On Sun, 2010-07-25 at 16:31 +0200, david blanchard wrote:
> I've uploaded a first draft of the pitch that we can use for our future
> meetings -> http://community.hackit.cx/wiki/Pitch
Cool, a presentation, miam! : )
The content is good, but I have one main issue: there is way too much
text IMHO. We'll end up reading what's on the screen, and the people
seeing the presentation will do the same instead of listening. The
presentation should support what we say (with take-aways and images),
not replace or duplicate it.
We should move most of the text to the notes (to be able to read it and
make sure we don't forget anything), and just let a few words on the
screen, and add more images. It will be *much* more impacting. If you
want, I can give it a try.
> It's still in process, I need to cross read it against the BP document and
> review some slides (especially the hackIt one... but for this we really need
> to think about positioning and AI in the next couple of days, it's going to
> become my first priority soon), but feel free to already give me some
> feedback if you have a little time.
Yup, that's the only place where I have anything to say about the
content - otherwise it's all good.
For the pitch, what about:
An adventure that takes place on the real web, where the player
discovers that artificial intelligences are waking up. They
offer to serve the player in exchange for his help. The player
will then team up with the AIs in their quest to gain more
consciousness, by hacking websites and impacting the web.
Btw - Are you the one pitching it to the investor this week? :D
> Deb, I've also uploaded it for you, if you want to have a first look at how
> it could be improved ! Let me know your thoughts, currently it's completely
> blank and empty so there is room for imagination :-)
Yup, would be good to have Deborah's opinion on how we could make it
more sexy here : )
Xavier.
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