Please consider the following suggestions:



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The "and/" should be deleted since it does not add anything and is basically 
useless.  In a law document, it is useless.

The phrase "A and B" excludes all else and means   "both A and B".  The phrase 
"A or B" is inclusive and means, A, B, or both A and B. 
Who we
are and what we do
The
LibreOffice Documentation team is a group of volunteers who strive to
provide high quality guides for LibreOffice users and developers. You
can become part of the Documentation team by contributing to one or
more of our many projects. No matter what your level of experience
is, you can make a valuable contribution.

If you wish to imply that the group succeeds in writing high quality guides, 
take out strive.

Also, the word "provide" is an overused word that is imprecise.  Use "produce" 
instead.

Examples
of current projects:
        * User guides
        * Tutorials and how-tos
        * Blog
        * Quick reference cards
        * Assist with writing and editing as requested by Website and Help teams
Examples
of planned projects:
        * Administrators’ guide
        * BASIC Programmers’ guide
        * Technical writers’ / power users’ guide


There should be no space before or after the  "/"

The words "Examples of" do not add anything, are imprecise and should be 
deleted.,

Some
tasks can be quickly and easily without extra logins, much knowledge
of LibreOffice, or a lot of time or long-term commitment. These are
described on the Easy
Hacks page of the wiki and later in this chapter.

Two problems here, passive and no verb.  Rewrite as:
Some tasks do not require extra logins.  . . .   These tasks are . . . .


        * Mailing list – Most of our day-to-day communication takes place on 
the mailing list. To sign up for the list, send a blank e-mail message to 
[email protected] and follow the instructions that 
will be mailed back to you.
The dash after list should not have spaces before or after unless that is what 
is prescribed in your style sheet.

Generally main clauses of a technical document should be written in the present 
tense.  Thus, the sentence should read:  ". . .  and follow the instructions 
mailed back to you."  The phrase "that will be" adds nothing.


        * Wiki – Go to the wiki and create an account for yourself; the Create 
Account link is in the upper righthand corner of each wiki page.  

Delete "hand"   It is extra and therefore redundant and useless.


        * ODFAuthors – Ask on the mailing list for an administrator to create 
an account for you.
        * Blog – Ask on the mailing list for a blog administrator to create an 
account for you.  
Word order is awkward.  Better "On the mailing list, ask . . . ."


        * Most members of the documentation team will not need a login for the 
main LibreOffice website. If you do (for example, if you’re helping the Website 
team by reviewing or editing pages), ask on the Website mailing list for 
instructions on how to do this.Change "will not need a login for the main 
LibreOffice website" to "probably will not to log in to the main . . ."

Here, you are talking about future use, so "will + verb" is OK.  However, 
direct writing uses action verbs, and better to make it a probabilistic 
statement rather than an absolute statement.

 
Don't
feel confident of your writing skills or your level of knowledge
about OpenOffice.org itself? Reviewing documentation (especially docs
aimed at new users) is a great way to start. Is it written well for
the audience? Are the instructions correct? Is anything missing? Let
us know what needs fixing, or correct it yourself.

Better as "If you don't feel confident about your . . . ," you can help by 
reviewing . . . ."   Combine the sentences to make an overall more descriptive 
and clear statement."


All of the  headings "writing, editing, reviewing, maintenance" and 
descriptions of the activities under them should be parallel in structure for 
clarity.



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experience and what interests you.
 What
to read:
        * Relevant chapters of this Contributors’ Guide (some are specialized 
topics that you may not need to know; you can skip them).
        * The Documentation Development page on the wiki and linked pages 
including Easy Hacks.
 What
to do:
        * Choose what you’d like to work on. You are welcome to ask for 
guidance on the list.
        * For user guides: Follow instructions in Chapter 2 of this Guide to 
download and install the chapter template and write or review chapters. See 
other chapters for information on writing style, use of paragraph and 
characters styles in the template, and so on.
        * For blogging, see Chapter 4 of this Guide.
Instead of "What to read" and "What to do"  use "Please read" and "Please do 
the following."  Let's please be polite.
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