Authors,

While reviewing this document during Final Review, please resolve 
(as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the source file.

1. This document will become part of BCP 161 because it updates RFC 6291.
If this is not correct (i.e., it should be assigned a new BCP number), please
let us know.  

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2. Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in
the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search.


3. We note that [RFC9341] uses "Alternate-Marking" rather than 
"Alternate Marking". Should the hyphen be added here?
    
Current:
  Another example of "Hybrid Type I OAM" that is also "In-Data-Packet
  OAM" is Alternate Marking [RFC9341], when applied to data packets of a
  single stream.


4. For clarity, what does "allowing for packet loss computation" refer to?

Original:
   Instead, OAM
   packets are used for carrying information about observed network
   characteristics, namely user packet counter values, allowing for
   packet loss computation.
   
Option A (if characteristics allow for the computation):
   Instead, OAM
   packets are used for carrying information about observed network
   characteristics (namely, user packet counter values) allowing for
   packet loss computation.

Option B (if values allow for the computation):
   Instead, OAM
   packets are used for carrying information about observed network
   characteristics - namely, user packet counter values that allow for
   packet loss computation.


5. For clarity, should "Path Followed OAM" be "Path-Followed OAM"
or "Path-Following OAM"? This term has not appeared in any RFCs, and it
appears only once in this document.


6. FYI, we added hyphens to the section title to make
"3.4.  Packet-Forwarding-Treatment OAM" 
similar to usage of "Equal-Forwarding-Treatment OAM" and 
"Different-Forwarding-Treatment OAM" in this document.
Please let us know if you prefer otherwise.


7. For readability, may "forwarding (e.g., QoS) treatment" be 
  changed to "forwarding treatment (e.g., QoS)"?  There are 4 instances
  in this document. For example:
  
  Original:
 Equal-Forwarding-Treatment OAM:
    The OAM packets receive the same forwarding (e.g., QoS) treatment
    as user data packets.

  Perhaps:
 Equal-Forwarding-Treatment OAM:
    The OAM packets receive the same forwarding treatment (e.g., QoS)
    as user data packets.


8. Section 3.4: To make it clear to the reader why the 
definition of "In-band OAM" is being quoted here, would you like
to add a sentence (similar to that in Appendix A) here as well?

In other words, the quote is from the definition for "In-band OAM" 
in Section 1.1 of [RFC9551], and the mapping is explained in Appendix A:
  The property of "Equal-Forwarding-Treatment" is referred to in
  [RFC9551] as "In-band OAM".

Original:
  An example of "Equal-Forwarding-Treatment OAM" is presented in
  [RFC9551] in the context of Deterministic Networking (DetNet) OAM:
  "it traverses the same set of links and interfaces receiving the same         
                             
  QoS and Packet Replication, Elimination, and Ordering Functions               
                             
  (PREOF) treatment as the monitored DetNet flow".


9. For [P4-INT-2.1], may the provided URL be replaced? The URL provided
(https://p4.org/p4-spec/docs/INT_v2_1.pdf) is 404.  We have found the following 
URL,
which appears to match the information in the reference:
https://p4.org/wp-content/uploads/sites/53/p4-spec/docs/INT_v2_1.pdf
Is this the correct updated URL?


10. How may this be rephrased to avoid the repetition of 
"similar uses still use"? Does "documents" convey the intended meaning?

Original:
   Other similar uses, including [P4-INT-2.1], still use
   variations of "in-band", "in band", or "inband".

Perhaps:
   Other similar documents, including [P4-INT-2.1], still use
   variations of "in-band", "in band", or "inband".


11. Does RFC 9912 (which was draft-ietf-raw-architecture) 
still contain similar text? If not, please provide updated text.
(We were not able to identify the similar text.)
   
   Current:
   Similarly, the property of "Different-
Forwarding-Treatment OAM" can be found in the following definition in
[RFC9551]: "Out-of-band OAM: an active OAM method whose path through
the DetNet domain may not be topologically identical to the path of
the monitored DetNet flow, its test packets may receive different QoS
and/or PREOF treatment, or both."  [RFC9912] uses similar text.


12. Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online
Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>
and let us know if any changes are needed.  Updates of this nature typically
result in more precise language, which is helpful for readers.

Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this should
still be reviewed as a best practice.

Thank you.

Alice Russo
RFC Production Center


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RFC 10014 (draft-ietf-opsawg-oam-characterization)

Title            : Guidelines for Characterizing the Term "OAM"
Author(s)        : C. Pignataro,
                  A. Farrel,
                  T. Mizrahi
WG Chair(s)      : Joe Clarke, Benoît Claise
Area Director(s) : Mohamed Boucadair, Mahesh Jethanandani

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