Matthew, https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage/ fixed the warnings of the IPv4 addresses.
Thanks, Linda From: Matthew Bocci (Nokia) <matthew.bo...@nokia.com> Sent: Wednesday, June 28, 2023 1:34 AM To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com>; bess@ietf.org; draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org Subject: Re: Document shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-07 Linda Thanks. I-D nits is still complaining about the following: Checking nits according to https://www.ietf.org/id-info/checklist : ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- == There are 13 instances of lines with non-RFC6890-compliant IPv4 addresses in the document. If these are example addresses, they should be changed. I assume it is because you have many example addresses which include 'x' rather than an integer value, e.g. : "For example, in Figure 5 above, suppose that Route 10.1.x.x/16 can be carried by either MPLS or IPsec and Route 12.1.1.x/24 can only be.." Can you fix these example addresses and try to clear this error, please, as it will come back later? Regards Matthew From: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com<mailto:linda.dun...@futurewei.com>> Date: Tuesday, 27 June 2023 at 23:59 To: Matthew Bocci (Nokia) <matthew.bo...@nokia.com<mailto:matthew.bo...@nokia.com>>, bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org> <bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org>>, draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org> <draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org>> Subject: RE: Document shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-07 CAUTION: This is an external email. Please be very careful when clicking links or opening attachments. See the URL nok.it/ext for additional information. Matthew, We have agreed to move the last two people on the authors' list to the Contributors' list. https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage/ has fixed all the IDNITS issues. Hope you can request for the publication. Thanks, Linda From: Matthew Bocci (Nokia) <matthew.bo...@nokia.com<mailto:matthew.bo...@nokia.com>> Sent: Monday, June 26, 2023 3:59 AM To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com<mailto:linda.dun...@futurewei.com>>; bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org>; draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org> Subject: Re: Document shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-07 Hi Linda In addition, there seems to be an issue with the authors list. You have 7 listed at the header of the draft and in the authors section. The data tracker is only picking up 6 of these (not sure why). As you know, the RFC editor likes to restrict this to 5 unless there is a really good reason why there should be more. One way to resolve this is to list the editors as authors and move others to a 'contributors' section. Please can you resolve this. Thanks Matthew From: BESS <bess-boun...@ietf.org<mailto:bess-boun...@ietf.org>> on behalf of Matthew Bocci (Nokia) <matthew.bo...@nokia.com<mailto:matthew.bo...@nokia.com>> Date: Monday, 26 June 2023 at 11:14 To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com<mailto:linda.dun...@futurewei.com>>, bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org> <bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org>>, draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org> <draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org>> Subject: Re: [bess] Document shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-07 Hi Linda ID Nits is showing many errors in the references used in the draft (author-tools.ietf.org/api/idnits?url=https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-09.txt<https://author-tools.ietf.org/api/idnits?url=https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-09.txt>). I think this is because there are differences in the format used for the reference in the body text, and the bookmark in the references section is different. For example: == Missing Reference: 'RFC 4364' is mentioned on line 162, but not defined But the references section says: [RFC4364] E. rosen, Y. Rekhter, "BGP/MPLS IP Virtual Private networks (VPNs)", Feb 2006. There is no space between RFC and 4364. Also, please can you fix all the other ID-Nits issues before I request publication. Thanks Matthew From: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com<mailto:linda.dun...@futurewei.com>> Date: Monday, 27 March 2023 at 08:07 To: Matthew Bocci (Nokia) <matthew.bo...@nokia.com<mailto:matthew.bo...@nokia.com>>, bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org> <bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org>>, draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org> <draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org>> Subject: RE: Document shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-07 CAUTION: This is an external email. Please be very careful when clicking links or opening attachments. See http://nok.it/ext for additional information. Matthew, The revision based on your comments and suggestions has been uploaded: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage/ What is the next step for moving this draft forward to IESG? Thank you. Linda From: Matthew Bocci (Nokia) <matthew.bo...@nokia.com<mailto:matthew.bo...@nokia.com>> Sent: Wednesday, March 22, 2023 8:23 PM To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com<mailto:linda.dun...@futurewei.com>>; bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org>; draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org> Subject: Re: Document shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-07 Thanks Linda This looks fine to me. Regards Matthew From: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com<mailto:linda.dun...@futurewei.com>> Date: Tuesday, 21 March 2023 at 22:40 To: Matthew Bocci (Nokia) <matthew.bo...@nokia.com<mailto:matthew.bo...@nokia.com>>, bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org> <bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org>>, draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org> <draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org>> Subject: RE: Document shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-07 CAUTION: This is an external email. Please be very careful when clicking links or opening attachments. See http://nok.it/ext for additional information. Matthew, Thank you very much for the detailed review. All your comments have been addressed. Please see the attached changes. We will upload the revision next Monday. Thank you. Linda From: Matthew Bocci (Nokia) <matthew.bo...@nokia.com<mailto:matthew.bo...@nokia.com>> Sent: Monday, March 20, 2023 7:01 AM To: bess@ietf.org<mailto:bess@ietf.org>; draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org<mailto:draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-us...@ietf.org> Subject: Document shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-07 Authors, As is customary, please find attached my documents shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-07. There are a fair number of mostly editorial comments scattered throughout the draft, prefixed by 'MB>'. Please treat these as you would any other WG last call comments. Best regards Matthew
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