My first impressions: I liked it, although there were some strange twists.
I kept feeling like I had missed a chapter somewhere between the last bit of "Clients Lie" and this, there's a serious disjointedness to the transition - and it feels deliberate, on a second re-read, especially with the weird mythos tie-ins. I have to wonder, now, how this Naruto would react to something like the Wave Country mission. Seeing in Zabuza's relationship with Haku the eventual evolution of his own with Hinata might be the spark he needs... or it might just confuse him further. Not sure. And the timeframe may not be right, either. Hmm. Interesting, definitely interesting. *pokes you with kunai until you write another chapter of 'The Lie of Night'* -- "This is the price of freedom: Your last pint of blood, ounce of pain, drop of courage. Paid in advance." ----- Original Message ----- From: Kevin Callahan <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> Date: Tuesday, January 22, 2008 3:43 am Subject: Re: [FFML] [Naruto]Memories Lie chapters 1-2, the 3rd story arc of People Lie [2nd try] To: The Fanfiction Mailing List <[email protected]> > Entirely out of the blue, I will give some feedback when I get off > work in a few hours. > > On Jan 22, 2008 4:36 PM, The Eternal Lost Lurker > <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > > No, no, it's cool. Like I said, I know you don't owe me shit. > > > > However, it IS a good story that I have legitimate interest in. > And I have a > > huge pile of such stories that I just haven't gotten around to, > because over > > the last...call it 8 weeks or so, I haven't really been doing > much that > > involved fanfiction at all. My time has been--and still is-- > largely taken up > > by efforts to slog through the massive backlog of anime and > video games I > > have piling up. > > > > But lately, I have been TRYING to pick my way back into my > fanfic backlog, > > just...easing into it with smaller stuff. :) > > > > Anyway...I digress. > > > > > > ================================ > > "Sheik Protein? He's a mean ol' ass, Cid." > > ~~*~~ > > The Eternal Lost Lurker > > www.lurkerdrome.com > > > > > > --- > > .-------Anime/Manga Fanfiction Mailing List--------. > > | Administrators - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | > > | Unsubscribing - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | > > | Put 'unsubscribe' in the subject | > > `------------ FAQ URL coming soon.... -------------' > > > > > > -- > Very Respectfully, > Kevin M. Callahan > > "It takes strength to be gentle and kind." - The Smiths, "I Know > It's Over" > > http://www.kickmagnet.com - Violently Attractive Design > > --- > .-------Anime/Manga Fanfiction Mailing List--------. > | Administrators - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | > | Unsubscribing - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | > | Put 'unsubscribe' in the subject | > `------------ FAQ URL coming soon.... -------------' > --- .-------Anime/Manga Fanfiction Mailing List--------. | Administrators - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | | Unsubscribing - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | | Put 'unsubscribe' in the subject | `------------ FAQ URL coming soon.... -------------'
