Hi Karen, thanks for the update.

(nearly) Everything looks very good.

On doing another scan, I noticed a couple of minor issues:
1. Hannes' affiliation is still reported as H-BRS in the header, but
it should be "UniBw M."
2. In §5.4, since the prose now says "this example uses line wrapping
per [RFC8792]", we could remove the similar text from the example just
below.

Once these two items are fixed, I approve publication of the document.

Thank you very much for the great work!

cheers, t


On Tue, 9 Jun 2026 at 22:50, Karen Moore <[email protected]> wrote:
>
> Hi Thomas,
>
> We have updated our files accordingly. Please let us know if you approve the 
> document in its current form or if any further updates are needed. We will 
> await approvals from each author prior to moving forward with publication.
>
> 1) Note that for Figures 1 and 2, we made “topology” uppercase (rather than 
> making “Conceptual Messages” lowercase). Thanks for pointing that out.
>
> —Files (please refresh)—
>
> Updated XML file:
> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999.xml
>
> Updated output files:
> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999.txt
> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999.pdf
> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999.html
>
> Diff files showing all changes made during Final Review (formally AUTH48):
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>
> Diff files showing only changes made during the last editing round:
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>
> Diff files showing all changes:
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>
> For the status of this document, please see:
> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9999
>
> Best regards,
>
> Karen Moore
> RFC Production Center
>
>
> > On Jun 9, 2026, at 7:35 AM, Thomas Fossati <[email protected]> 
> > wrote:
> >
> > Hi Karen,
> >
> > Thanks very much for your changes.
> >
> > Please find some more comments below.
> >
> > cheers!
> >
> > On Fri, 5 Jun 2026 at 22:46, Karen Moore wrote:
> >> Hi Thomas,
> >>
> >> Thank you for your reply!  We have updated our files accordingly.  We
> >> have a few additional questions:
> >>
> >> 1) We note that “Collection CMW” is preferred. Please let us know
> >> if/how you would like this sentence to be updated.
> >>
> >> Current:
> >>   CMW Records, Tags, and Collections alone do not offer authenticity,
> >>   integrity protection, or confidentiality.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>   Record, Tag, and Collection CMWs alone do not offer authenticity,
> >>   integrity protection, or confidentiality.
> >
> > The "Perhaps" looks better.
> >
> >> 2) In Section 5.4, we replaced "҄@\xA0D\xD9\u0001\xF5\xA0\@" with "…".
> >> Please review and let us know if any further changes are needed.
> >
> > After some more discussion, we believe that it's worth annotating it
> > with something more meaningful like "serialized CM value"
> >
> >> 3) We moved Dionna Glaze to the Acknowledgements section. If she
> >> should be listed as a contributor instead, please let us know.
> >
> > Dionna told us that her employer has not yet approved her contributions
> > to the IETF.  Therefore, I don't think it would be appropriate to list
> > her as a contributor.
> >
> >> —Files—
> >> Note that it may be necessary for you to refresh your browser to view
> >> the most recent version. Please review the document carefully to
> >> ensure satisfaction as we do not make changes once it has been
> >> published as an RFC.
> >>
> >> Please contact us with any further updates or with your approval of
> >> the document in its current form.  We will await approvals from each
> >> author prior to moving forward in the publication process.
> >
> > After reviewing the whole document we have the following comments:
> >
> > 1. Abstract and Introduction (two instances):
> >
> >  "[...] conveyed between RATS roles during RATS."
> >
> > sounds like the sentence was cut short.
> >
> > We'd like to propose:
> >
> >  "[...] conveyed between RATS roles during RATS interactions."
> >
> > 2. The new caption of Figure 2 has a couple of typos:
> >  a. missing "of" after "Conveyance"
> >  b. extra '"' at the end
> >
> > Also, these captions are the only place where "Conceptual Messages" is
> > capitalised like this.  Should they be "conceptual messages" instead?
> >
> > 3. Hannes's affiliation is not current and should be updated to:
> >
> >   Hannes Tschofenig
> >   University of the Bundeswehr Munich
> >   Institute of Distributed Intelligent Systems
> >   Werner-Heisenberg-Weg 39
> >   85577 Neubiberg
> >   Germany
> >   Email: [email protected]
> >
> > 4. The [TLS-DTLS] reference is no longer active.  It has been replaced
> > by I-D.fossati-seat-early-attestation.  We should update it and display
> > it as [RA-TLS-EARLY].
> >
> > 5. In the abstract:
> >
> >  "[...] evolves message serialization formats without breaking
> >   compatibility"
> >
> > suggests the wrong idea that CMW itself drives the evolution of
> > message serialisation formats, whereas the concept here is that CMW
> > enables the smooth evolution of serialisation formats.
> >
> > We'd like to propose:
> >
> >  "[...] enables the evolution of message serialization formats without
> >   breaking compatibility"
> >
> > 6. In the abstract, the following statement contains a couple of
> > inaccuracies:
> >
> >    "[...] this document defines a media type and a CoAP Content-Format
> >     to transport CMWs over protocols"
> >
