Hello All , Thank you Pauline, All your advices came handy and effective for me.
I beileve that although writing various essays will definitely improve my writing skill, correcting an essay in order to finally achieve an academically acceptable one is of the same importance. Working on various topics will certainly develop my vocabulary while maturing the same essay will undoubtedly improve my style of writing. So I apologize ;) beforehand to send you the same topic. Below, you can see Version 3 of vegetarian vs. meat-based diet. Today, vegetarian diet has gained extreme popularity all over the globe. Many people have substituted their meat-based diet with its meat-free counterparts containing nuts, beans, seeds, fruit and vegetables. For sure, there are certain reasons why they follow a vegetarian diet. First and foremost, foods from plant origin are healthier than meat-based ones. Many studies have shown that vegetarians seem to have a lower risk of obesity, heart disease and some forms of cancer. this is basically due to less fat and calories in these diets which reduces the likelihood of various health problems. Furthermore, animal-human disease mainly transmits through meat products so vegetarians are less probable to get infected. Secondly, a vegetarian diet is cheaper than eating meat and it is more convinient to prepare a delicious meat free dish as well. Finally, some people believe that it is wrong to kill animals either on account of their religious beliefs or their own personal philosoghy. All these together with many other possible reasons have persuaded people all over the world to adopt a vegetarian diet. However, it is clear that meat-free diets have inevitabe disadvantages if ithey are mproperly planned. many vegetarian diets suffer from shortcomings in essential nutrients such as Iron, zinc, vitamin B12, protein and calcium which are absolutely necessary for growth and development. A vegetarian diet must be supplimented by including dairy products or their equivalents from plant origin otherwise it leads to a severe nutritional deficiency. There is also the social problem of not being able to eat foods available at parties and restaurants. In my opinion, adopting a vegetarian diet is advisable in terms of health as long as it is carefully planned to provide the body with all vital nutrients, otherwise the disadvantages outweigh the advantages just by omitting meat and its derived products. *Elham* On Mon, Aug 17, 2009 at 10:50 PM, Elham Moazzen <[email protected]>wrote: > Thank you dear Simone; > > I have corrected the previous essay taking into account some internet > vegetarian sources ;) Here it is: > > Today, vegetarian diet has gained extreme popularity all over the globe. > Many people have substituted their meat-based diet with its meat-free > counterparts containing nuts, beans, seeds, fruit and vegetables. For sure, > there are certain reasons why they follow a vegetarian diet. > > First and foremost, vegetarian dishes are healthier than meat-based ones. > this is mainly due to their less fat and calories which reduce the > likelihood of suffering from heart disease. Moreover, their high fibre > content facilitates the digestion process. As a result, it minimizes bowel > problems. Furthermore, animal-human disease mainly transmits through > different kinds of meat so vegetarians are less likely to get > infected.Secondly, vegetarian diet is helpful for helthy weight loss. Its > low amount of fat prevents obesity which meat eaters generally suffer to a > great extent. A further advatnage is that a vegetarian diet is cheaper than > eating meat. Finally, some people believe that it is wrong to kill animals > either in terms of their religious beliefs or their own personal philosoghy. > > Nevertheless, it is clear that there are some disadvantages. > vegetarians lack a lot of the vitamis and minerals that are present in > meat, such as vitamin B12 or iron, or calcium if dairy products are not > included in the diet. There is also the social problem of not being able to > have food available at parties and restaurants. > > Overall, I personally believe that human's body requires all substances > included in vegetables and various meat. > Therefore, it is not reasonable to absolutely omit any of them. Instead, > one should strike a balance between vegetarian > and meat-based diets in order live healthier. > > > > > On Mon, Aug 17, 2009 at 2:58 PM, Elham Moazzen <[email protected]>wrote: > >> Dear all, >> I will at least send an essay a day to the group, for 1 month in order to >> improve my writing skills for IELTS academin module. >> I will be grateful if you extend my vocabulary by your proposed >> ideas and point my mistakes out. >> >> *Many people have changed from a mainly meat-based diet to a vegetarian >> one in recent years. * >> *What are the reasons for this and to what extent do you consider it a >> sensible option?* >> >> In recent years, people have increasingly prefered to consume more >> vegetables in their daily meals. Nearly, >> meat-based diets have replaced to a great extent with vegetarian ones in >> many areas of the world. there are >> many reasons why people follow a vegetarian diet. >> >> Firstly, some people are againts killing animals. This is either due to >> their religious obligations which prohibit >> them from harming other living creatures or their personal philosophy so >> as to preserve different animal species >> and cease them to suffer. Secondly, according to scientific findings, >> vegetables are much healthier than meat, >> especially the red meat, in terms of the fibre and low fat they constitue >> which prevents various bowel problems >> and heart diseases. Moreover, gaining a balanced weight is evidently a >> direct result of consuming more vegetables >> compared to obesity and overweight problems caused by meat products. >> Eventually, foods consisting of just vegetables >> are less expensive thus they are more affordable as daily dishes. >> >> Despite, a totally vegetarian diet has some disadvantages. Vegetables lack >> some vitamins and minerals which are >> necessary for brain and body development and resistance to various >> diseases. For instance, the calcium provided by >> diary products plays an essential role in bone strength and growth. On the >> other hand, people who only follow a pure >> vegetarian diet has difficulties in parties and restaurants which usually >> serve mixed dishes. >> >> Overall, I personally believe that human's body requires all substances >> included in vegetables and different types of meat. >> Therefore, it is not reasonable to absolutely omit any of them. Instead, >> one should strike a balance between vegetables >> and meat taking into account the consumption of more vegetables. >> >> >> >> -- >> >> "When you know what you want,and you want it badly enough,you'll find a >> way to get it." >> >> "Successful leaders have the courage to take action while others >> hesitate." >> > > > > -- > > "When you know what you want,and you want it badly enough,you'll find a way > to get it." > > "Successful leaders have the courage to take action while others hesitate." > -- "When you know what you want,and you want it badly enough,you'll find a way to get it." "Successful leaders have the courage to take action while others hesitate." --~--~---------~--~----~------------~-------~--~----~ You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "English Learner's Cafe" group. 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