed 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> for the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> following:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> a) The following terms were used inconsistently in this 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> document.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> We chose to use the latter forms.  Please let us know any 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> objections.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Additional Credit (field name, i.e., "Additional Credit:") /
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Additional Credits ("Additional Credits field")
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> credit based flow control / credit-based flow control (added 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> hyphen)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit-Based Flow Control (in text) / credit-based flow control
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Control message (2 instances) / Credit Control Message
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Control Response message (1 instance) /
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Control Response Message
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Window size (1 instance, i.e., "a Credit Window size") /
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> credit window size (7 instances, e.g., "an initial credit window
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> size") (used generally throughout Section 2)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> data item / Data Item (per the rest of this document and per 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> this
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> group (cluster) of documents)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> different Credit windows / different credit windows
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Messages / messages ("common Messages", "No messages")
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> (We changed "common Messages" to "common messages".)
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Window Association Data Item (2 instances in Appendix B) /
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Window Association Data Item (10 instances in text,
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the table entry in the IANA Considerations section, and
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> <https://www.iana.org/assignments/dlep-parameters/>)
> >>>>>>>>>>> OK.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> b) The following term appears to be used inconsistently in this
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> document.  Please let us know which form is preferred.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Window / credit window (used generally, e.g., "associated
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Window", "associated credit window",
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 'logical "Credit Window(s)s"')
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> (Note:  We also see 'logical "Credit Windows"' in
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-da-credit-extension.  Otherwise, all of 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> documents in this group of documents use the lowercase form
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> "credit window" when used generally.)
> >>>>>>>>>>> Let's use lowercase "credit window" when used generally.
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> c) Please let us know how/if the following should be made 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> consistent:
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Grant Data Item (3 instances in text) /
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Credit Window Grant Data Item (~13 instances in text) /
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Grant Data Item (2 instances in text) ("each Grant Data Item",
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> "or Grant Data Item")
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Suggested, assuming that these different forms all refer to the
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> same type of Data Item:  Credit Window Grant Data Item, per
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> <https://www.iana.org/assignments/dlep-parameters/>.
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> Alternatively, please let us know if the IANA entry needs to
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> be changed (e.g., from "Credit Window Grant" to "Credit Grant"
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> or simply "Grant", noting that any such change would not match
> >>>>>>>>>>>>> the format of the other entries on the page.) -->
> >>>>>>>>>>> These can all be changed to "Credit Window Grant Data Item".
> >>>>> 
> >>>> 
> >> 
> > 
> > 
> 

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