I agree with a few things, the elder gods should not be on our mailing list. The original rather than dub names are preferable, but hardly I think a reason to fail a fic on their own. And finally when did this become a negativity based list?
My thoughts on the story are that it does have an interesting premise. I think that it is a little bit weak in the plot supporting it at the moment. First I doubt you should have all five lose the fight, it makes it very dificult to justify their winning anything later and having just Lita and Ami present would fulfill the plot need. I remember this story from before I am glad to see more of it coming out but you should I think go back over it and consider what needs to be there and what doesnt to fill the plot. More introspection from the charachters would be good as well as fleshing out Lita's "plot" to discover the truth. For example, theres no reason she had to sneak into the building if shes a known visitor, and a more natural reaction from someone of a scientific bent like Ami's would be to deride the book rather than just sit there stonefaced and Lita should be able to figure that out. On 8/30/07, StudioPC <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > > On Aug 30, 2007, at 10:59 AM, The Eternal Lost Lurker wrote: > > > > > Well, just enough survived of chapter 2 to tell me two things: > > > > 1: You're using the dub names, which automatically fails this fic. > > > > 2: What little of it came through displayed a thoroughly uninteresting > > premise. Even if you get the posting bug worked out, I doubt I'd > > have read > > it. > > > > In other words, you might as well leave it all fucked up and > > Cthulu-summoning-ritual looking. It's the best thing this story has > > going > > for it. :) > > > 1. The original version, written many years ago, used the dub names. > Figured I might as well keep it. > > 2. Well it's interesting to me. > > I appreciate the thought, but the last thing anyone needs is an Elder > God in their mailing list. > > --- > .-------Anime/Manga Fanfiction Mailing List--------. > | Administrators - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | > | Unsubscribing - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | > | Put 'unsubscribe' in the subject | > `------------ FAQ URL coming soon.... -------------' > -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... URL: http://www.chez-vrolet.net/pipermail/ffml/attachments/20070904/bad91f92/attachment.htm --- .-------Anime/Manga Fanfiction Mailing List--------. | Administrators - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | | Unsubscribing - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | | Put 'unsubscribe' in the subject | `------------ FAQ URL coming soon.... -------------'
