> Don't be too hard on yourself, I happen to think you pulled off
> Chapter 5 rather well.
No, I honestly half-assed it. And I was well aware I was half-assing it,
because I did the exact same BS in the first draft that only a month ago a
friend and I were bitching about JKR doing in the final Harry Potter book.
There's no excuse for laziness, and I will fully admit culpability on this
score.
> Lets be honest, you were depicting a Q&A between Ami & Luna, I'd be
> worried if it WAS interesting. :)
*SNRK*
> > I have done extensive tweaking to the chapter in question, particularly
to
> > the exposition section, and have somehow managed to add an extra five
pages'
> > worth of material besides--even MORE exposition. X_X
>
> THIS worries me. Someone else brought this up and I'm going to remind
> you of it. This version of Luna started off as a rank-and-file foot
> soldier and even now is only Artemis's lackey. How much info can she
> have?
Well, she can have a lot more if she's having it fed wholesale to her by
Artemis through their mindlink, which is what I ended up doing for the extra
exposition.
Plus, do remember that just because she's a flunky, doesn't mean she's
uninformed. She WAS there during the Silver Millenium, and for about fifteen
thousand years has been Artemis' slave for one month of every century. In
order to make an effective servant out of her, it stands to reason he'd make
her reasonably well-informed. Or at least, exactly as (mis)informed(?) as he
needs to her to be.... ;)
And in case it wasn't obvious, Luna is a rather higher order of youma than
the majority of the ones the Senshi battled in the canon. She's not on the
order of the seven sealed in the rainbow crystals, nor the ones that killed
the Senshi at the North Pole, but she's definitely a more powerful and
intelligent youma than the typical cannon-fodder monster.
> Although I am looking forward to the scene where everyone finds out
> just how big of a bastard Artemis really is.
You expect it to be just ONE scene? XD
> Case in point:
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> One count of statutory rape (Makoto)
> Another possible count (Minako)(come on now, he has to be doing
> something to have kept her hanging on this long.
All he's doing with Minako is being a Charming British Gentleman. He goes to
girls like Makoto to get his freak on. :)
> Multiple counts of murder (those zombie came from somewhere and you're
> making it pretty obvious who did the deed.)
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*pouts* Dammit. I was kind of hoping THAT one would throw people at least a
LITTLE longer. ;_; Ah well. Well spotted!
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