On 01/11/13 11:04, Jann Eike Kruse wrote: > "[...] Free Software is not about price, but liberty." > I suggest: > "[...] Free Software is not about price, it's about liberty." > "[...] Free Software is not about cost, it's about your freedom."
The original sentence is perfectly fine. Furthermore, comma splices are ungrammatical in English. > "Whoever controls the software therefore controls you." > I suggest: > "So whoever controls the software also controls you." No preference here. > "Sometimes it 'only' does not do exactly what you expected, > but there are also programs and apps that contain malicious > 'features' like leaking your data without your knowledge." > I suggest: > "Some programs and apps might not do exactly what you expect. > Others may contain malicious 'features' and abuse your > data or your device for their own purpose behind your back." I am not sure that the proposed replacement is good enough; however, neither is the original. My proposal: "The shortcomings of non-free software are sometimes limited to failing to meet your expectations; however, more often than not non-free software also leaks your data or hides other malicious 'features'." > Maybe use italics instead of '....' quotes? +1 -- Heiki "Repentinus" Ojasild FSFE Fellowship Representative mailto:[email protected] xmpp:[email protected] http://blogs.fsfe.org/repentinus/
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