Murray Kucherawy has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-dprive-rfc7626-bis-06: No Objection

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I'll add my thanks for this document.  I have tripped on some of the issues in
my experience, but some of the others described here were eye-opening.  I'm
also learning from the ensuing discussions.

Section 1:

A couple of nits:

* "DNS relies on caching heavily ..." -- suggest "DNS relies heavily on caching
..."

* "Both are a big privacy concern since ..." -- suggest "Both are big privacy
concerns since ...", unless you mean the two of them collectively (in which
case, please say so)

I agree with Warren in that it's not clear what's leaking in the example at the
bottom of the second paragraph of Section 4.2.

In Section 5.1, please expand "CPE" on first use.

I'm having trouble parsing the third paragraph of Section 5.2.  The fourth
paragraph in the same section needs some commas.



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