> > The "to transport" part makes it sound as though the Content-Format is
> > transporting the CMW.
> >
> > Besides, we define more than one media type and one C-F.
> >
> > Therefore, we'd like to propose the following:
> >
> >  "[...] this document defines media types and CoAP Content-Formats
> >   which may be used to identify CMWs when transported over protocols".
> >
> > 7. In Section 3.1.1: we say "the ind byte string" but it should be "the
> > ind bitmap" instead.
> >
> > 8. We have also just noticed that some incorrect information has been
> > introduced:
> >
> >  "IANA has allocated CBOR tag numbers and the corresponding data items,
> >   as shown in Table 4."
> >
> > However, in this case, IANA hasn't done any allocation; the carve-out
> > has been in place since RFC9277.
> >
> > To fix the two problems above we propose:
> >
> > OLD
> >
> > 9.6.2.  CBOR Tags per RFC 9277
> >
> >   Registering the CoAP Content-Formats listed in Table 3 automatically
> >   allocates CBOR tags in the range [1668546817, 1668612095] using the
> >   TN() transform defined in Appendix B of [RFC9277].  IANA has
> >   allocated CBOR tag numbers and the corresponding data items as shown
> >   in Table 4.
> >
> >   +============+===============================+
> >   | Tag Number | Tag Content                   |
> >   +============+===============================+
> >   | 1668547091 | bytes .cbor cbor-cmw          |
> >   +------------+-------------------------------+
> >   | 1668547092 | bytes .cbor signed-cbor-cmw   |
> >   +------------+-------------------------------+
> >   | 1668547093 | bytes-wrapped json-cmw        |
> >   +------------+-------------------------------+
> >   | 1668547094 | bytes-wrapped signed-json-cmw |
> >   +------------+-------------------------------+
> >
> >           Table 4: TN-Derived CBOR Tags
> >
> >   Figure 7 extends the $cbor-tag socket defined in Section 3.2 to add
> >   the definitions of the associated Tag CMWs.  Note that CMWs in Tag
> >   and Record form are excluded from the productions.  This is because
> >   they can already be represented as a CMW, so the extra wrapping would
> >   be redundant.
> >
> >   $cbor-tag /= tag-cm-cbor<1668547091, cbor-collection>
> >   $cbor-tag /= tag-cm-cbor<1668547092, signed-cbor-cmw>
> >   $cbor-tag /= tag-cm-data<1668547093> ; bytes(cmw+json collection)
> >   $cbor-tag /= tag-cm-data<1668547094> ; bytes(cmw+jws)
> >
> >                       Figure 7: Tag CMW Definitions
> >
> > NEW
> >
> > 9.6.2.  CBOR Tags per RFC 9277
> >
> >   Registering the CoAP Content-Formats listed in Table 3 automatically
> >   allocates CBOR tags in the range [1668546817, 1668612095] using the
> >   TN() transform defined in Appendix B of [RFC9277].  The allocated
> >   CBOR tag numbers and the corresponding data items are shown in
> >   Table 4.
> >
> >   Note that CMWs in Tag and Record form are excluded.  This is because
> >   they can already be represented as a CMW, so the extra wrapping would
> >   be redundant.
> >
> >   +============+===============================+
> >   | Tag Number | Tag Content                   |
> >   +============+===============================+
> >   | 1668547091 | bytes .cbor cbor-collection   |
> >   +------------+-------------------------------+
> >   | 1668547092 | bytes .cbor signed-cbor-cmw   |
> >   +------------+-------------------------------+
> >   | 1668547093 | bytes-wrapped json-collection |
> >   +------------+-------------------------------+
> >   | 1668547094 | bytes-wrapped signed-json-cmw |
> >   +------------+-------------------------------+
> >
> >           Table 4: TN-Derived CBOR Tags
> >
> >   Figure 7 extends the $cbor-tag socket defined in Section 3.2 to add
> >   the definitions of the associated Tag CMWs.
> >
> >   $cbor-tag /= tag-cm-cbor<1668547091, cbor-collection>
> >   $cbor-tag /= tag-cm-cbor<1668547092, signed-cbor-cmw>
> >   $cbor-tag /= tag-cm-data<1668547093> ; bytes(cmw+json collection)
> >   $cbor-tag /= tag-cm-data<1668547094> ; bytes(cmw+jws)
> >
> >                       Figure 7: Tag CMW Definitions
> >
> >> —Files—
> >> Note that it may be necessary for you to refresh your browser to view the 
> >> most recent version. Please review the document carefully to ensure 
> >> satisfaction as we do not make changes once it has been published as an 
> >> RFC.
> >>
> >> Please contact us with any further updates or with your approval of the 
> >> document in its current form.  We will await approvals from each author 
> >> prior to moving forward in the publication process.
> >>
> >> Updated XML file:
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999.xml
> >>
> >> Updated output files:
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999.txt
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999.pdf
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999.html
> >>
> >> Diff files showing all changes made during Final Review (formally AUTH48):
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999-auth48diff.html
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999-auth48rfcdiff.html (side by 
> >> side)
> >>
> >> Diff files showing all changes:
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999-diff.html
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9999-rfcdiff.html (side by side)
> >>
> >> For the status of this document, please see:
> >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9999
> >>
> >> Best regards,
> >>
> >> Karen Moore
> >> RFC Production Center
>

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